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Description Do you have any clue how
mesmerizing
you remain?

You're a cryogenic
heart
attack
{encased in flame}
and laced with memory's sweetest secret name

spoken

and winding
icily
down the same

backbone that you freeze
with a fireburn hum;

to feel you breathe
upon my xiphisternum

is like a dream from heaven above

wrapped in an

aquamarine
     pillar
       of
    flame;

"I am so in love with you"
becomes preferred refrain.

(There's something stuck in my head:
it's you and I.)

We cannot be the same,
for we have witnessed
candlelit displays
of come what may;

I will follow you
into the cold of daybreak
painted in shades of

midnight blues
and
velvet grays;

an instant in space
burns brighter than the jealous sun;
meteor showers keep us for hours
until our fears are undone.

[pardon my wandering erratic mind]
[but that moment rests upon a pedestal within the halls of time]
[and Rembrandt's strokes fail to properly describe]
[the furnace depths that rest behind your frozen lake visage]
[that I can't help but ache to kiss]

I exhale
vapors
after taking time to warm your lips

that once purred with unsure frost;
now entwined fingers
cross hearts: a promise
to be lost

wholeheartedly

in thoughts of we;


Let us paint the music;

with your permission I elect to never leave.
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Comments: 207

Karinta [2013-08-19 23:08:56 +0000 UTC]

I love all the rhymes and half-rhymes...

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gliitchlord In reply to Karinta [2013-08-20 03:41:44 +0000 UTC]

thanks!

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Karinta In reply to gliitchlord [2013-08-20 16:26:11 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome!

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avarie-shy [2013-02-10 11:22:04 +0000 UTC]

ohmy, this is absolutely stunning, i had to reread it a few times to really wrap my head around it but i like it that way, every time i reread it i picked up something new. that in my eyes reveals a truely good piece of work, props to you, i love it <3

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gliitchlord In reply to avarie-shy [2013-02-13 02:47:03 +0000 UTC]

i'm glad!

thanks everso.

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Blue-Jays-Sonnet [2010-10-18 00:48:35 +0000 UTC]

Beautiful, I love your style

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gliitchlord In reply to Blue-Jays-Sonnet [2010-10-22 16:24:36 +0000 UTC]

Thanks so much!

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spoems [2010-03-15 15:35:15 +0000 UTC]

it has an erratic charm.

which i really like.

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gliitchlord In reply to spoems [2010-03-20 23:26:04 +0000 UTC]

Thanks. I thrive on being erratic, hahaha.

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Darkpool [2009-08-20 18:23:00 +0000 UTC]

I'm not sure if you meant there to be, but the imagery (that there is) is absolutely awesome. I really enjoyed this!

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gliitchlord In reply to Darkpool [2009-08-20 22:01:44 +0000 UTC]

Sankya!

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19RAD [2009-03-19 04:40:06 +0000 UTC]

Congrats on the DD

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gliitchlord In reply to 19RAD [2009-03-19 08:11:55 +0000 UTC]

Many thanks!

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mirror-image329 [2009-03-18 00:45:28 +0000 UTC]

And as thine eyes skim the page, a fire dancing listesly across my frozen, beating heart.

Sorry, I had to make my repsonce poetic.
I absolutely love this. I like to write my favorite poems on my wall above my bed, and this is going right next to Coleridge's Kubla Khan.

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gliitchlord In reply to mirror-image329 [2009-03-18 06:53:54 +0000 UTC]

Nothing wrong with poetic responses, hahaha. dA is basically built on them.

And you honor me tremendously!

!

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mirror-image329 In reply to gliitchlord [2009-03-19 01:16:51 +0000 UTC]

Oh, the honor is mine, really! ^_^

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oldest-boy [2009-03-17 07:01:44 +0000 UTC]

congrats on the DD; awesome read.

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gliitchlord In reply to oldest-boy [2009-03-17 17:24:49 +0000 UTC]

Glad you think so, and thank you!

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oldest-boy In reply to gliitchlord [2009-03-17 19:09:50 +0000 UTC]

you're welcome./

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gem-gem-gem-gem-gem [2009-03-17 05:43:15 +0000 UTC]

this is amazing.
it's so wonderful how you fit them all together so well!!

faved

it seems like one fluid poem to me, very well done. and i like the italicas and bolds and brackets you put in, gives it more imagry and tone than just words i think.

a DD very well deserved!!!!!!

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gliitchlord In reply to gem-gem-gem-gem-gem [2009-03-17 06:20:08 +0000 UTC]

You are exceptionally kind!

I thank you so much for the support!

mega-

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gem-gem-gem-gem-gem In reply to gliitchlord [2009-03-17 06:30:10 +0000 UTC]

no problems

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darkeneddagger [2009-03-17 05:23:28 +0000 UTC]

Reminded me strongly of beat poetry. It is very well thought out.
*snap snap snap*

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gliitchlord In reply to darkeneddagger [2009-03-17 06:17:14 +0000 UTC]

Interesting link, I hadn't considered it.

I like to at least attempt intricate.

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ashleyx [2009-03-17 04:56:42 +0000 UTC]

WOW.
I fucking love this
mind my french

:heart:

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gliitchlord In reply to ashleyx [2009-03-17 06:16:29 +0000 UTC]

Many thanks!

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Senosis [2009-03-17 04:21:58 +0000 UTC]

You, my friend, are amazing. I only wish I could write as you can.

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gliitchlord In reply to Senosis [2009-03-17 06:14:28 +0000 UTC]

It's always nice to see someone aspire, but always and ever aim higher.

Thanks for the kind words. Keep arting!

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EverlastingEvenstar [2009-03-17 03:57:05 +0000 UTC]

Clever and very flowing... I like it!! Great job Congrats on the DD. (Now I have to go check out some of your other stuff )

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gliitchlord In reply to EverlastingEvenstar [2009-03-17 04:19:40 +0000 UTC]

Greatly appreciated, and many many thanks!

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GabrielleNoelle [2009-03-17 03:56:57 +0000 UTC]

Talented. (:
~ELLE~

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gliitchlord In reply to GabrielleNoelle [2009-03-17 04:19:00 +0000 UTC]

Flattered!

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GabrielleNoelle In reply to gliitchlord [2009-03-17 16:56:39 +0000 UTC]

Congrats, btw.
You really deserved it.
~ELLE~

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gliitchlord In reply to GabrielleNoelle [2009-03-17 17:00:30 +0000 UTC]

I am deeply honored, thanks!

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fe-fantasy93 [2009-03-17 03:20:28 +0000 UTC]

Dear God. How you manage to harness the power of words so well is beyond me. I am astounded.

By the way, congrats on the DD.

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gliitchlord In reply to fe-fantasy93 [2009-03-17 04:17:36 +0000 UTC]

Many thanks!

All I do is what I can, I suppose. I am glad you enjoyed it!

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fe-fantasy93 In reply to gliitchlord [2009-03-17 04:30:29 +0000 UTC]

No self-degradation. It's a beauty if there ever was one.

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IAmPhoenixMoth [2009-03-17 03:06:51 +0000 UTC]

That has got to be the BEST poem I have read in flipping ages. It's so raw and intense and so beautiful.
I love the imagery and the comparisons you used so much.

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gliitchlord In reply to IAmPhoenixMoth [2009-03-17 04:16:32 +0000 UTC]



Wow. I am ridiculously honored!

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IAmPhoenixMoth In reply to gliitchlord [2009-03-17 05:04:21 +0000 UTC]

Oh, no, the honor is definitely mine- I haven't read a poem that affected me that strongly in some time.

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gliitchlord In reply to IAmPhoenixMoth [2009-03-17 05:55:46 +0000 UTC]

Here's to many more in the future.

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IAmPhoenixMoth In reply to gliitchlord [2009-03-17 06:00:25 +0000 UTC]

I've already found another. I commented it.

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gliitchlord In reply to IAmPhoenixMoth [2009-03-17 06:07:55 +0000 UTC]

I hope you know I meant "many more in the future that aren't necessarily mine". Otherwise my comment just sounds...annoying.

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IAmPhoenixMoth In reply to gliitchlord [2009-03-17 06:29:06 +0000 UTC]

ROFL.
It didn't sound annoying to me.
It just sounded like a promise that I intended to see you follow through on, which is why I've made it in my mission over the next two days to read your entire gallery and comment where I can.

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gliitchlord In reply to IAmPhoenixMoth [2009-03-17 17:01:42 +0000 UTC]

Holey guacamoley.

You are tenacious.

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IAmPhoenixMoth In reply to gliitchlord [2009-03-17 21:10:41 +0000 UTC]

More like obsessive.

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Emerune [2009-03-17 02:39:51 +0000 UTC]

Very beautiful. I loved it. ^^

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gliitchlord In reply to Emerune [2009-03-17 04:13:53 +0000 UTC]

I am certainly glad that you did!

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bellejar [2009-03-17 02:03:36 +0000 UTC]

*sigh*
you know when words are strung together just right because they leave without any left of your own.
lovely.

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gliitchlord In reply to bellejar [2009-03-17 04:13:01 +0000 UTC]

Moments work quite the same way.



Glad you enjoyed it!

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