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PsychoStreakProny [2012-03-18 18:53:18 +0000 UTC]
.... I FEEL FUCKING GUILTY ATTEMPTING TO JERK OFF TO THIS.... Fuck man, why is it with diaper porn stuff that its always flat out badly written smut made around certain trigger words with the sole intent to get people off.... or really well written and thought out stories that I feel guilty trying to jerk to??
But seriously.... How the fuck do i become like you? XD What superpower do you posess that allows you to focus and get such wonderful stories out of your brainmind!? Because all I can do is occasionally get out like a 2-3 page shit-fic.
You've constructed a fully functioning world around your idea, orchestrated it beautifully, making things not seem to go too fast or to slow, giving just enough detail...
Oh, aside from it being awesome, I think i found a tiny flub ""Not that's it's a problem, but I'll eat the greens..."" the surrounding dialogue suggests that she doesn't want to eat the greens (ie; " "But babies have to eat their greens, it's good for them." ") so I'm not sure what's going on here, seems like a minor error though to me.
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GlitchyProductions In reply to PsychoStreakProny [2012-03-18 19:13:52 +0000 UTC]
DAYUM!
I better fix that little flunk immediately! Thanks for the review on this chapter and I love the advice. You make me feel writing the next chapter and the ending right now. (All though I just got finished with another chapter for another story)
I promise you that I will try not to disappoint when it comes to the ending, it'll be all bittersweet and nothing seriously bad will happen. I can promise you that.
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SashaDrakovi In reply to GlitchyProductions [2012-03-31 17:10:36 +0000 UTC]
I too would like to correct you a bit on a problem in your story. "Tossed and turned" is typically associated with sleeping people. I feel the proper words would be. "Turned it over in her hands." just merely some observations,
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suescungaray [2012-03-18 14:14:37 +0000 UTC]
Applejack has a.......WHAT?!!
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GlitchyProductions In reply to suescungaray [2012-03-18 16:06:57 +0000 UTC]
I set the story in a Humanized world, all of our favorite ponies are now Humans and I changed some of the characters relationships.
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GlitchyProductions In reply to AndytheB-Artist [2012-05-01 20:05:32 +0000 UTC]
It's kind of weird, but I used the designs from 's human MLP humans. She does some really good work.
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suescungaray In reply to GlitchyProductions [2012-03-18 16:13:15 +0000 UTC]
Oh,...that explains a lot of things....except the fact that Big Maac had an orgy with Applejack...and she had a Daughter!! DX
But I understand that you're making an adaptation, and I like that. Keep going!! It's getting more and more interesting! XD
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suescungaray In reply to GlitchyProductions [2012-03-18 20:53:00 +0000 UTC]
So....went you said "Applejack's daughter"...you meant....Applebloom?!!! DX Don't tell me the same goes for Rarity and Sweetie Belle!!! DX
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GlitchyProductions In reply to suescungaray [2012-03-18 21:57:18 +0000 UTC]
Yeah, same goes with Spike (although being adopted.)
Scootaloo is left alone, she is Cheerilee's daughter.
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GlitchyProductions In reply to caliguy50 [2012-04-04 09:50:54 +0000 UTC]
In my head-canon she is Cheerilee's little sister.
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