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Published: 2007-05-11 14:44:45 +0000 UTC; Views: 2920; Favourites: 51; Downloads: 50
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Eh, I'll go ahead and scrap this, since voting is over.
If you'd like to see what my comic To Catch a Human is all about: [link]
Now that you've seen it, I'm sure you're thinking "OH GOD YES, the world NEEDS this comic available for purchase!" And you would totally be correct.
So, here's how you can help!
1. Register an account on the dimestoreproductions forum. Once registered, you'll get an email with an activation link so you can start posting. Also, whatever name you put for your first/last name, it'll show up when you post. SO for the name you can just use an alias.
2. Go to the "Small Press Idol 2007" forum area, then find the latest "To Catch a Human" thread. Or click here: [link]
3. Reply with a "YES" vote in the current round thread (you have to say yes somewhere in the reply) : [link]
Tell your family and friends to vote too!
+ Materials +
Copic Multiliner 0.1 pen
Canson marker paper
Copic Sketch and Neopiko markers
Sakura glitter gel pens
Some white ink pen thing that took FOREVER to dry.
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Comments: 21
lol!!! I vote yes!!! I LOVE the art! 
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So very pretty, and there's now an irony to this picture...
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Couldn't you just make it into a web comic, then wait for enough people to take notice, then get it published with a bunch of minions who know how to talk with big/small businesses?
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It's always a possibility for later, but this could get me a comic issue deal. D:
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I say this, because I'm too lazy to create an account there, vote, then praise you.
And I'm too lazy to ignore this, as well.
Yes, I'm too lazy to not be a hypocrite, amongst other things.
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You have such graceful flowing lines and great color selection, great piece.
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I voted! Very cute image! I love your style and colors you use!
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I saw that you voted!
I've started storyboarding for round 3! I'm trying to get all 12 pages storyboarded first, then pick the 3 pages I want to do for the next round.
I'm thinking for this "issue", it'll cover when Tempest first arrives in the human world.
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Wow 
...Oh yes, about the picture 
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Thank you! I think it's a different spin on a witch/school story, and I hope I somehow make it all the way to round 4!
Well...that picture is my- I mean, "Tempest"'s dream.
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No offense, I say nay....sorry there are alot of weakness' in this... and over use of things that have already been beat to death. Like the overly popular rich girl who has twins who do funky dances to announce her arrival, its a weak routine on that route, it sounds like every other story that deals with school.
I'm not saying the art is bad, its alot more to do with the over use of the same old same old stuff, the school conflict is not at all believable. Interesting title, interesting concept of the to catch a human, but there are points you really didn't get acrossed right, and the Razzle girl is too pink, girly, and weird at the sametime. Some of the colors need a little toning down... theres nothing wrong with colorful...theres something wrong with cotton candy color.
Otherwise nice job, I don't get the contest, but nice job.
BTW I did not vote.
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Thanks for taking the time to critique my entry.
I didn't think many school stories used twins like that? O_o
It is like a typical school story in the sense that there's a popular rich kid and an unpopular girl that wants to have friends, but it's the way it's told that makes it different. What other story uses catching a rare creature (in this case a human) to become popular in school? (I can't think of any off the top of my head)
Could you describe how the school conflict isn't believable? XD;;
Color-wise, I typically use bright colors/pastel shades/crazy colors when I color anything so that's mostly a personal preference thing.
Tempest, Pazzle, and the twins are all witches, so I wanted to make them unique and different from average humans. I used fashion, color, and hair styling to really show the difference. Also, Pazzle's favorite color is pink (don't think I put that in the description though...I was in a hurry typing it) and her parents love pink as well so I did use a lot of that color. XD;;
Is there anything you would change if you were doing it? Suggestions on how to improve are always welcome.
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Well you did great on some of those outfits ect, don't get me wrong you did do a good job on those. The pink may make me a lil sick but thats just me, lol I'm not a pink fan.
As for the twins, its not the twins persay, but the popular kids and idiots dancing around them and singing as shown in 'Fruits Basket' those kids that are all 'Prince YUGI!' ect, there are a couple other shows, I just can't think of their names, I have a major headache right now and am tired, sue me, lol.
As for the school for 1 thing you can't just teach because they're out of teachers you have to be acredited... (SP?) you have to go to school to become a teacher, even for Kindergarten. I also find it hard to believe that no one listens to the teacher but they all jump when Emily (was that her name?) says jump!
I dont' know maybe if you gave her a bit more control over the class and perhaps left Emily and that other girl (Sorry I'm horrible with names, the one that likes crayons) to be the trouble makers, it might be a little more believable. Sure kids are hyper active, but most of them *respect* adults, merely because we're bigger. LOL I have 4 nieces and 2 nephews... I can imagine what a class full of them might feel like.
I would say to make the Pazzle maybe a little less influential over the school kids and their thoughts too, sure I can see a crowd being jerks to Tempest, but the whole place? Besides Tempest doesn't look like she would be that hated, she seems like an outgoing person to me.
I hope these ideas help you out a little and if you want to use them, I'm not going to sue you, its just thoughts and pointers on what I think would make it a better story. Oh and I'd also watch out of that over weird stuff that Anime tends to do... you know what I mean, when someone gets angry... thats just weird... I hate that, I can't help it LOL!
Feel free to critque my work if you like, I love learning, just make sure to say how much you love it 
I really hope I helped out with the pointers, I dont' mind a little chaos here and there in the kindgergarten class... but all out chaos isn't going to be believable, and the parents aren't teachers, they aren't acredited.
I guess I'll stop blathering for now.
Michelle
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Ahh, I see. The announcing part is based on royal fanfare throughout history. Pazzle's family is wealthy and has status, and she expects to be announced as someone of high ranking would. The twins' family isn't as wealthy but has some status, and they jump at the chance to follow in Pazzle's shadow. The twins do look up to Pazzle on some level, but part of it is for their own personal gain. The twins can't play instruments as typical fanfare requires, so they perform a dance instead. XD
In the competition I could only show 5 characters for round 2, but now that round 2 has passed I can show designs and bios for some of the other characters.
In regards to the school, the parents aren't teachers. I think you might've misread it. XD;;; Miss Lemmy is the kindergarten teacher for one of the kindergarten classes (a relatively small class of about 15 students). The school Miss Lemmy teaches at would normally employ a classroom assistant to aid in the care of the children, but instead they rely on parent volunteers to fill that role. Miss Lemmy can teach the class herself, but a volunteer to help pick up/clean up after the children would help Miss Lemmy keep control of the class.
Emily and Zoey are the main trouble makers, but they encourage the other kids to make trouble too...to some extent. Emily does tell the other children what to do and if they refuse, she has Zoey either destroy something of their's by drawing on it/breaking it or tackle them. Zoey listens to Emily not only because they're friends, but because Zoey is then able to take/use the other children's art supplies and pretty much get her way. When the teacher is around, however, Emily and Zoey do their best to LOOK innocent. XD Emily is pretty clever for a 6 year old, so she's basically the "brains" and Zoey is basically the "muscle". Because of all of this, Emily is then able to get "perks" (like an extra snack or the permanent "classroom helper") by getting the class to calm down after secretly getting them riled up in the first place. It's a little deep, but... XD;;
The children don't respect Miss Lemmy as much partly because of how Emily and Zoey are able to boss them unnoticed, and because Miss Lemmy graduated a year prior with her teaching degree and hasn't gotten the hang of teaching so many children yet. Miss Lemmy is a sweet, caring woman and isn't quite as authoritative as she should be. She wants to catch Emily and Zoey in the act, but something always happens to keep that from happening. She knows they're the main cause, but she can't do anything without proof and with the other children taking the blame instead.
In the magical realm, because of Pazzle's family's wealth and status, she's able to get more perks and subsequently has more influence over the others in their magic school class. As a child, you're going to be nicer and follow the person that gives you something over the one that has little to offer (usually). Tempest isn't bad, but Pazzle hates Tempest over an incident that occurred a year prior and convinced everyone else to dislike Tempest. I honestly haven't decided on the incident, but they used to be pals and something happened that caused a rift between them.
It's a little hard to explain in depth the feelings, history, and personalities that influence how the characters interact without writing a novel! XD
I actually don't watch much anime. O_o I mostly read manga, and even then it's usually not the most popular manga. XD;; (Sugar Rune, Azumanga Daioh, and Deathnote would be the exceptions I think). I read a 1 chapter sample of fruits basket and didn't care for the story or art, so I don't really know much about that one.
I know of some anime stereotypes, but I'm not sure exactly what you mean by weirdness when angry. Example link please? XD
Actually, I rarely critique other people because I either don't know what to say or don't know if they really want it. Some people ask for comments, but are really only looking for praise.
Your critique really just made me think even more about the story and really reinforced the need to be careful in making sure everything makes sense and is explained well.
Also, the class isn't always chaotic, but it does happen more often than an average class. XD;;
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I didn't realize you said class room helpers... that part I did miss, the wierdness I'mt alking about is where the person doesn't even look like themselves at is doing something odd like this [link] its horrible!
Thats just one example and I dont' see how it gets chosen, (shrugs)
I'm glad I made you think so more thats always good, now that you've explained it a little better thats not bad, I'm not a comic person truth be told, but I'm trying to learn because I'd love to do some 'comic' type scenes with some of my drawings, just so I can kinda convie a story not just a moment.
You know she could catch Zoey and Emily at it if she convinced one of the children to help her out, and to not obey them when they tell the child to do something... then she coudl catch them doing it.
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Oh that is too cute. It's like she's begging for her life. 
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Does that mean you'll vote? 
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