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Published: 2007-11-02 04:54:28 +0000 UTC; Views: 802; Favourites: 7; Downloads: 14
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Description It was a little over a month and a half ago
when you told me you don't love me
anymore
on the phone
and winter hadn't sat on the mountains yet.
But now I can see my breath
when I'm outside on the street
and the shops are turning off their lights
and I still wanna burn
that phone.
I want to feel my knuckles crack
on the face of every person, every friend,
who tells me
"It'll get better."
"There'll be others."
"You're young."
I want to hit them
and you
and me.
Because I think they are probably right
and that makes the whole thing
seem even more goddamn stupid.
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Comments: 12

bratzgirl16 [2010-02-04 22:17:28 +0000 UTC]

in the end, don't we all just want to believe that we're right? Very nicely done, in my opinion.

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yourbonesmymirror [2009-12-05 23:13:19 +0000 UTC]

Of course.
The thing that hurts more than anything is knowing that you'll get over it.
It just... stings. =\
Meh. Good poem, though, even though you don't like poetry. Or poets.
>.>
<.<
-Leaves-

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MysterMism [2009-12-05 22:36:34 +0000 UTC]

whoa. That's great. You manage to express the emotion perfectly, and so succintly, and directly. I would rly struggle to phrase it right, etc. Well done. Its great. And as far as not liking poets goes, i'd say u write like one. Like a good one.

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theunbeingdead [2009-12-05 22:26:09 +0000 UTC]

clean. you have a nice, no nonsense way of getting your ideas across that appeals to me.

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Almost-Certain [2009-12-05 11:31:17 +0000 UTC]

I dislike poems that rhyme.

I hate poems that rhyme.

But this... This is a good poem.

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aboutapixie [2007-11-12 02:47:11 +0000 UTC]

i'm going through some relationship problems. cheers to being upset. you are like a modern day bukowski hah

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guiltywhiteboy In reply to aboutapixie [2007-11-12 04:31:37 +0000 UTC]

that is basically the greatest compliment i could get

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aboutapixie In reply to guiltywhiteboy [2007-11-12 06:18:46 +0000 UTC]

i'm glad i could give it to you

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ohmydahling [2007-11-06 08:04:58 +0000 UTC]

It's like really cold campbells soup.

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guiltywhiteboy In reply to ohmydahling [2007-11-08 23:53:18 +0000 UTC]

it's like kissing a tuberculosis ward

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ohmydahling In reply to guiltywhiteboy [2007-11-13 02:57:04 +0000 UTC]

now that's a comment that sticks.

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mrs-sparrow-depp [2007-11-02 05:41:02 +0000 UTC]

I especially dig the line about winter sitting on mountains.

I hate when people tell me that as well. Let me be upset over the loss and I'll move on, I don't need their assy comments...and often times its by people who haven't been through it.

Hang in there, kid, and keep writing. Its amazing.

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