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Haruspexx β€” The Rat in My Ribcage
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Published: 2015-01-23 18:21:05 +0000 UTC; Views: 504; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 0
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Description I feel it deep in my chest cavity, shifting restlessly in the warm, damp darkness.
It burrowed underneath my right scapula, searching for what I do not know.

It quietly gnaws at the bone, and I can discern the tiniest traces of movement as it vigilantly stops at the meow of a nearby cat.
Once the danger has past, I feel the pressure as it steadies itself against a rib, and tests the tensile strength of the tissues encasing it.

Small claws tear into the muscle, and with each pass, the nerves send synchronized cascades of pinpricks down my back. Every so often, I feel a sudden, swift kick to my lung. It is persistently fighting the dense tissues, digging ever deeper into the cavernous expanse of my ribcage.

There is a sharp stab of pain as it hits a nerve traveling down to my kidney. I shake myself, trying to deter it from continuing, and for a brief moment it lies in wait, listening to the steady beating of my heart.

Again, it tears relentlessly at what is holding it back, and the nerves on either side of my body react in turn. A slight pain to the left that elicits a flinch, a sudden involuntary jerk of my head... the nerves are ablaze with confusion, trying desperately to decipher what is happening.

With an terrible final slice, it has found its way in.

I feel a weight on my lung, making it's way down until it has found a soft spot by my stomach. It gently nestles itself into an empty space, and all I am left with is the erratic dance of impulses down my nerves as it falls into a deep slumber.

Now I will have to wait.
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Comments: 7

AriesMelody [2016-11-10 14:22:59 +0000 UTC]

It's so fucking disturbing... Yet I love it. I have a strange sensation in my entire body now... Good. It happens only when I read / see something body-related that makes me feel like I'm in that situation.

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Haruspexx In reply to AriesMelody [2016-11-11 02:03:43 +0000 UTC]

That's exactly what I was going for xD

I always wanted to write things that were so visceral that the reader could get into the mindset to get the most out of it, so it makes me happy to hear that!
And I'm glad you like it, too!

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AriesMelody In reply to Haruspexx [2016-11-11 18:08:23 +0000 UTC]

I whould like to write more gorey fanfictions, but probably my parents whould think I need some serious help... Wich I think I need most of the time.

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Haruspexx In reply to AriesMelody [2016-11-11 19:59:46 +0000 UTC]

Honestly, I think most people need help, so you're not alone, friend.
We all have weird mental issues; it's just that some people don't show it quite as much as others do. And the fact that you're willing to accept that there's something off about you actually means you're way closer to dealing with it than a lot of people are, which is a good thing.

Writing gore is a good outlet for that kind of stuff! There's nothing wrong with it, unless people get too obsessed with it, so I think you're fine c:

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AriesMelody In reply to Haruspexx [2016-11-12 12:43:21 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, probably you're right! I'll try writing something!

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SleazyGreenTorso [2015-01-17 06:03:45 +0000 UTC]

It is pretty creepy
Terrifying reallyΒ 

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Haruspexx In reply to SleazyGreenTorso [2015-01-17 10:12:16 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, it skeeved me out a bit as I was writing it. I guess I was in an Invasion of the Bodysnatchers/The Thing kind of mindset.
But, for a horror writer that's encouraging to hear, so thank you c;

I just hope it didn't creep you out too much.

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