Comments: 48
Constance-fire [2015-02-23 00:58:09 +0000 UTC]
That last line oh my god Mickey you're such a little sass
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cRaZy9219 [2013-08-23 18:17:55 +0000 UTC]
BAD ASS <3333
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SanctusNocturne [2013-07-22 20:24:51 +0000 UTC]
am i the only one here who couldn't read this in Mickey's voice? but in CAPTAIN jack sparrows?
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mickeylover223 [2013-05-23 23:41:10 +0000 UTC]
i did enjoy it and i hope that you continue to write such enjoyable stories like this one
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Jzi20 [2013-04-15 20:31:31 +0000 UTC]
War and peace
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bluetita [2012-12-02 01:51:08 +0000 UTC]
i.... LOVE THIS STORY!!! I'M GONNA STAY ALL NIGHT READING IT!!!
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hypermegatailsfan In reply to bluetita [2012-12-02 01:56:23 +0000 UTC]
XD That might take a while. it's not going anywhere! take your time!
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bluetita In reply to hypermegatailsfan [2012-12-02 02:34:54 +0000 UTC]
ok, I think it will take more than a night to read it all, but I will try!
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Joaleana [2012-10-02 10:33:57 +0000 UTC]
I LOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOVE IT!
I'm hooked!
Poor Mickey, going to hurl!
I also loved how he didn't even look up from the Diary when Minnie confronted him. "Little girls shouldn't play with pea shooters." What a jackass, and yet I LOVE IT!
GOING ON TO THE NEXT CHAPTER!
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BlueRoseKelly [2012-09-22 05:32:23 +0000 UTC]
Poor Minnie is having a very bad day, but in all fairness she kind of brings it on herself.
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Furgemancs In reply to hypermegatailsfan [2012-03-31 12:47:50 +0000 UTC]
welcome^^ and just finished the second one a moment ago hehe XD I'm addicted to it^^
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wispy-mind [2012-02-21 00:27:01 +0000 UTC]
I love this!!!!!! *_*
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aenglestudio [2012-02-12 19:05:29 +0000 UTC]
Uhhhh ruuuuuuude, my ideas are not bizarre, I'll have you know.
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Rainbow-Space-Bubble [2012-02-11 02:02:27 +0000 UTC]
I don't care if the description was cheesy (lol); I ENJOYED IT ANYWAY!
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Bre112 [2012-02-09 23:04:47 +0000 UTC]
i absolutely love this! I usually find fanfics annoying, and sometimes to many details make it hard to read and understand. scrap those opinions. i grew up with these characters and ur stories put a fresh new twist on them. i love ur details, instead of making it harder to understand you make it sooo easy! i can really imagine whats happening and u never know what to expect next! I love this! I love the way u write, it all flows and makes me want(actually need) to read more! i am a fan.
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ToonsGirl [2012-01-31 02:09:28 +0000 UTC]
I have been searching high and low for some good Mickey/Minnie fan fics, when finally fahmad27 came upon a private and a pirate...
Wow! I'm really loving it! I like how you put a lot of description in your fan fic. You wrote it well to give me an idea of what the characters look like and at the same time, it was not overwhelming.
I can relate to Minnie in this fan fic. There was a time in my life when I wanted to chase my dreams but at the same time, I wanted to make my parents happy.
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starsailor5 [2011-09-18 13:20:39 +0000 UTC]
cool, she caught Mickey. How's she going to get out of this situation. XD
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Purple33 [2011-07-17 17:11:38 +0000 UTC]
awww... minnie and mickey <3
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PrayerGirl1 [2011-07-08 03:37:05 +0000 UTC]
Love the first chapter!! So cute!
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hypermegatailsfan In reply to Tell-Me-Lies [2011-06-24 16:09:07 +0000 UTC]
I'm still surprised how much you like it, but I won't question it. I'm just glad that their personalities ring true, and that you enjoy it. Thanks again for beta-ing my work, it means a lot to me.
yay you forever. ♥
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bobtheenchantedone [2011-06-22 15:35:17 +0000 UTC]
All right, now I can finally take the time to comment on this thing.
Loved it.
The end.
Okay, I kid; I have more to say. I thought the foreshadowing/peek at the future was done rather well; that can easily be heavy-handed or annoying in some way, but you pulled it off. I also like the characterization of Minnie. Of the two mice, she's more likely to be portrayed as the perfect one while Mickey is the bumbler, so I'm happy to see her frustrated with her own failures. I too enjoyed little touches like the passcode to get into the museum. And pirate Mickey... what can I say about pirate Mickey? Words may fail me here. It is easier to imagine his voice now, and it seems to fit him. His casual demeanor, even when confronted with a pistol, is fantastic. His determination to not hurt Min, even when he could have easily escaped if he was willing to, is adorable.
Can't think of anything more to say at the moment aside from WELL DONE, NOW HURRY UP AND WRITE MORE. : )
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bobtheenchantedone In reply to hypermegatailsfan [2011-06-23 00:39:30 +0000 UTC]
AHHH CAN'T WAIT FOR THE NEXT CHAPTER
Also, I don't know if it was easily noticeable that why I had no words to say about Mickey was because he was so. freaking. amazing. GAH.
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Ortensia12 [2011-06-22 02:10:20 +0000 UTC]
Reaction: 8D
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vampire-angel13 [2011-06-21 23:58:49 +0000 UTC]
It would be absolutely amazing if you and twisted-wind got together and turned Pirates vs Privates into a full fledged comic. I would then be the happiest person alive. <3
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Elera [2011-06-21 14:18:00 +0000 UTC]
*Having just finally finished, is speechless and hiccuping with utter glee*
First of all, you have nothing to thank me for, you brilliant, brilliant lass. I had nothing to do with this amazing story, and the credit of its conception goes entirely to you. And what a wonderful story it is so far! You're developing everything at a nice, smooth pace, I could easily see each of the characters in my mind and hear them as well, and that goes for everything that was going on...I swear reading your words is like chomping into a big, juicy peach. Always smooth like butter and satisfying like a full course meal. It just makes one feel complete, ya know?
I don't know much about Millie so far but she sounds like a dear. I love how you included Captain Amelia and Gadget in there, their roles are perfect for this story. Several little details really stuck out to me, like the passcode, like I said, but also how you actually let Scrooge do a little fighting, or that Minnie is the only one in a skirt because of her rank, stuff like that. This universe is so well thought out and put together that I can't wait to find out what happens next! Now I just need to go hunt down those other storybits featuring it because damn girl, I love this like heck.
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hypermegatailsfan In reply to Elera [2011-06-21 14:33:50 +0000 UTC]
I still feel I should thank you, because your friendship and encouragement really does mean a lot to me, I ought to thank you more often. I'm glad the development is going well, I sometimes worry I go too fast. Your metaphors make me terribly hungry, though.
I'm also glad you like Millie, she's going to be a very important little dear, you wait and see. I don't know if Gadget will play any bigger roles than this, but Amelia is definitely going to be a major player in this story. As I've told you, Scrooge's lovelives will play a role as well (ugh so many subplots IT'S INSANE), and it is Scroogie, of course he's gunna try and defend his treasures. As for the skirt, that was actually somewhat 's idea, when she came up with the outfit design, that the other girls would wear pants but Minnie was the only one wearing a skirt. I just came up with the logic behind it. Don't worry about the other bits, as always take your time and do as you please.
Thank you so much for reading this and telling me what you think. ♥
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LadyOfOnyx [2011-06-21 04:20:48 +0000 UTC]
I think cheesiness is a good thing when it's used to describe an epic fic revolving around everyone's favorite mice. ;D
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RiskPig [2011-06-21 04:19:50 +0000 UTC]
THANK YOU FOR THIS!
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emochick9785 [2011-06-21 03:42:13 +0000 UTC]
YES!!!! that's just about all i have to say.
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Ortensia12 [2011-06-21 02:52:40 +0000 UTC]
If you get writers block or need characters you may use these ones.A little bit of info on them: each girl is specialized in certain type of fighting or weapons,here is the list of what they are skilled in.Each of the girls are master acrobats
Korra and Ortensia are skilled bloodbender (they can control a persons blood during the full moon) they are also skilled in Dual Dao swords.
Mircalla&Minnie are skilled in chi blocking (they can disable a pressure point and paralyze someone)
Dahlia&Daisy are skilled in knife throwing (they use dart arrows,and a different variety of other ones and a sais)
Anna,Flora,and Raven
are skilled in hook swords (the are swords the a curved top)
Clarabelle,Scarlet,and Elvira are skilled in four types of martial arts like Ti Chi,Hun Gar,Northern Shaolin Kung Fu,and Ba Gua.
Each of the girls are able bend of one the elements based on the month they were born in:
Autumn-Air
Winter-Water
Spring-Earth
Summer-Fire
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Ortensia12 [2011-06-21 02:16:36 +0000 UTC]
Wow.... that was cool! also here is the plot of my fan fiction of Pirate vs Private: The Midnight warriors a group of elite young women,come to Britain for a visit since they are from the N.A.V.Y,their leader Korra von Stroussen a 18 year old cat (in human years) and her other leader Ortensia and her sisters Mircalla and Dahlia are also in the group along with her friend Raven,Anna,Scarlet,Elvira,Flora (Fanny).They soon recruit Daisy,Minnie,Clarabelle,also Millie and Captain Amelia is soon the third leader.At Minnie's engagement party the pirates are there and attack,soon its a huge battle and Mircalla is taken hostage by Mickey.
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