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Published: 2009-10-06 02:17:13 +0000 UTC; Views: 136; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 3
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Description my fingers have webs, clear
film formed of diffuse
parts of me, that perchance
by fate, grow to a name
but in my sloth are sent
to be swallowed down

that same and sultry drain
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innerasylum [2009-10-07 15:34:39 +0000 UTC]

My first reaction was "it needs more". and I was absolutely wrong.

The fact that it's done before you can really get into it is what really makes it.

Your words are always so poignantly strung together. Very economic use of both the little words and the less commonly used ones.

but it's lacking something. I've been trying to figure it out for like ten minutes, but I gotta send this critique sometime, so I guess we can forget it.

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ImirNik In reply to innerasylum [2009-10-09 00:51:39 +0000 UTC]

lol, thank you I wish you could think of what its missing though i really enjoy your insight

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innerasylum In reply to ImirNik [2009-10-09 19:18:05 +0000 UTC]

I might just be stoned witless, but I think it may have to do with your confusion about/lack of- now this is where my limited vocabulary makes it difficult- personal alignment(?) which permeates most of what comes out of you.

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ImirNik In reply to innerasylum [2009-10-09 23:26:50 +0000 UTC]

I'd say thats extremly accurate, and alittle scary to have people notice but ah well.

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innerasylum In reply to ImirNik [2009-10-10 00:34:15 +0000 UTC]

Don't worry. To borrow that little phrase; "takes one to know one".

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ImirNik In reply to innerasylum [2009-10-10 00:43:31 +0000 UTC]

damn your cool

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obsidianEMOtion [2009-10-06 21:38:13 +0000 UTC]

Wonderful as always. - I'm just happy to know you're still alive...

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ImirNik In reply to obsidianEMOtion [2009-10-06 23:25:12 +0000 UTC]

lol, just barely

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obsidianEMOtion In reply to ImirNik [2009-10-07 01:35:12 +0000 UTC]

Call me some time... I haven't heard from you in forever... I miss you. :C

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Kyrian72 [2009-10-06 02:31:06 +0000 UTC]

It seems a lot less.... dark or dramtic compared to some of your others. But I like it!

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ImirNik In reply to Kyrian72 [2009-10-06 02:33:37 +0000 UTC]

thanks

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Kyrian72 In reply to ImirNik [2009-10-06 02:35:17 +0000 UTC]

No prob! It's good to see more of your work!

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homeobox [2009-10-06 02:27:45 +0000 UTC]

when i was younger, i used to force all the energy and waste i kept inside myself into my fingers and when i closed my hands i could feel the pressure between them. it was rather like webs.

i cannot express without more effort than i have right now how i relate to your writings,but i do, and it's nice.
i like this one. it seems more....conscious than some others? i don't think that's the right word at all but i don't really know what is

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ImirNik In reply to homeobox [2009-10-06 02:32:25 +0000 UTC]

im flattered, and i hope it is more conscious

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