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Wolfman-053 [2014-05-15 17:25:23 +0000 UTC]
This is a well written story.
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IncredibleIntruder In reply to Wolfman-053 [2014-05-15 17:55:06 +0000 UTC]
Thanks. I did try to combine some of the elements from both series without relying too much on their specific lore and I think it paid off.
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Convoy85 [2014-03-25 03:44:17 +0000 UTC]
''This be what I call a chakra slave gem. By placing it in yer navel, I'll block all the unnecessary chakra flow, revert some and add newer ones to make sure you be the best slave ye can be.''
I'm sorry, but when I read this, I can only hear Ben Stein over it going, "This is what I plan to do: I have in my possession a stone of some sort that, when I place it in that little crevice in your stomach, will essentially turn you into a dancer for my viewing pleasure, because if there's one thing that's not creepy at all, it's a much older person watching a young woman fall under his command and dance in a perverted way for personal excitement."
Such is the way of most hypnosis stories. Which brings me to this: , what do you think would happen if someone walked in on a story like that and tried to stop it?
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IncredibleIntruder In reply to Convoy85 [2014-03-25 13:51:39 +0000 UTC]
Pretty much what happens next in the story, which means that the person would receive a beating or at the very least the lesson he has coming to him.
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SlyStrike [2014-02-19 00:44:25 +0000 UTC]
Nice story, like the ending.
Would love to see what would happen if Naruto got his hands on those gems.
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IncredibleIntruder In reply to GoodKittyNyanchan [2014-02-18 05:00:40 +0000 UTC]
I'm glad you think so. It's nice to see that even felines can appreciate stories about pirates, ninjas and belly-dancing.
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IncredibleIntruder In reply to GoodKittyNyanchan [2014-02-18 05:20:44 +0000 UTC]
''Out-there'' to me means awesome creativity and a willingness to open one's mind, so I'll take that comparison as high praise.
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SpaceShipEarth [2014-02-18 04:29:52 +0000 UTC]
Nice crossover
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