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Published: 2005-12-01 16:16:22 +0000 UTC; Views: 67; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 0
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Description Thoughts

Uncontrolled, like kids screaming in the park.
Hidden, like the closeness of the dark.

Focused, with prismatic concentration.
Resolving, like a flood of dedication.

Scattered, like the feathers in a storm.
Broken, like the promises now torn.

Capricious, teasing memories from the past.
Soulful, like the love that never lasts.

Intertwining, weaving guilt into the shame.
Relenting, justifying your own blame.

Seeking, to atone and make amends.
Curving, like a road with many bends.

Sealing, like a lid that shuts them tight.
Doubting, that perhaps you were not right.

Slinking, like a predatory beast.
Slavering, hollow-bellied at the feast.

Forgiving, like a blessing high from God.
Admonishing, like a parent with a rod.

Jealous, like the green-eyed monster howl.
Envious, forces out reluctant scowl.

Knowing, like the promises we made.
Remembering, like the flowers that we laid.

Softly, like an understanding hug.
Vicious, like emotion-wrenching tug.

Regretting, for the things we had not done.
Closure, like the dying of the sun.

Sadness, for the things we never said.
Accepting, that all thoughts will soon be dead.

Thoughts
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Comments: 8

bouncing-splitpin [2005-12-02 14:30:33 +0000 UTC]

beautiful x

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iwillbeback In reply to bouncing-splitpin [2005-12-02 14:42:21 +0000 UTC]

Nice of you to say so, thanks.

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bluecarolina [2005-12-01 22:49:06 +0000 UTC]

this amazing, like really wow!! but the line reading :
Regretting, for the things we not had done
I think would possibly read better if it was had not done, you may written that by accident or for a really good reason, i am not that observant whatever i am wittering. really wicked poem.
x x x

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iwillbeback In reply to bluecarolina [2005-12-01 23:11:35 +0000 UTC]

Thanks for really flattering comment.
You're right about the line, dammit!, but thanks. Will change it. :rose

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bluecarolina In reply to iwillbeback [2005-12-02 20:23:17 +0000 UTC]

i try!
x x x

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Lotus072 [2005-12-01 16:23:27 +0000 UTC]

Wow, that's powerful. I really like it. The rhyming is brilliant

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iwillbeback In reply to Lotus072 [2005-12-01 17:00:32 +0000 UTC]

Glad you liked it, thanks for sayin so.

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Lotus072 In reply to iwillbeback [2005-12-01 17:47:24 +0000 UTC]

Not a problem

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