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jazz316 In reply to ??? [2017-11-28 20:05:45 +0000 UTC]
I'm glad to see you love it and how the dragon is sweet and caring
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Ciryaquen [2017-11-28 19:36:35 +0000 UTC]
I really fear so much something will happen to Mother Dragoness or to Bryan wen he becomes grown up man fearing that he could take a bad decition to live from his Mom's cave to make his life out from the Dragoness love.... im in such a suspence , im afraid to continue reading!!
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Matthewthewonderer [2016-07-04 04:59:47 +0000 UTC]
That's so beautiful. Bryon seeing his secret gift for him from his real human parents, and his father's last words. It was so... touching.
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9CWAI [2016-06-17 15:28:07 +0000 UTC]
I saw the last sentence and I couldn't help it
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jazz316 In reply to 9CWAI [2016-06-17 15:29:50 +0000 UTC]
Lol glad you love it. thank you.
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9CWAI [2016-06-17 15:27:27 +0000 UTC]
dun dun daaaaaaaaaa!
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Dravakiirm [2013-04-17 16:58:13 +0000 UTC]
amazing! i cant get enough of this book. nice cliff hanger at the end too. loved it!
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siggihar [2013-01-31 18:30:54 +0000 UTC]
there is something off with this... either I'm not noticing it, or that it just hasn't appeared yet...
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Dravakiirm In reply to siggihar [2013-04-17 16:57:07 +0000 UTC]
what kind of off? like part of the plot, or in the writing style/grammar?
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siggihar In reply to Dravakiirm [2013-04-17 20:36:44 +0000 UTC]
something with the storyline
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Dravakiirm In reply to siggihar [2013-04-17 20:47:27 +0000 UTC]
humm....i'm not sure. but i think you are right, there is something different...... i just cant place my finger on it.
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kylepc [2012-10-24 06:55:00 +0000 UTC]
Nice story.
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jazz316 In reply to kylepc [2012-10-24 13:17:13 +0000 UTC]
Thank You Very Much For Liking my story and Faving it too
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games4355 [2012-07-13 19:21:37 +0000 UTC]
I hate Cliffhangers, but I don't hate this Story.
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jazz316 In reply to games4355 [2012-07-14 00:52:15 +0000 UTC]
Thanks lol, you won't have to worry for long
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SassyDragon18 [2012-07-13 02:50:51 +0000 UTC]
Will this someone, that "second dweller" be good to Bryan? and is it a another dragon or no?
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jazz316 In reply to SassyDragon18 [2012-07-13 03:00:56 +0000 UTC]
Well ill Tell you that "He" Will be Good and You'll find out what kind of creature "He" is lol. Be Patient my friend
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ThemeFinland [2012-07-03 18:55:03 +0000 UTC]
Awesome work again with the plot, though leaving it on such a cliffhanger isn't really my cup of tea, but maybe some people enjoy that kind of stuff. Hopefully we won't have to wait too long for the next part, since that cliffhanger is killing me!
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jazz316 In reply to ThemeFinland [2012-07-03 21:19:08 +0000 UTC]
Cliffhangers i love doing and im glad its leaving you in suspend don't worry you won't be for long my friend
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Gothicdragonart [2012-07-02 21:39:16 +0000 UTC]
oh wow this dragon is beautiful, I love what you done with the colors, beautiful
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jazz316 In reply to Gothicdragonart [2012-07-02 22:09:17 +0000 UTC]
the Pic is not mine i found it on google images and used it as a pic for my Story for it represents it the best way
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Gothicdragonart In reply to jazz316 [2012-07-02 22:16:02 +0000 UTC]
oh really hmmm well it represents it very well
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jazz316 In reply to Gothicdragonart [2012-07-02 22:19:49 +0000 UTC]
i know thats why i choose it to be my cover pic for my story
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kaztelli [2012-07-02 18:39:07 +0000 UTC]
i thought it was a pokemon fanart, in a more realistic style. ^^
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ladybuglara [2012-07-02 17:15:14 +0000 UTC]
LOVE this story! *gasp* I'm literally "on the edge of my seat" Just who is this Second Dweller?!? Have mercy and dont keep us waiting too long....
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jazz316 In reply to ladybuglara [2012-07-02 22:08:41 +0000 UTC]
Im Very Happy you love it, You'll See the Second Dweller Soon Enough lol. and Thank You
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e2s86 [2012-07-02 15:56:41 +0000 UTC]
I do not want to be rude but can you hurry up with the next chapter please.
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jazz316 In reply to e2s86 [2012-07-02 17:07:26 +0000 UTC]
ill do my best my friend, i just have been so busy lately
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e2s86 In reply to jazz316 [2012-07-02 18:32:32 +0000 UTC]
ok
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Gewalgon [2012-07-02 13:17:54 +0000 UTC]
Where is the picture from?
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jazz316 In reply to Gewalgon [2012-07-02 17:07:54 +0000 UTC]
i found it on google and decided to use it for it represented my story a bit in a way how it is
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Gewalgon In reply to jazz316 [2012-07-02 17:10:06 +0000 UTC]
Okay, thanks for answer!
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jazz316 In reply to Gewalgon [2012-07-02 17:10:48 +0000 UTC]
your welcome
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Kit-the-rookie In reply to jazz316 [2012-07-02 17:56:29 +0000 UTC]
It bears quite a resembleance to the cover art of Anne Mccaffrey's Pern books.
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jazz316 In reply to Kit-the-rookie [2012-07-02 22:10:38 +0000 UTC]
i see well thats very interesting but my story has nothing to do with the pern books, its just a vivid imaginationed story i thought up and wanted to make and share
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jazz316 In reply to Kit-the-rookie [2012-07-02 22:30:42 +0000 UTC]
Thanks For that and im glad you and so many love my Story
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jazz316 In reply to Kit-the-rookie [2012-07-02 22:47:38 +0000 UTC]
Thank You My Friend. To Tell you im very new at writing and i know my grammer is nothing huge right now. im trying my best to make it all fit and make my story shine and i would be most honored if you might help me out. im trying my best to fix and improve everything but im just not that good yet but im glad people you show concern and encouragement to me and i can't thank you enough for it
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Kit-the-rookie In reply to jazz316 [2012-07-02 22:58:44 +0000 UTC]
Some tips then, from someone whose gone through it (I write too).
1) Take critism well - if people don't like your work, ask them why. That is how you will learn. Praise gets you nowhere.
2) Read. As widely as you feel able and as often as you can. try and find books about the same subject as yours so you know what's been done - if you write something to similar, it'll seem like you're copying. Reading will also improve your grammar, spelling, punctuation and vocabularly. But you will also find you get a feel for the 'flow' of a sentence.
3) Take some time to learn grammar and punctuation marks. Hell, it's boring and no-one should ever say different but the rules are pretty simple once you get to know them and they'll make a big big difference. The internet has plenty of guides to help you out.
4) Practise. It's an obvious one but needs to be said. I started writing properly when I was in school and it wasn't really until I'd finished my univeristy degree that my stories really began to be any good. And that's mainly through practise.
So, keep at it and I hope that helps. There are lots of guides for writing on the internet too, many with exercises and tools you can use to improve. Good luck.
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jazz316 In reply to Kit-the-rookie [2012-07-02 23:08:34 +0000 UTC]
Thank You So Much For All You Help and Inspiration.
I Am a True Begginer i have never written until now. so yes i suck big time but i do want and wish to improve. i want my story to be told to all and many people like yourself love it despite my horrible grammer. again Thank You For Everything and i will take all of your advice and use it well
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arnieboy In reply to Gewalgon [2012-07-02 14:43:51 +0000 UTC]
Anne McAffrey bookcover, Dragonsong or Dragonsinger, one of the two, can't be bothered to go look right now.
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Gewalgon In reply to arnieboy [2012-07-02 15:54:17 +0000 UTC]
Thank you very much!
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DanielCoffey [2012-07-02 09:08:14 +0000 UTC]
Remember to ask permission from the original artist if that picture is not yours. Before you use it.
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