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jazz316 — A Boy, A Tragedy, A New Mother Chapter 4
Published: 2012-07-02 01:17:01 +0000 UTC; Views: 45206; Favourites: 344; Downloads: 128
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Description                  Bryan eagerly un zipped his suitcase, his skin just itching with excitement that had him shaking all over body. Selena Watched him closely chuckling as she watched her Human Son unzip his carrying case and was just as eager herself wanting to see Bryan's Belongings and Treasures. Bryan finished un zipping the suitcase and threw the opening compartment wide open, and what he saw filled him with excitement and joy. Bryan saw all sorts of his stuff that still were within the case that were messy and tossed around due to the fall from the bridge but most were not barely phased from the crash. The Boys's belongings included a small number of clothes. T-Shirts, Shorts, a Swimsuit, a Towel 5 pairs of Socks and Undergarments inside numerous bags. Bryan Took his clothes out of his case and put them right next to it so he could see what else he had in it. He further continued taking more things out that included a small childlike watch that had the Super Hero Spider Man picture inside it around the face of the numbers, a traveling water container and a small stack of pictures that were taken with him and his parents from their vacation from Florida. Bryan also found a First-Aid-Kit that was white like box with the Red Cross Symbol upon the lid of it. Bryan was confused on why that was in his case but then he thought and realized that his deceased parents must've  put it in there for they packed his case for him.
                  The Dragon was so Adored watching her child so happy now having his belongings back to him. Bryan Finished unpacking and looked at everything he pulled out but Selena with her keen eyes noticed a small package in a hidden compartment of the suitcase that Bryan failed to notice for he took out everything in such a hurry that he didn't notice the hidden item within the suitcase
                  "Bryan my Dear" Said Selena. "Yes Mother? Bryan Asked. The Dragon then put her claw into the suitcase and touched the hidden item that Bryan missed. Bryan looked her then his carrying case and realized what she was pointing at. He looked around then found a hidden zipper inside Bryan opened it and retrieved the item from within. The Hidden Item made a small jingling  sound when Bryan took it from the case. It was wrapped in wrapping paper that was covered with pictures of all sorts of colored balloons. Apparently it was a secret present that Bryan's Parents put within to give him a surprise when they returned home and he unpacked his suitcase. He was very eager to see what it was but there was a written note upon the package that said "With Lots of Love Bryan I think now you've earned to have what I had long ago and I hope in time you keep whats within this package and know it will serve you well, I Love You Son Father"
                  Bryan red the message with a very sorrowful look then said "Father......Sniff ........I....I.......Miss You......Sniff.........Thank You......Sniff." Selena saw her son about to cry after he saw and red the message from Bryan's deceased Father she knew it was the last sentence from his Father that Bryan would ever simply see and now as if his last words were imprinted on the wrapped package that would also be the final gift from Bryan's Parents. Selena moved her head down to eye level next to Bryan he then looked at her with tears in eyes then hugged her muzzle.
               "There There, Its okay Bryan, im here my child, im here." Selena said trying to comfort her son. She knew that no matter how long it would be, the tragedy would always haunt Bryan. She moved her left fore claw towards Bryan then gently held him towards her muzzle making a hug. After 3 minutes Bryan ceased his tears "Thank You Mother.......I just can't believe that my Father gave me this........present.....I just miss him and my other mom so much....sniff."
                " Yes I know you do my son. but as you know, your parents loved you very much and even in death they still shown that they always did."  Selena said.
                 " Im.....so happy that they did mom and im also very happy your here with me now." Bryan said.                 
                 " Yes Child they did, know that they are always watching you even in death  and im very happy as well to call you my son and im your mother now my darling. Its a honor and a privilege to be your mother" Selena replied.
                 " Yes Mother as I am honored as well and privileged to be the now son of a Dragon, and I Love You Mom" Bryan responded then hugged Selena on her muzzle again showing his deep love from son to mother.
                 " I love you too my son" Selena replied then used her claws very gently started to tickle Bryan. Bryan took it completely by surprise. Selena just laughed while tickling Bryan. Bryan fell to the floor of the cave laughing while his dragon mother kept tickling him.
                 "Please,... ha ha ha ha.. please ..... stop mom........ha ha ha ha. please." laughed Bryan. Selena then ceased her ticklish attack on Bryan thus just doing it to get Bryan out of his sad state. Selena lifted up Bryan kissed him on his head then said " Bryan don't leave us both in suspense my dear, why don't you unfold the coverings of your fathers gift to you"
                   Bryan replied " Sure Mother, i just wonder what it is but we'll find out." He then took his fathers present then without hesitating he started unwrapping his present by ripping the paper to shreds piece by piece until he got to the item after 10 seconds of unwrapping. It was a small box that appeared to hold some sort of item inside. Bryan slowly opened the lid and found what his dad gave him. It was a small Pocket knife that looked freshly sharpened the blade itself shined brightly for it was brand new. On the wooden handle there was engraving on it which red " From Father to Son." Bryan picked up the knife from the box and showed Selena.
                   " Wow a human weapon and tool, you should be very honored my son for what your father has given you."  The Dragon said. " Yes Mother I am, Thank You Father I love and miss you Dad." Bryan Said looking up to the ceiling then to his Mother Selena.
                   " Well my Darling im very happy I managed to retrieve your belongings and brought you the thing I wanted to see most" Selena said. Bryan then asked " What did you want to see Mom?"
                    " Your Happiness Bryan." Selena answered. "Well Mother you made me so happy, thank you" Bryan said.
                    " Your Welcome my son." Selena said then hugged and kissed Bryan. Bryan after his hug and kiss by his dragon mother he then packed everything back in his suitcase except his brand new pocket knife that he put in his pants pocket. After he packed up Selena then took the case and put it in their nest so nothing would happen to it so Bryan would know where it is as well as he  could access it anytime. Bryan started to feel thirsty again. Selena recognized this when she looked at him. " My Son you seem thirsty again, I saw that little container you had in your case please retrieve it and ill go put some water in it that way you won't have to come with me all the time when you get thirsty."
                     " Okay Mother." Bryan then went to the nest, crawled in and opened his suitcase. He scurried around his clothes and retrieved the water container within. He closed the suitcase, crawled out of the nest then gave it to Selena.
                     " Good Boy, Now I won't be gone long" Selena then walked out of the cave once she reached the edge outside she spread'ed her wings then took off towards the river to fill up Bryan's water container. Bryan meanwhile just sat down next to the nest then dozed off to take yet another nap little did he know that someone was coming into the cave that is the second dweller of it besides Selena once he fell asleep that he didn't know who just entered. This second dweller of the cave was going to part yet another new part to Bryan's life that he will very soon know.
          To Be Continued .................
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Comments: 97

jazz316 In reply to ??? [2017-11-28 20:05:45 +0000 UTC]

I'm glad to see you love it and how the dragon is sweet and caring

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Ciryaquen [2017-11-28 19:36:35 +0000 UTC]

I really fear so much something will happen to Mother Dragoness or to Bryan wen he becomes grown up man fearing that he could take a bad decition to live from his Mom's cave to make his life out from the Dragoness love.... im in such a suspence , im afraid to continue reading!! 

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jazz316 In reply to Ciryaquen [2017-11-28 20:06:13 +0000 UTC]

Lol you will see how it goes glad your enjoying it

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Matthewthewonderer [2016-07-04 04:59:47 +0000 UTC]

That's so beautiful. Bryon seeing his secret gift for him from his real human parents, and his father's last words. It was so... touching.

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jazz316 In reply to Matthewthewonderer [2016-07-04 11:32:57 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much.

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Matthewthewonderer In reply to jazz316 [2016-07-04 14:16:23 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome.

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9CWAI [2016-06-17 15:28:07 +0000 UTC]

I saw the last sentence and I couldn't help it

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jazz316 In reply to 9CWAI [2016-06-17 15:29:50 +0000 UTC]

Lol glad you love it. thank you.

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9CWAI [2016-06-17 15:27:27 +0000 UTC]

dun dun daaaaaaaaaa!

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Dravakiirm [2013-04-17 16:58:13 +0000 UTC]

amazing! i cant get enough of this book. nice cliff hanger at the end too. loved it!

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siggihar [2013-01-31 18:30:54 +0000 UTC]

there is something off with this... either I'm not noticing it, or that it just hasn't appeared yet...

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Dravakiirm In reply to siggihar [2013-04-17 16:57:07 +0000 UTC]

what kind of off? like part of the plot, or in the writing style/grammar?

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siggihar In reply to Dravakiirm [2013-04-17 20:36:44 +0000 UTC]

something with the storyline

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Dravakiirm In reply to siggihar [2013-04-17 20:47:27 +0000 UTC]

humm....i'm not sure. but i think you are right, there is something different...... i just cant place my finger on it.

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kylepc [2012-10-24 06:55:00 +0000 UTC]

Nice story.

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jazz316 In reply to kylepc [2012-10-24 13:17:13 +0000 UTC]

Thank You Very Much For Liking my story and Faving it too

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games4355 [2012-07-13 19:21:37 +0000 UTC]

I hate Cliffhangers, but I don't hate this Story.

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jazz316 In reply to games4355 [2012-07-14 00:52:15 +0000 UTC]

Thanks lol, you won't have to worry for long

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SassyDragon18 [2012-07-13 02:50:51 +0000 UTC]

Will this someone, that "second dweller" be good to Bryan? and is it a another dragon or no?

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jazz316 In reply to SassyDragon18 [2012-07-13 03:00:56 +0000 UTC]

Well ill Tell you that "He" Will be Good and You'll find out what kind of creature "He" is lol. Be Patient my friend

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ThemeFinland [2012-07-03 18:55:03 +0000 UTC]

Awesome work again with the plot, though leaving it on such a cliffhanger isn't really my cup of tea, but maybe some people enjoy that kind of stuff. Hopefully we won't have to wait too long for the next part, since that cliffhanger is killing me!

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jazz316 In reply to ThemeFinland [2012-07-03 21:19:08 +0000 UTC]

Cliffhangers i love doing and im glad its leaving you in suspend don't worry you won't be for long my friend

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Gothicdragonart [2012-07-02 21:39:16 +0000 UTC]

oh wow this dragon is beautiful, I love what you done with the colors, beautiful

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jazz316 In reply to Gothicdragonart [2012-07-02 22:09:17 +0000 UTC]

the Pic is not mine i found it on google images and used it as a pic for my Story for it represents it the best way

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Gothicdragonart In reply to jazz316 [2012-07-02 22:16:02 +0000 UTC]

oh really hmmm well it represents it very well

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jazz316 In reply to Gothicdragonart [2012-07-02 22:19:49 +0000 UTC]

i know thats why i choose it to be my cover pic for my story

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Gothicdragonart In reply to jazz316 [2012-07-02 22:25:59 +0000 UTC]

well good choice then

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jazz316 In reply to Gothicdragonart [2012-07-02 22:30:51 +0000 UTC]

yes thank you

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kaztelli [2012-07-02 18:39:07 +0000 UTC]

i thought it was a pokemon fanart, in a more realistic style. ^^

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ladybuglara [2012-07-02 17:15:14 +0000 UTC]

LOVE this story! *gasp* I'm literally "on the edge of my seat" Just who is this Second Dweller?!? Have mercy and dont keep us waiting too long....

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jazz316 In reply to ladybuglara [2012-07-02 22:08:41 +0000 UTC]

Im Very Happy you love it, You'll See the Second Dweller Soon Enough lol. and Thank You

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e2s86 [2012-07-02 15:56:41 +0000 UTC]

I do not want to be rude but can you hurry up with the next chapter please.

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jazz316 In reply to e2s86 [2012-07-02 17:07:26 +0000 UTC]

ill do my best my friend, i just have been so busy lately

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e2s86 In reply to jazz316 [2012-07-02 18:32:32 +0000 UTC]

ok

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Gewalgon [2012-07-02 13:17:54 +0000 UTC]

Where is the picture from?

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jazz316 In reply to Gewalgon [2012-07-02 17:07:54 +0000 UTC]

i found it on google and decided to use it for it represented my story a bit in a way how it is

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Gewalgon In reply to jazz316 [2012-07-02 17:10:06 +0000 UTC]

Okay, thanks for answer!

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jazz316 In reply to Gewalgon [2012-07-02 17:10:48 +0000 UTC]

your welcome

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Kit-the-rookie In reply to jazz316 [2012-07-02 17:56:29 +0000 UTC]

It bears quite a resembleance to the cover art of Anne Mccaffrey's Pern books.

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jazz316 In reply to Kit-the-rookie [2012-07-02 22:10:38 +0000 UTC]

i see well thats very interesting but my story has nothing to do with the pern books, its just a vivid imaginationed story i thought up and wanted to make and share

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Kit-the-rookie In reply to jazz316 [2012-07-02 22:24:34 +0000 UTC]

That's fair enough. Just wanted people to be able to find the art too if they wanted to.

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jazz316 In reply to Kit-the-rookie [2012-07-02 22:30:42 +0000 UTC]

Thanks For that and im glad you and so many love my Story

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Kit-the-rookie In reply to jazz316 [2012-07-02 22:40:00 +0000 UTC]

I didn't say I liked the story. I'm an editor so I'm a bit of a grammar/punctuation nut. I can't read more than a paragraph unfortuantly because you don't bother much with grammar or punctuation.
This isn't a hate-post or anything and I'll always encourage writing, especially about dragons. But I will make the point that if you DID pay more attention to grammar/punctuation, you'd probably get more people like me who care about about that sorta stuff reading your work. Maybe you care about that, maybe you don't. But if you're story is as good as everyone seems to think it is, give it a little bit of time and edit it, and you could really shine.

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jazz316 In reply to Kit-the-rookie [2012-07-02 22:47:38 +0000 UTC]

Thank You My Friend. To Tell you im very new at writing and i know my grammer is nothing huge right now. im trying my best to make it all fit and make my story shine and i would be most honored if you might help me out. im trying my best to fix and improve everything but im just not that good yet but im glad people you show concern and encouragement to me and i can't thank you enough for it

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Kit-the-rookie In reply to jazz316 [2012-07-02 22:58:44 +0000 UTC]

Some tips then, from someone whose gone through it (I write too).
1) Take critism well - if people don't like your work, ask them why. That is how you will learn. Praise gets you nowhere.
2) Read. As widely as you feel able and as often as you can. try and find books about the same subject as yours so you know what's been done - if you write something to similar, it'll seem like you're copying. Reading will also improve your grammar, spelling, punctuation and vocabularly. But you will also find you get a feel for the 'flow' of a sentence.
3) Take some time to learn grammar and punctuation marks. Hell, it's boring and no-one should ever say different but the rules are pretty simple once you get to know them and they'll make a big big difference. The internet has plenty of guides to help you out.
4) Practise. It's an obvious one but needs to be said. I started writing properly when I was in school and it wasn't really until I'd finished my univeristy degree that my stories really began to be any good. And that's mainly through practise.
So, keep at it and I hope that helps. There are lots of guides for writing on the internet too, many with exercises and tools you can use to improve. Good luck.

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jazz316 In reply to Kit-the-rookie [2012-07-02 23:08:34 +0000 UTC]

Thank You So Much For All You Help and Inspiration.
I Am a True Begginer i have never written until now. so yes i suck big time but i do want and wish to improve. i want my story to be told to all and many people like yourself love it despite my horrible grammer. again Thank You For Everything and i will take all of your advice and use it well

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Kit-the-rookie In reply to Kit-the-rookie [2012-07-02 17:57:36 +0000 UTC]

Further research says 'Dragonsong'

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arnieboy In reply to Gewalgon [2012-07-02 14:43:51 +0000 UTC]

Anne McAffrey bookcover, Dragonsong or Dragonsinger, one of the two, can't be bothered to go look right now.

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Gewalgon In reply to arnieboy [2012-07-02 15:54:17 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much!

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DanielCoffey [2012-07-02 09:08:14 +0000 UTC]

Remember to ask permission from the original artist if that picture is not yours. Before you use it.

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