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Published: 2010-11-29 21:05:40 +0000 UTC; Views: 391; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 1
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Summary: Original fiction, part of my Extras series. A boy named Efraín sits alone. Flash fiction.

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Efraín sat alone, away from the others.

He seemed to be doing that a lot lately.

Back home, whenever he walked into the dining hall to find Timothy and Desta talking, he had to sit somewhere else. Desta could sit there if Efraín was talking to Timothy, Timothy could sit there if Efraín was talking to Desta, but when they were talking to each other there was a bubble that Efraín couldn't break into. Hr could only sit alone, watching them talk.

Efraín was friends with everybody---to others, it was inconceivable that he would feel alone or unwanted, just because his two best friends were so close that they weren't paying attention to him anymore.

And now, he was listening to the others talk about Desta's death in the battle, and how they had to find Timothy after he had abandoned them all.

Efraín had never felt so alone.

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Comments: 3

Yuki-Ryuzaki [2010-11-30 01:40:21 +0000 UTC]

this is pretty awesome! i felt bad for Efrain from the beginning, and you put the whole thing into perspective pretty well,for 150 words. The mention of death surprised me a bit, but it was a pretty good story overall. Also i felt like i could relate to the character in a way, and thats definitely a good thing. lol i write rambling comments XD

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JoeMerl In reply to Yuki-Ryuzaki [2010-11-30 03:08:16 +0000 UTC]

Heh, thank you! Yeah, the death was supposed to kind of catch you off-guard, that switch from "alone because he's a third wheel" to "really alone." I'm glad you liked it, and thanks again! (Heh, always excited to get some comments on my original stuff.)

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Yuki-Ryuzaki In reply to JoeMerl [2010-11-30 03:55:30 +0000 UTC]

no problem, always look forward to more of your stuff

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