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Idontcareforeal [2018-09-03 04:31:43 +0000 UTC]
Word of advice, show donβt tell.
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Idontcareforeal In reply to Joeycool1210 [2018-09-03 13:52:36 +0000 UTC]
The story. I noticed instead of showing the characters through action, you gave to much exposition
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Joeycool1210 In reply to Idontcareforeal [2018-09-03 15:11:28 +0000 UTC]
Well, I gave a lot of thought on the past of J.C.'s family. Do you how hard it was to get a storyline together for this? A lot. A real lot. I quit story writing for almost two years.
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Idontcareforeal In reply to Joeycool1210 [2018-09-03 15:16:15 +0000 UTC]
I know. I write during my spare time. I wasn't trying to be mean. It's just constructive criticism. I can address you to some websites for help.
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Joeycool1210 In reply to Idontcareforeal [2018-09-03 15:20:24 +0000 UTC]
Well, I guess they can help. Sure. Hope I'll still work on more of the origin story.
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