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Description My First Fanfic
by John Su

Sonic the Hedgehog ran very quickly down the hall to where the fire was coming from. While running he ducked into a rolling spin and made a sound like "@@@@@@@!" so he could dodge the fireball lasers.

At the top of the staircase he stood up and shouted at the top of the staircase "Sephiroth!" The man with long hair turned slowly and with a flash of his sword removed Sonic's nipples from his body.

"OUCH that hurts!1" cried Sonic, hurting. "Looks like I will need the power of the CHAOS CRYSTAL for this opponent!" and he raised up a handful of glowing gems.

The light from the jewels summoned all the legendary pokemon in the world together and they fused together into a Pyschic Ghost Dragon Pokemon. "LEAVE THIS TO ME, SONIC THE HEDGEHOG!" it said in the voice a thousand monsters, and shot a giant Hadouken at Sephiroth.

Sephiroth bounced it back with a spin of his blade, and it hit the Psy-Gho-Dra-Mon in the face, crashing him to the floor and half-crushing No-Nipples Sonic. "This is bad!" said Half-Dead No-Nipples the Hedgehog. "It looks like we will need to call for that man, Psyghodramon!"

"YES" he agreed, and used his 7 physic goat dragon balls to make a wish "SEND US THE CHOSEN HERO OF PROPHECY!" as Sephiroth slowly descended to finish them off.

Just then a bright light from the sky shone, and the Grand Master John Su descended from the moon on rocket powered rocket boots, with a beautiful woman on each arm. When he landed, there was a chorus and fanfare of trumpets, and he lowered his sunglasses and said "Yo."

"Who are you" said Sephiroth as he threw a ninja star at light speed at John Su. John Su turned and winked at the star, and the bright light instantly dissolved it into space dust. "Pretty good," said Sephiroth, "but your still gonna loose!" and he transformed into Super Saiyan 4 Sephiroth.

"Take this!" he screamed as he flew towards John Su. John Su flexed a single muscle, generating an awesome MANWAVE that overpowered Super Sephiroth and sent him flying into space, frozen forever in defeat.

"Thank you for saving us, John Su" said the world. "You are so strong and cool"

"I know," he replied, and jumped back up to the moon after resurrecting the 4th Hokage.
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ZombiedevilXD [2013-09-04 19:38:40 +0000 UTC]

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To start things off, I love your work and this piece was certainly no acceptation. The way Sonic's nipples came off so early in the fic-- why, I'd never seen any one thing on this god forsaken planet as well planned as this. I can only wonder if you yourself drew that thought provoking masterpiece at the top. If you did it only adds to your genius.
The only problem I had with it is that there wasn't enough yaoi. Everyone knows that all desu fanfics have sugoi moshi yaoi, and, like, hentai yuri no boku. Other than that this was a brilliant first piece.
(I give you a 6 for impact but DA doesn't let me go that high.)

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amayachan12 [2013-03-24 02:43:03 +0000 UTC]

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The other day I was thinking about life, and how meaningless it is. Why do we get up every morning? Why do we go on living? What is the point? There is not point, I thought, so perhaps I should just end this meaningless life of mine.

'My First Fanfic' by John Su, has brought meaning back into my life. Upon reading this, I have tasted the sun. God has blessed my mind with the wonders of the world, with the wisdom of the apple seed.

No longer will I suffer with the dull lifeless commotion that goes on about me, everyday. Never again shall I question the existence of man, or call the upon the devil to do my bidding. When I dream, I will dream in color.

When I bleed I will be reminded of the emotions this amazing tale has stirred with in me. Passion, Sexuality, Fear, Hatred, Bowel Movement.The color of my blood will, starting at this very moment, reflect the new sense of mortality I have gained through reading this

Through this, I was transported into a completely different realm. The trees glisten with freshly fallen rain. My Jeans are ripped, my skin is showing. The night is hot, the wind is blowing. . .Where you think you're going baby?

Thank you John Su.

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Uveggetis [2010-08-10 18:56:39 +0000 UTC]

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This is a deeply intense and powerful emotional thrill-ride of a story. It literally blew my mind; I had to pick up all the little pieces of it and put them back together in my skull so I could think of how to express my awe for the story in this critique.

First of all, Sonic is purely awesome. I didn't know you invented him. Or Sephiroth. Or John Su. Those have got to be some of the most spectacular OCs I have ever witnessed. Each one of them was written well; I could get to know the characters accurately just by the dialogue. Even without supplying a backstory, you've immaculately portrayed everyone.

The action sequences were flawless. I could see everything very well in my mind. You've handpicked some choice adjectives, verbs, adverbs, and nouns that all congeal together like a good stew. Your verbiage is powerful.

All-in-all, most original fic ever. You win so hard that it's causing tectonic disruptions. Call Spielberg or Lucas and get one of them to direct the movie.

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Dyemelikeasunset [2010-03-17 00:14:11 +0000 UTC]

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I don't even know where to begin...
This wonderful example of the written word leaves me in tears.

It starts with such energy, immediately taking the reader into the action and exploding with "@@@@@@@@@@!"
Never have I seen such a sound. So out of the box.
Unique, truly unique like the rest of the story.

The allusions and references leave a powerful postmodern sentiment, bringing in familiar faces to make it an instant classic.

But then to top it all off, a wonderful play on the "deus ex machina" when you introduce the hero.
Seemingly overpowered, an embodiment of overt masculine strength and charisma.
Until you realize the symbolism.
I can't even describe the look on my face when I realized how well you hid that.


I can't believe this is your first.
You leave me breathless.

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ClairClairSky [2010-03-03 03:56:25 +0000 UTC]

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I'm going to attempt to be professional about this...

HOMGHSHAJDNHAHAHA!

I found this to be incredibly entertaining. I particularly enjoy the 'so bad that it is good' aspect of it. I cannot begin fathom how painful this muct have been to write. For me, it probably would have been using 'your' instead of 'you're'.

This jabs every terrible fanfic written. EVER.
Even using popular characters such as Sonic the Hedgehog, the fourth Hokage and Sephiroth.

Finally, we have the OC that is based on the writer. Always overpowered and broken. But, unlike other fanfics, this is a pretty accurate representation. I applaud you, John Su.

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ProjectDishwasher [2017-03-01 03:11:02 +0000 UTC]

Best fanfic ever 10/10

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kittensrcuteX3 [2016-10-30 01:26:10 +0000 UTC]

this is a fanfic of yourself

i am impressed

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ebnetboyorsomething [2015-11-07 08:16:18 +0000 UTC]

best fanfic ever 10/10 - IGN

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Springtrap12345 [2015-06-24 19:10:36 +0000 UTC]

LOL half-dead no-nipple hedgehog

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doogenheimersmith [2015-04-29 23:04:29 +0000 UTC]

Sepiroth looks like Jack skellington dressed like Sepiroth.

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HoshPosh [2014-12-14 16:49:34 +0000 UTC]

The end though X'D

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Ryochi-The-Bestest [2014-12-01 19:14:18 +0000 UTC]

Absolutely life changing. This masterful work of fiction has left me in tears. I am so moved by your words.

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IHAZBUBBLEZ [2014-10-28 20:31:58 +0000 UTC]

This has changed my life. XD

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TheSavageChicken [2014-10-06 01:19:21 +0000 UTC]

This is beautiful... ;^;

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Strawberry-Spectrum [2014-08-17 06:57:35 +0000 UTC]

The innovative ways of how JohnSu (the writer) can express hisΒ  vision through text is a risk that delivered unmatched results. truly, this is one of the most awe-inspiring experiences that ive ever enjoyed. both readers and fellow writersΒ end up asΒ a pupil of JohnSu'sΒ language weaving. not a sentence goes by without meaning, not one paragraph is too short or too long, every moment carries a sense of suspense, excitement, and yearning to read more! also,Β this was pretty hilarious to read.
New breakfast tacos only $1.99 at Taco Bell! Live Mas!!!!

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Cutebunny50 [2014-07-11 00:33:12 +0000 UTC]

MANLY POWERS. XDΒ 

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Taskidog [2014-05-13 21:34:49 +0000 UTC]

someone please turn this into a gmod video

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eggplantpocky [2014-03-28 12:56:05 +0000 UTC]

fist of the north star????? @@@@@@@@@@@@@@@!!!!!!

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inukagome134 [2013-09-02 05:12:16 +0000 UTC]

The ending made me cry... Touched my heart and made me reflect on many things.


Truly an amazing work of art! Every other literary work pales in comparison to this fanfiction you have presented here.


Keep up the beautiful work, and thank you for making me experience such a rush of emotions that I thought I never even had in me...

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DrawtoonzStudio [2013-07-21 04:36:19 +0000 UTC]

In every sense of the word, a masterpiece.

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JohnSu In reply to DrawtoonzStudio [2013-08-04 21:04:31 +0000 UTC]

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pikaponn [2013-03-24 04:02:25 +0000 UTC]

Truly moving.

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RiceBalls4Me [2013-03-24 01:01:27 +0000 UTC]

At first, it seemed deep, then asdkfjaldfjaldfj, poof.

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mysticellus [2013-01-26 02:24:38 +0000 UTC]

This touched my heart :')

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Calamity9 [2013-01-04 22:44:17 +0000 UTC]

Instead of reading textbooks in school, we should just read this over and over again. It's the only thing we'll ever need to know.

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Squadlala-the-13th [2012-12-26 17:38:34 +0000 UTC]

The best fanfiction I've ever read !

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snow-melon [2012-11-27 05:44:08 +0000 UTC]

I remember this story from long ago, and all I have to say in response to finding it again is "@@@@@@@@".

Great work, this is probably one of my favorite fics ever.

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JohnSu In reply to snow-melon [2012-11-27 19:38:53 +0000 UTC]

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Mylittleponylover111 [2012-10-01 02:09:12 +0000 UTC]

how do you do fanfics?

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JohnSu In reply to Mylittleponylover111 [2012-10-01 07:31:46 +0000 UTC]

with gusto

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madsan2 [2012-09-17 06:03:47 +0000 UTC]

so segoi!

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JohnSu In reply to madsan2 [2012-09-17 06:14:46 +0000 UTC]

Oh yeah, I totally forgot to put some Japanese and honorifics in there.

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madsan2 In reply to JohnSu [2012-09-17 06:43:06 +0000 UTC]

hehe well there's always room for more fanfics!

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risaaa [2012-09-02 08:08:50 +0000 UTC]

I'm not going to lie, I cheer myself up by reading this when I feel down. Thank you John Su.

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JohnSu In reply to risaaa [2012-09-17 04:15:20 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome.

*moon jump*

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Baxterbender [2012-07-31 18:49:51 +0000 UTC]

Sums up pretty much every fanfic on dA




MY BRAIN. IT NEEDS TOGETHER PUTTING BACK.


....That was backwards wasn't it?

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JohnSu In reply to Baxterbender [2012-08-07 20:01:49 +0000 UTC]

it is consistent with the middle.

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Baxterbender In reply to JohnSu [2012-08-08 17:02:19 +0000 UTC]

*drools over the magical JohnSu actually replying*

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Pepperoach [2012-07-04 00:16:37 +0000 UTC]

A friend of mine made me narrate this, so I went ahead and uploaded it here so the world can see: [link]

(WARNING: I have an accent)

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CuddlesDaKat [2012-07-01 18:42:43 +0000 UTC]

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JTravoltaIIVII [2012-05-11 15:14:40 +0000 UTC]

I would tell you you're going to jail for this but it is clear that no prison can hold you

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SonadowFan888 [2012-04-03 03:40:40 +0000 UTC]

LOLWUT

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KrisTheTrashLord [2012-03-11 17:16:28 +0000 UTC]

Did someone try to do a dramatic reading of this?

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JohnSu In reply to KrisTheTrashLord [2012-03-29 06:01:31 +0000 UTC]

not to my knowledge.

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KrisTheTrashLord In reply to JohnSu [2012-03-29 20:11:58 +0000 UTC]

I think this should get a dramatic reading.

I can volunteer.

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MadRatBird [2012-03-04 21:26:31 +0000 UTC]

Why is this not a DD? 8(.

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royaled123 [2012-03-01 22:17:44 +0000 UTC]

I choked on my pizza just a little bit amg.

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CrimzonLogic [2012-02-21 02:14:09 +0000 UTC]

It's brilliant, man. Pure brilliance. I can die happy, now that I have read such a masterful work of literature.

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captain-vodka [2012-02-19 08:47:26 +0000 UTC]

I feel like there should be sequels and illustrations.

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Theeywillnotforceeus [2011-10-14 16:53:20 +0000 UTC]

The artism in this story shows potential.

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