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jusdog — midnighter pg3
Published: 2008-08-25 18:13:27 +0000 UTC; Views: 1032; Favourites: 19; Downloads: 29
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Panel 1 was tough, but it didn't take me that long. Afters, I slapped myself because I didn't put any women in there. I didn't even notice it until I didn't feel like messing around with it anymore. oh well.Related content
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Like pixelisedmind said, that car in the first panel just isn't right. The angle that the car is sitting at looks right for someone impacting on the opposite top side, but since you left the shadows connected to the tires, it still looks all four are on the ground. If you straighten the shadow under the car to match the levelness of everything else I think it'll raise the idea of impact. The only other thing, is his falling lines look like rain coming out of the cloud at the top of the panel. I'm guessing that's why you have those lines breaking the top boundary, but that was the first thing I saw in the picture. Maybe not showing so much of the smoke at the top would help.
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Thanks for showing your stuff off. You've got serious talent.
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You've got a pretty unique angle on storytelling. Not so much that it looks like you're deliberately trying to break the mould, but enough to set you apart from other sequential artists.
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Thanks, that's a great compliment;}
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omg thats a nissan silvia. looks just like it
nice work
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Haha, I love that guy on the left in panel one, shitting a brick.
Any crit I would give would be that the landing on the car in the first panel doesn't seem energetic enough. But that could be changed later on in a colouring stage with some blurring or whatever. Probably nothing to worry about.
Good job all round though.
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yeah, that was my fear when I was reading the script. The writer didn't want to be totally obvious that he's falling on the car... I think it looked better in his head when he wrote it.
good crit, I need to focus more on the storytelling, sometimes I lose my focus;}
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Your sequential work is pretty good, the story telling aspect. I wouldn't worry too much about that.
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