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Katelynplz — hard candy for cavities.
Published: 2010-06-01 01:23:05 +0000 UTC; Views: 1017; Favourites: 25; Downloads: 14
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and the nights were far too longwhile we both sung those old songs
at the top of our bursting lungs
you were the hard candy to my cavity
and with you i defied gravity
and floated up to the moon
leaving was your best mistake
but i still wake up and shake
while you forget that i existed
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clever use of rhyme (or lack of i should say) at the end there.
congrats on the DLD (:
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Neatly done. Congratulations on your DLD
(possibly a "that" in the last line would preserve the metre?)
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Thank you! And I totally agree, thanks again.
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I like the paradox of "best mistake" and the power of the subsequent rhyme. Magnificent
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Keep writing and keep creating.
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You're welcome. 
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Really beautiful... Better to have loved and lost?
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Thank you!
And I guess so, it's hard to get over stuff like that though.
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Well, I wouldn't really know. I've never had anyone "love" me.
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Neither have I, in that way.
This poem was in a love like family sort of way.
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I rather like the second stanza. Also, nice effect with the last line!! (:
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