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Published: 2008-12-17 17:32:58 +0000 UTC; Views: 6391; Favourites: 234; Downloads: 27
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Fingertips brush away stray hairs, arms are secure around her shouldersHe watches her, like her own dearest angel
While he sleeps on the other side of the world, his sleeping seconds belong to her
He wants her to claim him, sending living hints in his waking words
She puts to clues together but doubts their reality
Frustrated sighs in the sun and under the clouds
Their separate reasons are close to the same revelation
They are each other, connected by unseen fibers stretching
Threatening to snap them together
He draws the curve of her smile in his mind, the shine in her eyes
She tries to taste him around her, not quite failing nor quite succeeding
Clueless wandering, orbiting around her
Hysteria rising in his throat, he screams against her skin
Cries into her neck, she only feels the memory of whispers
Locking his eyes on her face, he steps back to reality
Dreaming of when sheβll join him there
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it's so inspirational. plus the guy seems like a hopeless romantic, so cute! this makes me think that im not a hopeless loner...which i probably am. this was really well written and very original! keep it up!
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This is well done. I love this, and your explanation as well. Makes me want to write now...
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thats pretty deep, i like the way how you use oxymorons (or however you spell it) to convey the feeling of not quite there memories, but they still feel too real
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This is beautiful. Really, it is. I love this poem
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cool. I kinda have a story like that, except the guys a ghost, but he's not really dead, and it's all complicated... cuz thats how I roll.. x)
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This is SOO beautiful. I'm absolutely amazed. You are GREAT.
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I agree with =stormchylde . I love the way you phrase certain verses. There are so many lines that very original. Your work definitely lacks cliches and it's very emotion provoking! 
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Alright, so there's sixty-four comments up here already, but I still have to say - it's beautiful. Imaginative, dreamy and otherworldly.
It reminds me of something, but I can't think whatβ¦
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i really liked it! i can imagine it XD i like when you can make images out of writtings. thanks for sharing.
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Like I said...Entire story based around this poem...
*wink wink nudge nudge*
THANKS!
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oh goodness!!! I LOVE YOUR WRITING!!!! JUST ABSOULUTLY AMAZING!!!!! so GLAD i clicked on dat link on burdge-bug's picture!!!!! 
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awww i love this!! and honestly i've been getting tht feeling a lot lately! its really wierd and really frustrating!!
but anyhoo like i said i really like this, i love your style of writing!!
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ooooooooooh my gosh!
this is AMAZING! Really, no lie, this just pulled at my heart (which sounds very lame, but it's the only way I could think of describing it
so.very.awesome.
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Aw! Thank you!!!
gah...I am writing an entire story based off ot this...
But thank you again!
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Ooooooh I loves it, *dances off to read the rest*
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OMYGOSHILOVEYOURPOEMANDIT'SAMAZINGANDI'VENEVERREADANYTHINGLIKEIT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! so, anyway... i really love this poem and i think it's amazing and i also think the illustration that burdge-bug did for this is amazing (but this was the inspiration) sooooooooo i just can't wrap my mind around how amazing this is and i had sooooo many thoughts going through my head as i read this.
anyway, sry about my rambling and peace
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Wow this is insanely amazing!! Im so faving this!
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welcome!! its so pretty!
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Guessing you found me through ?
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yeah her picture was really cute so i wanted to see what inspired it. And tada here you are. so you started a story from that poem? thats so neat
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Yup! I have 6 chapters on here...you should go read them and comment...:winkwink: :nudgenudge:
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oh i already am im on chap three right now! its so interesting! i really like the concept. its kinda sci fi with how he is with kat when he sleeps. it sso romantic! im gonna fav all of them! 
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welcome!haha keep up the good work!
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Holy crap!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! This is insanely freaking awesome!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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I love the images it presents, you have a lovely writing style. Very vivid with only a few words...I really like this
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That's a style? Sweet.
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Well...ok I'm not an expert on styles or what not, but it seems to me that your writing reflects you, which I guess I kind of see as your own personal style. Either way, it's really cool
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it's so beautiful and yet so sad, you really have a great talent! While I was reading I felt so sorry for him
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really good, reminds me of he's everything you want by three doors down
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This is amazing in so many ways.
Every feeling kind of strikes you and it's all understandable.
very beautiful
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I especially love the lines:
'He draws the curve of her smile in his mind, the shine in her eyes
She tries to taste him around her, not quite failing nor quite succeeding'
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Amazing! Very well done!
You're quite talented
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This is so heartfelt and sad at the same time. Extremely beautiful!
Have you ever considered writing a book of poetry?
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Holy shi- !
This is absolutly awesome ! Wow, this is so beautiful ! I envy your talent at writing such beautiful things ! All the emotion in it, wow !
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Holy, this is such a touching poem, I love it. I freaking love it!
It's so beautiful, it really brought a tear to my eye.
That dosen't happen often by the way.
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oh my god <3
I adore this.
it reminds me so much of Behind You (the book).
just wow :]
its very inspiring.
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Who's the author of the book?
This poem is amazing, if there's a book like it, well thats just great!
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