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KreepingSpawn — Sketch: Marine Down [NSFW]

Published: 2011-09-16 23:29:16 +0000 UTC; Views: 423; Favourites: 8; Downloads: 0
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Description White notices the 240's rate of fire is way down from the solid bursts Vaughn was cranking out before.  He glances up to the turret.  The machine gun sways, as if hunting a moving target.  It fires one round, then a pause, two rounds, pause, four, pause, one.  Something is wrong.

"Vaughn!"  He charges toward the vehicle, "Vaughn," and looks in through the open door.

Vaughn leans into the shields of the turret ring, his head hanging down.  When he hears his name he jerks his head up, wrestles the gun around and pops off a few slow shots.  His aim wanders.  He lets off the trigger and hangs his head again.

"Vaughn!"

"Shark.  I think I'm hit."  Vaughn's voice is so soft, White has trouble hearing him.

"Shit." White climbs into the Humvee to support Vaughn out of the turret.  But the PFC makes no move to come down.  "Let go.  I got you."

"Two-forty." Vaughn says simply.

"It's okay, Steve.  You did enough.  Let go."

Released from his duty, Vaughn lets go of the 240 and slumps awkwardly to his knees.  White hugs the other Marine against his chest in the cramped interior of the Humvee and struggles out, dragging Vaughn.  "Corpsman!"

Doc Thomas – who has been hovering between the vehicles and the house, in case he is needed either place – hears the call and sprints towards them.

Vaughn is coughing.  White gets him clear of the vehicle and sits right down on the street, supporting Vaughn's shoulders.  "I got you."  He sees the blood on Vaughn's left hand, where it has run down his arm inside his sleeve.  White unstraps the body armor, looking for the wound.  Vaughn's blouse is soaked in red.  "Vaughn?"

Vaughn coughs blood.  Thomas arrives and helps White clear the body armor.  He finds the entry wound, high in Vaughn's chest, and tears the fabric away.  "Vaughn.  Look at me.  You're gonna be okay, but I'm gonna have to hurt you to get in there and stop the bleeding.  Okay?"

Vaughn doesn't respond.  Blood runs from his mouth.  Thomas digs his fingers into the Marine's open wound to get at the bleed.  Vaughn makes a ragged, gutwrenching sound, not really a cry.  

"I'm sorry, brother."  Thomas grits his teeth, hating that he has to cause more pain to help, but determined to do everything he can to save Vaughn's life.

"Hang on, Steve," White tells him.

Vaughn dies with Thomas' fingers inside his chest.  He makes a wet, choking sound, and that's all.  "Don't do it, Vaughn," Thomas says.  "Don't you dare quit.  Come on!"  But the young Marine is gone.  "Fuck!"

"Vaughn," White calls.

Thomas shakes his head.  "He's gone."  He carefully extracts his hand from Vaughn's body.

White denies it.  "You told him, you said-"

"I was wrong. I thought he had more time."  The corpsman takes a moment to appreciate the awesome quantity of blood soaking Vaughn's battledress.  "Christ.  When did he get hit?"

"I don't know," White says.  He looks down at the lifeless friend in his arms.  "He didn't call it."  He thinks back, trying to remember exactly when the 240's rate of fire had begun to lag.  "Maybe... five minutes."

"Shit.  Bleedin' like that."

"He wanted to stay on the two-forty."  White's voice catches.  He swallows hard, his eyes stinging.

"He's a hero," Thomas says.

And then their serious reality precludes any further mourning.  "Corpsman!" comes the call from the house.  Thomas claps White on the shoulder as he departs.  White can't stay either, he has the rest of the fireteam to lead.  The corporal lays Vaughn down on the deck and gets to his feet.    He swallows the ache in his throat, but hangs on to the righteous fury.  He reseats his M-16, checks the load, and pretends not to notice Vaughn's blood staining his uniform.



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Comments: 12

Magnius159 [2011-09-20 19:25:24 +0000 UTC]

This is good. Keep at it.

--I really hate "Steve" and want to use "Steven," but I feel it might come across as too formal. Thoughts?
Steven on his official papers. Keep it as Vaughn in the story like you have it. Sounds fine.

--Is the begining too abrupt?
Nope.

--Following on the last question; is the ending to abrupt?
No, there's a sense of urgency, that it's not over.

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KreepingSpawn In reply to Magnius159 [2011-09-20 20:50:07 +0000 UTC]

Thanks!

I meant in those 2 instances where White calls him "Steve" I wanted to use "Steven".

Thanks much for taking time to read and leave feedback.

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ForeverYoursMarine [2011-09-19 23:37:05 +0000 UTC]

Again, you freak me out with all of these stories, because I know that is what happens over there to them.... But I am just too stupid to stop reading them! I don't think Steven would be a bad joice to use if you do go with it.

Also, could you please let me know once you have all of the little pieces of the story put together so I can read all of them....I'm sure I'll need to prepare myself with a whole box of tissues beside me

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KreepingSpawn In reply to ForeverYoursMarine [2011-09-20 00:19:52 +0000 UTC]

Am I going to have to block you until Patrick gets home for good and all?
Just to keep you sane?

I will def let you know when I post the 'big one'
It might be a while though. It's a mess!

Thanks for your comments!
And thanks for the !

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ForeverYoursMarine In reply to KreepingSpawn [2011-09-20 00:48:29 +0000 UTC]

Lol, well I hope you wont have to do that...

And you are welcome!

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KreepingSpawn In reply to ForeverYoursMarine [2011-09-20 01:22:29 +0000 UTC]

Nah, I wouldn't do that.
But I don't want you going mad with worry after reading this stuff either!

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ForeverYoursMarine In reply to KreepingSpawn [2011-09-20 03:32:26 +0000 UTC]

I hope i wont either....

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CDL113 [2011-09-17 08:10:35 +0000 UTC]

Tragically beautiful words you have penned here . I know you wrote this as fiction but I am sure that this type of act of courage goes on all to often across the globe by men and women in uniform day after day. Semper Fi Marine, Semper Fi!

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KreepingSpawn In reply to CDL113 [2011-09-17 22:33:02 +0000 UTC]

Thanks very much for your comment.
My goal in writing these pieces is always to honor our men and women in uniform, and remain true to their spirit of service and sacrifice.

And thanks 4 the !

Semper Fi!

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CDL113 In reply to KreepingSpawn [2011-09-18 23:00:52 +0000 UTC]

Your very welcome!

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MrPaleface [2011-09-16 23:30:09 +0000 UTC]

Go U.S. motha fuckin A!

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KreepingSpawn In reply to MrPaleface [2011-09-17 07:37:27 +0000 UTC]

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