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KyraShangea — Female Commoner 1 - Sketch
Published: 2008-06-13 22:05:21 +0000 UTC; Views: 1229; Favourites: 22; Downloads: 0
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This is part of a pretty big commission that I am doing. I have to do several classes. This is the female commoner in her normal pose.Also, this is the rough draft. The final image, since it's for a game will be much smaller... But not before I color it and stuff!
Please critique! I'd like it to look good. ^^ Also, there are not supposed to be a lot of details, so... yeah.
Artwork (c) *KyraShangea
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Can i use this as a pose for my character, please? 
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Sure, if you credit my piece as a reference. ^^
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She looks a little... bold for a commoner... just saying.
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Because the commoner is new the adventures and ready for anything! :3
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lol very epic pose for someone who is just a "commoner" ^_^;
so what's this for, like an RPG or something?
she does seem a bit short? i counted around 6-6 1/2 heads (but! I'm not an expert on height... so I won't say more than just it seems a little awkward to me, but maybe that's just me ^_^;; )
now a bit of mind bending anatomy I learned... clavical is way to low and drops down way to steep. (those lines above her boobs~ >_> the diagonal ones). And that line... for the next is low as well (lol wish I knew the name of that... ^_^;; but I'm not acquainted with muscles yet)
omg no bellybutton?! she's a clone xD (sorry simpson refrence? lol I'm a freaking loser... I haven't even watched that series like EVER o_o )
oh well, nice legs and hair~
I'm not certain cause hair is misleading me, but I think her face looks like it's facing forward but the head is 3/4 >_>
oh well~ good work either way, I hope to see a finished one soon ^_^ And I can't wait to see the other designs.
(also this is truely a nit picky and every bad thing to say, but her ear does not have all the inner lines... even if it's supposed to be "not as detailed" that is a sad excuse for like 4 lines in the ear just to show they aren't plugged or something)
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Yeah, it's going to be for an MMO. :3
Someone else commented on height, and another person commented on the size of the head, so I figured out that that was most of the problem. XD
Yes, I have to fix the clavicle. x_x Isn't it funny when you don't notice these things until you have someone else point it out to you, and it's really obvious...
She has a belly button. It didn't show in the scan. XD... Same with most of the lines you don't see. That will all be fixed when I ink it.
Thanks for the comments and critique!
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oh I see, so the lines were to light? that's cool then I guess~ I know how I lose a bit of lines when I try brighten up my scan~ (that's kind of why I use mainly digital now)
and well the size of the head "usually" doesn't matter, cause it's more like a measuring tool. I kind of suggest if you are doing like plain ordinary front views, you can easily just map out the height and head size in the beginning ^_^
and cool! mmo, sounded like that~
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Yeah... I might have to change the setting on the scanner.
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I really like this one....I dunno what to say critique wise about it I really think you did a good job ^_^
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It looks really good!
There isn't any big mistake in the anatomy, just some little details:
Try to make her torso a lil bit longer, or the arms a lil bit shorter. Because the wrists are supposed to be exactly aligned with the end of the torso. So you'll have to make the left arm shorter, since it's a bit bent.
I'd say to enlarge the legs a bit, but they are looking very good.
Her collarbones look a bit too low.
I think that's all I can see... you made awesome job with the face and clothes.
If you need any help with colouring, i can try to give you some tips!
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Critique: Her head is a bit too big! An average human character should be about 6 heads tall. Slender anime characters are even taller. (She could be just short, though.) She has a bit boyish shoulders. Females usually have wide hips and narrow shoulders, but her shoulders are wider than her hips. Aaand her left arm seems to be a tad bit too long to me.
Anyway, it's still really good. I just felt like going captious because of the "Advanced Crit Encouraged" thingy. I like her pose and expression.
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What the heck is with me drawing heads too big lately!? X_X
I drew her a little more tom-boyish, so that's probably the reasoning for the boyish shoulders... XD;
Thanks for all the critique! n__n
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oooooo, what kinda game? i like games.
gj btw, the outfit is ssssssssssssssssmokin'. not very 'common' but who cares because it's sssssssssssssmokin'
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It's going to be a MMO. I'll tell you more about it if you note me...
Thanks, dearie~
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Very cool Love the hair and the face. Very well done ^_^
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Shes really cute even if shes a commoner 
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I like her hair and her outfit, her boobs seem to sag a bit. (<- cant believe she was the on to notice that) Its really coold though.
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Thanks! Now tell me, do they look like they are just saggy... or like she's not wearing a bra?
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More so saggy, but it does kinda look like she doesnt have a bra when you look too long. <- is rofling for examinin' a sketch's boobs.
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LOL. I'll touch it up. XD
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very cool pose! and the face & hair is really good too. (:
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