coyotecyb [2013-12-22 22:39:19 +0000 UTC]
I love this story in general and have personally put together a group of people and worked on a radio play of it so any work of this nature is always good. My only critique is that you try to separate the background from the characters more. By that i mean in the first 4 panels the background and foreground blend together so much that even though you have a good characterization of Little Pip going on, it's difficult to actually SEE her without working at it. I understand your working only in gray scale and pencils but if you leave just a bit of room around each character and fade the background around just them it will make them stand out that much more.
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