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EDIT: Timelapse: www.youtube.com/watch?v=eYOyVBβ¦I can't.. I'm so in love with this piece right now
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I started working on this.. who knows how long ago xD It's what I've been itching to work on the entire time while doing homework and I finally finished it over the break :'). The painting itself is pretty self explanatory, though, right
This is a 16:10 aspect ratio wallpaper.. my computer screen's actually 16:9 so I dun goofed LOL
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Thank you very much for the critique 
Mmh, the balloons I looked at had a matte texture.. I'd originally had them shiny too, before I searched it up
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I walk a fine line between being gentle and being helpful as a critic, but here I go.
I'll start with the weak areas, so I can wrap up with the good stuff.
Whenever I talk to any professional artist about my work and about the stuff I need to improve, they always say "work on anatomy." Well, it applies here. Sure, her outstretched arm is doing what it's supposed to be doing, but the shoulder isn't. Even in more stylized art, when the figure reaches up for something with one arm, the shoulder moves with it, pulling in closer to the neck, sometimes changing the position of the entire torso. Keeping the shoulder parallel to the other one makes her look like a Barbie doll. Really, the figure is the weakest part of the piece.
Then there is the angle of the boardwalk. There probably shouldn't be as much of the top of it showing here.
Now onto the good stuff, which is pretty much everything else.
Those clouds are fantastic! Multiple different textures and thicknesses really help with the illusion. The same thing with the ocean. Both of those things are well beyond my ability to replicate.
The slant of the picture is a really great touch, making the floaty feel of the piece all the more complete! With just a few adjustments, you have yourself a winner here!!
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Thank you so much for the critique and compliments! It was really helpful
I feel like I should say something more because you wrote me such a nice and detailed critique, but I have nothing else to say lel.Β
Thanks again <3
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You are very welcome. I do my best, and I'm glad you found it helpful.Β
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When I first saw this piece, the color is what really struck me. I've seen pink skies sometimes early in the morning, and this work reminds me of that. The whole work gives me a sort of surreal feel, what with the low, tumbling clouds and the girl floating up after her lost balloon.
The background looks great. I feel like a lot of attention went into the clouds, and the sky and sea look very well integrated. The coloration is good too, though upon reflection if you didn't intend for it to feel "surreal" you might want to add some color splash from the sky onto the balloons a bit too. The lighting looks pretty good though, so it doesn't look off really.
My main criticism with this artwork would be the girl. She looks a bit doll-like, and the front of her dress doesn't quite mesh with the back of the dress (which has an awesome swoosh, btw). I think the legs are also a bit short in relation to her upper body? There's also something about the perspective of the pier in relation to the rest of the work that doesn't look quite right; honestly, that detail seems fine to me given the surreal feel, but it might be a good place to practice for your next work.
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Mmmh, thank you very much for the critique! Now that I look at it, I think the arm length is off too. I was always told that the arm should fall to about half the thigh, and I think both the arm and leg length could be adjusted to better fit the correct proportions.Β
About the rest, like the doll-likeness and the perspective of the peir, do you have an idea of how I could fix that?
Again, thank you so much for the critique, I really appreciate it!
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For the character, I'd suggest finding a reference of someone in that same pose and working on just the person for a bit, close up. Β Adding in the collar bone and adjusting the upper body from there I think would go a long way in fixing it. Β The jaw-line and the way the neck attaches to the head may also be playing a role; would have to play around with it to figure out what makes the character look off to me.
The pier looks to me like it's titled too much towards us.
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Ah okay, I see. Thanks, the next time I draw a human I'll definitely look at a reference pose ^^
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Oh this is very lovely, so nicely done... beautiful colours, love it!
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Somehow it makes me happy.
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Are you sure you're actually 15? Your work is prodigiously mind-blowing.
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*ponders for a moment* Yes, I'm fairly certain xDD. Thank you so much - comments like these make my day
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Thank you! I'm glad you like it
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dshfksdfhksdj you'll get there.. you should see my old art lel
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xD okay -goes to your gallery and ventures to the oldest pics-
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Welp.. how was trip down horrible lane? xD I have worse though.. before I joined dA
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it was good thank you xD. Oki.
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i cant help you with that man
id help myself if i could
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It's a beautiful work! The colors are fantastic! Her anatomy is a bit off but you will fix that with practice. Keep going with the awesome work!
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Thank you so much! Yeah, I definitely need to work on the anatomy
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