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Published: 2013-05-04 18:08:26 +0000 UTC; Views: 4248; Favourites: 178; Downloads: 38
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This is a re-do of an old piece, undertaken on the good advice of wise & skillful illustrator . It lost some of what was good about the original - seen [link] here - namely, the height of the doors/size of the room - but overall I feel like it's an improvement. Though I still can't draw a line parallel to the vertical edge of the paper, yeesh!Watercolor & digital.
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Ooohhhh, that color transition is just ... delicious!
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Thanks so much! ^^ I don't often use bold areas of distinct color but it's something I'd like to try more of!
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Thank you so much! I love yours as well!
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Awww! Thanks for the shout-out, Lia! Really though, me, wise and skillful? Not so much, just annoying, really. I'm loving the newer character and revised floor pattern! Cleverdisguise is right though--the scale of the original made for a slightly more ominous setting, but this way is good too. We get to connect a little more with our protagonist. It seems like the main carry over is the triangular patch of light, which is compositionally very strong, but also somewhat physically unfeasible. If that shape is really important to you, and I think it is, then there are a couple logical ways to go about it making more sense. Flipping the girl's shadow in the opposite direction, would indicate a kind of spot light, maybe from some cool hanging lamp with decorative triangular panes, perhaps scattering smaller bits of light around as well. OR to go in a completely different direction, The light could be coming from a window, suggesting she was entering some kind of grand hallway space at sunset/dawn. At that point the piece might have to get longer, to repeat the window light at intervals down the hallway. Either way, there could still be nice glowy light in the sliver visible between the doors behind her--it's just that that light source would probably only appear on the left door, or neither of the doors. BASICALLY I JUST NEED TO SHUT UP AND LET YOU CONTINUE BEING AWESOME!!!
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Yeah, I miss the scale too, but I wanted the page size/ratio to match all my recent work (secretcalendarplanmaybe?). And really, any time you want to spend critiquing (or praising! especially praising! (I kid (OR DO I?))) my 'umble work is all to your credit, as far as I'm concerned! : ) I updated a little, with the shadow against the door as suggested by Cleverdisguise, but I think I'll try different experiments at intervals over the next few days. Redoing old pieces can be very relaxing but I sometimes fall into the trap of forgetting to think, especially when PAST Lia couldn't be relied on to create a feasible lighting situation! That girl!
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WOW love the composition a lot. Kind of wish the cast shadow was in watercolor, but the storytelling is so much better than the older one
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There is an improvement, yes, although I do prefere the scale aspect of the original piece. There is something about the lighting on the door that strikes me as odd. If she is entering and the left hand door is in front of her, won't she cast a shadow on the door? There is a big area of light that needed to be in shadow for placing the objects right, like from the bottom edge of the door onto the floor and such. Because of the lighting, she and the two doors seem to float.
I've been watching you for quite a while and you have amazing pieces. I do apologise if this little critique was offending in any way. Most people on deviantart don't take these kind of things that well.
Either way, you've got remarcable illustrations and this one is no less of that!
Cheers
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You're too right! It's funny, I spent all that time looking back and forth to the original without actually THINKING (and since I wasn't considering the lighting the first time, the second-generation version was even less grounded in reality). Thanks for your time! Hopefully this slightly-updated version will fix the "floating" effect. : )
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