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Lexa91 — being heartless..
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Published: 2010-04-05 17:14:25 +0000 UTC; Views: 837; Favourites: 16; Downloads: 7
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You once told me I am heartless.. at that time I didn't know what to answer..what to say to you..but..now I do ...You're probably right..though I don't know the reason for my being like this.Do you remember him? .. the one who broke my heart into millions of tiny little pieces?..well..this might be the reason I don't have a heart anymore..I mean not in the philosophical kind of way. Strange though..this situation, because from a biological point of view my heart still beats...the blood still goes up there and does his job...but then, why am I heartless?
You tell me I am heartless when I don't believe a word that comes out of your mouth, but to me , facts speak lauder than words, I don't care about what you say as long as I don't see it put into facts..there is nothing you can tell me I haven't heard before from him..you see I played this game before...
You say I am heartless when I don't care about your feelings..but I do .. it is polite to do so ..but you have to understand that my heart is gone, there are no feelings I can share to you .. I am numb.. I can't feel a thing..oh..of course I can imagine how you and the rest of the world might feel in different situations, but all I can do is imagine not actually feel...
You now might think I must be happy, feeling nothing might be considered a gift.. it isn't..I am using you.. I do ..You don't know this but.. I actually do this..I am using you because..well probably because of my curiosity...since I don't have a heart of my own to gamble on anymore.. I decided I will have to play with somebody's heart instead...
Yes, you are my victim, ... I was one myself .. gave him my heart and all he did was pound on it .... But I am not like him, I don't want to destroy your heart , wound it yes .. but no destroy .. because I know how it feels to have a heart and still be heartless...
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Hello. I am a critic from Scribblers Anonymous I would first off like to say that although a small piece, it was good to read and gave me something to think about at the end.
This could coincide with many points of view on relationships, where we give our hearts only to have them wounded to what one might think the worst degree. Very controversial as you put it in a comment. I thought the whole piece was very well put together, well thought out, and made me think continuously afterward.
I liked when you added you still have a heart, because one can be heartless in how they come across or feel but they cant be heartless when it comes to your beating heart, the biological one.
But I was curious about this line:
"But I am not like him, I don't want to destroy your heart , wound it yes .. but no destroy .. because I know how it feels to have a heart and still be heartless... "
I understand that one wouldn't want to destroy anothers heart but why would they want to wound it at all? What would be the reason for wounding it; for some kind of revenge, to see how they react? I didn't understand.
Also, I would have to say that when you said, "Yes, you are my victim" It didn't seem like it coincided with the rest of the piece. It made slight sense when added that you were a victim yourself, but wouldn't a person want to find another to help them heal and love again instead of making the next person they become close with, a victim?
I guess what it all comes down to, is that this can have many sides. One thing I think should be worked on, is that I believe there are too many spaces; they seem more nonessential then needed, plus they made it hard for me to read. I also found that there were a couple words spelled wrong. But otherwise the piece itself was very good.
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thank you 
firstly, i would never want to destroy his heart , supposing he loves me ,he would be hurt anyway because i can not share his feelings, this is where the wound part comes in ..
secondly, the victim part, well..you might think this is kind of selfish thinking and quite weird and it really is because there is the need of revenge and i know it is not right because he is not the one who broke my heart .That's why i said he is a victim. I also know that in theory it is not right and it should happen as you said ..try to heal and love again ..but not gonna happen ..it's my point of view i am crueler, i want revenge :d at least in this piece
and about the "too many spaces" i can't help it .. i will try to work on this part harder
i would appreciate it if you could tell me which words i miss spelled
thank you again for the time you spent to read my work and to really think about what i wrote .. it means a lot to me .I hope i was able to give you some answers and if i didn't succeed let me know and i'll try again .
thank you again and i hope you will read some other works of mine . I am looking forward to your critics
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Love it girl ^^
And huh, I would change it into fiction in your category because I read the comments and I they thought that is was non-fiction xp Sorry, I just had to smile when I read that first comment ^^
Nice done girl ^^
Love your style of writing and guess what..pom pom pom.. my text about my soul is finished (I think ^^')
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yeah 
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Hey, you don't have to apolagize you, I just gave some advice ^^
And you're welcome ^^
I've uploaded the text !!!!
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i love this piece. I know what you are talking about. But leave this boy, he will only make your life worse.. believe me.
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Well, I liked this prose even though I disagree with your point of view. Basically because you shouldn't do to others what you don't want people to do to you and plus, you are not the one to decide if the heart is wounded or broken because you don't know how strong the heart is. A: You're not heartless, the heart is still there, you're probably cold hearted because you're still freezing from what he did to you. Maybe you need someone or something (like time and new seasons) to warm you up again. I don't know.
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I took it as real because I actually looked at its category and you have it as Literature>Prose>Non-Fiction>Emotional. But yeah, ok. It's a good piece. (=
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oh ..well.. i am so sorry .. i think i didn't pay much attention when i selected the things over there 
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