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loner-gurl — Why can't I Die?
Published: 2004-12-24 23:35:32 +0000 UTC; Views: 118; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 2
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Description Is this the end to which I was born?
Am I to suffer every day?
Am I to be mocked at every hand?
Was it written by fate?
That I was to have my flesh taken away?
Before it even came into this earth?
Am I to die a little every day?
Am I to be ridiculed for the least of my mistakes?
While they that mock no nothing of me or my trials.
Are the ones who scourge me to be my kin?
Am I to be passed off from person to person?
Like some Family fruitcake form year to year.
Is the cross I am made to bare that of a loveless life?
Where men see me only for my body?
Where women see me as the thing not to be?
Where my family only tolerates me?
Just because I was born?
Was I a mistake?
My father why have you left my presence?
Why will no one listen to the words I say?
Would everyone’s life be better if I was never here?
Does anyone truly love me for what I am,
And not as what I appear to be?
My mother why did you abuse me so?
Am I the thing that you despise?
Why can’t I just disappear from the face of the earth?
When will all these scars fade away?
I try to cut but I can’t bleed.
Except when it means a part of me is dead.
My sisters why do you hate my mind?
I am not a mindless drone.
I have my decisions to make.
Even if they are the same that you once made.
My brother’s why do you ignore me?
Why do you turn into men and see my body?
I am not just some annoying thing that always follows
I just wanted your love.
Heaven knows mother and father never showed it to me.
I am a person within this world.
I have feelings and needs as well.
Why wasn’t I born into another family?
Why did I get drunk that fateful night?
Why can’t I just say no?
Why do I cry at night?
Why can’t I just be left alone?
Why do I care about the lives of others?
Why don’t I just die?
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Comments: 8

Zero-D-E350 [2004-12-26 03:46:40 +0000 UTC]

I know who the speaker is...*pokes*

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loner-gurl In reply to Zero-D-E350 [2004-12-26 14:50:22 +0000 UTC]

No duh. but do you get what's going on in there? there are several significant events of my life in there.

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Zero-D-E350 In reply to loner-gurl [2004-12-26 15:23:44 +0000 UTC]

Yup, I know them all...

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loner-gurl In reply to Zero-D-E350 [2004-12-26 16:44:52 +0000 UTC]

I'm just going to sleep the day away

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Zero-D-E350 In reply to loner-gurl [2004-12-29 17:59:19 +0000 UTC]

Sleeeeeeeeeeeeeeep is the ultimate god.... LOL

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Sy-wen [2004-12-25 03:41:27 +0000 UTC]

Well you asked for advanced critique. I'd say in its' current form, it is the rants of the typical teenager. Add some structure and focus and it may have a better effect

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loner-gurl In reply to Sy-wen [2004-12-26 14:53:39 +0000 UTC]

It's been my vent for the past three months. Can you pull out some of the things in there that relate to my life?

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Sy-wen In reply to loner-gurl [2004-12-26 18:02:46 +0000 UTC]

What I was saying was, instead of making it one large vent session (which is in no way poetry), pick ONE topic/theme per poem. If your life is as horrible as you say it is, then you should have no problem coming up with enough per subject to write a poem. Maybe even a series of poems???

Can you pull out some of the things in there that relate to my life? How about, I can pull out everything and apply it to everyone's life? I don't mean to be rude, but all I know about your state of mind right now is that you are head-over-heels in love with Andrew and you hate your brother for putting limits on you.

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