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Published: 2015-04-22 14:24:31 +0000 UTC; Views: 665; Favourites: 8; Downloads: 0
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Description All was white and clinical.
       "Just lay back and relax," he told her.
       All was hot and cynical.
       She glanced sideways, saw her mother's face.
       "And breathe," he said again, snapping on some gloves. Martha squeezed her eyes shut.
       I don't want to ever open them again!
       "You can stop if you want," her mother told her, more urgent than comforting. Martha's eyes flew open. Her jaw clenched.
       "No," she said, mustering all the strength she had for that one word. Her mother released her hand and leant back into her chair.
       All was white and clinical.
       Martha resorted to staring at the ceiling.
       All was hot and cynical.
       The gentle sucking sound started. She jumped, and before her eyes,
       all was flesh, umbilical.
       And without meaning to, she cried out. The doctor paused, her mother just looked angrier.
       "Shall I stop?" he asked, raising his voice over the sucking. Beads of sweat clung to Martha's hairline, and she found herself gasping. The doctor exchanged a look with her mother.
       "Stop, stop," she tutted, dismissing the doctor.
       "No, don't stop!" Martha yelled. She sat up, clutching the armrests.
       "You can't do this," her mother hissed.
       "Yes I can!" Martha shouted. God she was sick of her mother. Sick of everything. Sick of all this shit. She just wanted to--
Thump!
       Martha shuddered, barely managing to catch her breath. She was winded, flattened against the chair, the ceiling swirling above her, about to beam her up into a dream land. Her mother was crossing over her. She couldn't see. The ceiling lurched at her. Martha was dizzy, so so dizzy; was that the tablets or Trinity's face floating around in front of her? Dear Trinity...
       "Do it," she'd heard faintly. Do what?
       A needle found a home in Martha's arm.


Martha woke up. And she felt so... invaded. She knew.
       She rubbed her legs together, trying to get rid of the feeling. They'd taken it. It was gone. Over. This was what she wanted, right? But why did her mother let it happen? Martha looked around. Her mother was nowhere to be seen.
       All was white, and all was clinical.
       She swung her legs out of bed and inspected them. She was fine, really. But when she lifted her gown, the feeling of the tube returned, moving around inside of her like a...
       No, she didn't want to think about that again. Martha tensed, fighting the mixture of feelings. Suddenly she felt so empty. She missed the weird little alien thing. Maybe if she searched the bins she could find it and get it back?
       The door slid open, and Trinity was there.
       Martha made a noise and launched herself off the bed, landing in the safety of Trinity's arms. Trinity hugged her close, felt the nakedness up Martha's back.
       "What did they do?" she whispered.
       "I don't know." Martha squirmed. She didn't want to talk about it anymore. She didn't even want to think about it. Wow! Something swelled inside of Martha. Her grief took a rollercoaster turn, looping into ecstasy. The smell of Trinity's clothes drove her crazy. She threw back her head, and crushed their lips together. The pair stood for a moment, immobilised. It must've been only a minute, but Trinity eventually pulled away, and steered Martha towards the bed, who was quiet.
       "You need to rest," she told her firmly, licking her lips of Martha's broken taste.
       "But Trin."
       "Go to sleep. I'll stay with you," she said, guiding her to lay back. Martha watched her, wanting her. But Trinity simply pulled the blanket up and stroked her hair, whispering nice things to her. Martha's eyes drooped shut. And in her dreams,
       all was white and whimsical.
       Her mother came in.
       All was hazed and physical.
       Trinity! She was hurt. Martha struggled to get to her.
       All was flesh.
       And somewhere between sleep and wakefulness, Martha knew. Trinity was gone.
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Comments: 11

blessedout [2021-01-03 01:24:03 +0000 UTC]

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RogueMudblood [2015-10-13 00:03:14 +0000 UTC]

One of the things I love in this is the way that you don't actually address the issues of rape and abortion. The rape is only alluded to, and the abortion - while a central element in the story - is not the point of this tale. It's the plot device that keeps it moving, it's the reason the story exists, but it isn't the focus for the reader. The way that you've told this, Martha's emotions are the center of the tale and our focus is on her as a person rather than anything else.

There is a particular device you've used here that I really like - the repetitious rhyme. It not only allows the reader to associate different elements of the story together, it also allows us to see that the opposite of what you're saying is the truth - it's not "clinical" at all.

Very interesting tale - thanks for sharing!

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LotusJadeThorn In reply to RogueMudblood [2015-11-18 15:43:45 +0000 UTC]

Awh thank you so much for this comment! I really appreciate that and I'm glad you enjoyed this

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vigour-mortis [2015-08-14 02:09:18 +0000 UTC]

Very dark and tense mood. For me, the only characters I think I know were real were Martha and the doctor.

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LotusJadeThorn In reply to vigour-mortis [2015-08-15 18:44:56 +0000 UTC]

Ooh, interesting take I'd never even thought of that interpretation! Thanks again~

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Miss-Fortunate-Kitty [2015-06-30 19:54:27 +0000 UTC]

Extremely well done! I'm glad when I checked the tags that I had followed along correctly. I was definitely left with a few questions (Where/why did Trin go? Who impregnated Martha?), but it doesn't take away from my enjoyment in the least. I loved the clear view I had of the scenes - how you gave minimal description and how well it worked. I loved the emotion with the mother and how they interacted, and I appreciated the dialogue (dialogue and character are the most important things to me, so I always love it when people do a great job with that). Definitely my favourite part was the repetition of the statements and rhyme. To me, repetition is a hit or miss thing, but can be so powerful when it's well done, and you did it very well. Thanks so much for sharing!

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LotusJadeThorn In reply to Miss-Fortunate-Kitty [2015-07-12 10:22:13 +0000 UTC]

Awh thank you very much for your comment It always makes me smile when I see people enjoying my writing. I don't often get comments like yours! I'm very glad you enjoyed it, and thanks again.

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commander-rolex [2015-05-27 05:08:19 +0000 UTC]

Woah. Just woah. That's all I can say

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LotusJadeThorn In reply to commander-rolex [2015-05-29 08:29:03 +0000 UTC]

I hope it's a sorta good whoa? Haha Thank you for faving this though~~   

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BlueNightFire [2015-04-22 16:19:20 +0000 UTC]

This reminds me of Stephen King's It. Not because of the clown or anything, just the fact that it's whimsical and poetic on the surface and yet very, very dark in meaning. Scared me, actually. :S

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LotusJadeThorn In reply to BlueNightFire [2015-04-22 20:55:15 +0000 UTC]

Thank you for your comment~

I personally haven't read Stephen King but I've heard much praise about his work, so I'll take that as flattery? Haha

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