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LuckyStarhun — [CE] Rothwer wants to buy a horse p1
Published: 2016-09-09 17:56:22 +0000 UTC; Views: 913; Favourites: 15; Downloads: 0
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Finally it's finished!
My entry for 's contest, Azarian Stories category! 
This time it's a two-page minicomic, next page will be uploaded shortly. It took me forever to draw this as I am not an experienced comic maker like Arven whose comics and stories are faboulous I wanted to draw Rothwer from AS with my character Remus and his horse Zealot from my own comic project. Azarian Stories has the ancient Greek-Roman feeling to it and I just had to have my characters make a visit in the realm! I hope you like it Arven! I love your shading style so much that I tried something similar, but the result is far not as epic 
At least I practiced drawing humans a bit...Next page:
Here is the cast:
Rothwer and Azarian Stories belongs to , Remus and Zealot belong to me
Art (c) me
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About your story, it makes me confuse about what really is going on between those two characters, first the blue guy wants to buy the horse, but a few comments later I wants a challenge, so.. At least the horse is the price of the challenge? And the other guy reject sell the horse, but then he accept the challenge, again whitout any fear to lose his horse? The blue guy could domate the horse and escape whit it, that could be a very nasty twist, but well I guess that I need more story for the final conclusion. About the art itself, I really admire your effort in it, very, very dedicated to the colors, the shadows, its just, incredible, but your technique falls in the dimention of the characters, you try to bring the 3d scent whit the shadows and the colors, but some detaills like weird looking of the arms, posture (look when the guy put his hand on his horse) the three fingers of the blue guy in one frame, the weird perspective of the blue guy in another frame (second frame) you can work on that, you can try to use the models of anime and manga, those that appear to "how make a face" you will see a circle whit some lines, those lines has their uses, and is be a guide for the perspective of the character, there is some for the body too, but I think, if you fix the face, you can easy fix the body later. So I dont have any doubt about your skills n_n
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Thank you for your critique! I agree with you about the story, but I intended it to be two pages only. It is hard to tell exactly what is going on in two pages, as the characters are from two different worlds (the ble guy is not my character, it is from another artist's series, the red guy and the horse are my own characters. They all have their background stories not told here, the knowing of which could have helped you understand the story. Of course it's understandable that one cannot instantly understand the meaning from such a short story. (In fact the red guy does not really want to sell the horse and the other one does not want to buy it, the main focus is on the bet - I could have just left the selling part out, you are right. Also, this specific horse would be very hard to escape with, it broke out from a lab and is extremely hard to ride because he shrugs everybody off and is not very controllable.) So it's kind of a crossoverish thing, not a story with a continuation. After the scene the characters both continue their virtual lives in their respective worlds.
I agree with you on the anatomy flaws, I have to practice more. However, it's not the second frame where the perspective is weird, but the first. The second frame is how I intended it, in the first frame the two guys are not lined up. So the second frame is the reference
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n_n dont worry, practice is not what you need, just a guide and you will be perfectly fine, because you have great skills
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you are very welcome.
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Your humans look fantastic! I love how expressive they are.
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Thank you! I don't draw them that often but I like to practice sometimes
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I smell the incoming pain...
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You'll see it in a couple of minutes... I just finished editing the 2nd page
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