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Gagilend [2010-12-11 19:36:17 +0000 UTC]
interesting idea
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MarahScott In reply to Gagilend [2010-12-14 01:17:03 +0000 UTC]
thank you, the idea actually is inspired by a short story.
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AnOtherSunrise [2010-12-06 17:06:51 +0000 UTC]
Good job!
I think the old space and the tree in the corner are very well done. The rest is also good, but the books look a bit unreal, cause they seem to be too small.
I like the effect, that the girl in the mirrow has the same necklace like the girl in the foreground, even the necklet is a bit too big^^
All in all the picture is a piece of wonderful work! *thumbs up*
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svoja-i-nicija [2010-12-05 22:36:15 +0000 UTC]
Lovely! It’s wonderful chaos!
I’m not used to critiquing, but here is my best try:
Color combination is nice. I like red and gold details, book is perfect, but that portrait in the background is a little bit to saturated, its distracting. Adding more shadow in entire picture would make it brilliant!
What I absolutely adore is effect you made by adding that misty view through window!
Falling papers are nice touch.
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streamline69 [2010-12-05 14:58:35 +0000 UTC]
The picture got my attention with an unusual colour scheme. Red and blue elements, combined with white lighting - that's doing the job! You made good work with picking the right stock images and composing them in a way, which tell the story really well.
Yet, I have a few suggestions. First of all, the red elements (portrait in the corner, necklace, books next to the chest, book in the hand of the model) - as someone pointed out previously - are drawing the attention at first glance. Human mind is constructed this way, and there's no way to avoid it . The book itself seems to be an important part and actually should draw the glances, but all the other objects would use more blending (I would advise experimenting with curves and hue/saturation filters).
The blueish/white fringe at the tree outline makes it stand out and not blend well with the surroundings (in PS, Layers=>Matting=>Defringe should help, at least a bit). Also, a bit of a tree branch seems to be hidden behind the window frame, I'm not sure whether it's intetional or not. If it is - well - the part of the branch outside the window should be much brighter, mathcing the colour with the other branches visible there.
The draped cloth in the corner could use some more shading, especially in next to the wall, which is almost black. The same goes for the girl right hand.
I'm also not sure about the blurred pages falling out of the book. The blur suggest motion, which is good. But it makes all the other elements of the scene too static - the model looks more like a frozen in time statue than a real human being.
I know, it looks like a whole list of complaints on my side, but these are only details, easy to fix and even easier to be avoided in the future
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Kuoma-stock [2010-12-02 15:17:50 +0000 UTC]
So beautiful!
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SiNg0d [2010-12-01 13:17:51 +0000 UTC]
Great job! The extra detailing is wonderful! Loved it!
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MarahScott In reply to SiNg0d [2010-12-03 07:02:23 +0000 UTC]
thank you so much!
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da-joint-stock [2010-12-01 12:46:43 +0000 UTC]
Nice work! Great how you've adjusted the lighting to match the scene!
I do have a few suggestions though...
-There are a few things that jumped out at me immediately, which is good, but you don't want them to hold your attention for too long. The woman's necklace, the emblem on the diary, the books beside the chest, and the picture and frame on the left draw a lot of attention. For this sort of scene, I'd suggest making those objects sort of like 'extras' - things that you can see if you continue looking at the scene.
-For the picture on the left and the books on the right, try reducingthe Saturation a bit and perhaps the Contrast slightly. You want to make them look older and untouched and draw less attetion.
-As for her necklace and the emblem on the diary, lowering the Saturation a bit should work. If not, try also darkening them a bit.
-My only other suggestion is to try to clean up the edges of the tree - the edges have a lot of residue from the original background and it takes away from the surreality of the scene.
Otherwise, excellent work!
Good luck for the Contest!
Dan
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