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Published: 2014-12-22 13:59:01 +0000 UTC; Views: 902; Favourites: 8; Downloads: 0
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My OCs: SHSL Astronaut and SHSL MountaineerEDIT: Submitting this to improvement-club.deviantart.co… I'm hoping for corrections for lights/shadows/folding for clothes. Even if it's just one article of clothing, it would be of great help! (: Thanks!
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Hello, I'm from the Improvement-Club I don't have time to do a draw over but I can do a quick written critique!
I really don't see any "problems" at all with the clothing or shading details, it looks very nice! Overall, it would be nice to see one more lighting pass to pull out the forms a bit more. It could be used on areas like the tops of both their shoes (where they would be lighter than the front side of the shoes going down), on the girl's hands (to separate them more from the forearms) and the top of the girl's hair. I honestly like the value range you have going though, those highlights would only need to be subtle to show the plain change.
The only clothing fold I'm seeing that looks odd is the one around the girl's collar/chest area. It's a little unclear what the form of the collar is and how it's attaching.
Overall it looks nice, I hope this helps!
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Thank you so much! 
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You're welcome, I'm glad it can help!
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With the mountaineer, don't be afraid to add contrast. You want the shadows and highlights to pop, not just be in the backround (unless its character design, then don't stray too far from the basic colors). Other than that, it looks great. Maybe try to get a more clear source of light?
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Thanks so much for the feedback! I had the feeling his hat was too dark. I'll probably brighten all the reds and yellows!
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you're welcome! that's a good place to start
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I think the clothes and the shading on the clothes is fine. it looks great to me.
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Nah, this was done a few weeks ago!
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