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Mayhem-Artist — The King of Imps
Published: 2004-02-12 22:28:22 +0000 UTC; Views: 143; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 14
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Sleeping monster doesn’t stay awakeWhen the heavens rains with thunderous quake
Of the worst kinds of mutants in the storm
Without perception or even human form.
The gust of nature’s wind will perish hope
While the Grim Reaper walks with his rope
Down the Valley of the Shadow of Death
Into the fog of the sea serpent’s breath.
Alone in the cold of the winter’s ache,
Hearing the sound of my heart’s twisting break.
Into the Devil’s mind I am paralyzed,
For eons I sit transfixed and hypnotized;
Centuries burning like a critter in a hurricane,
No god or angel can prevent me from going insane.
The little girl at home asleep on her pillow;
When will the world end? Nobody will know.
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One teensy possible alteration. You could replace 'rains like' to 'rains with', because the rest of the peice is written as solid visual metaphor, so to slip a similie in makes it seem a tad uncertain. If death stalks, then I'm sure demons could rain down.
Other than that, nothing to poke or prod. The duality is an interesting feature, the transfoxed demon, and the paralysed girl, innocence and violence. Which is which? Wonderful wording and unstrained rhyme scheme.
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Good tip, thanks, I went ahead and did that. It sounds better. Looking back on this piece it feels rather elementary, seeing as how I wrote it spontaneously one day in high school junior year, without care for style, rhyme scheme, or anything. The picture came along one day, I pieced them together, and this is the result. I'm pleased that most liked it.
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prevent you from going insane...now why would anyone want to do that?
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I often wonder what it would be like if I killed an imp. Ah the possibilities.
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all so much fantasy...i always get that feel from your drawings.
not so much from your poetry...which is prolly why i adore your poetry more. 
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How do you add a pic. with your poem?
^^^This kicks ass.
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The King of Imps replies: At the submission page where you put in the collection of text, underneath that will be a box with the word "Preview" next to it, you browse through your U drive, find the pic, click on it, and " Continue" to submit it.
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