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Meeper — My Oxygen

Published: 2004-10-25 02:22:20 +0000 UTC; Views: 201; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 4
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Description Drifting drifting drifting...
Floating in an icy sea,
Mercury sliding along in it's distaste of me.

And come along,
With an stopping anchor,
From the clipping bergs I was tore.

Warmth again,
Hazel meets black,
Twain from that gaze never, I would not go back.

Beaming smile my lantern,
A ray for me in the typhoon's wall,
Intertwine the tendrils of two lovers' all.

Gentle words,
Amongst the froth you call my name,
A lulling sound, the signature same.

Weaving a decade between our fingers,
Another day, another blessing, another crest,
So long as in your honest heart I rest.

Powerless in your grasp,
Utterly at peace and contentment I lie,
Within your arms perfection, previously denied.

The scars bear my lessons,
Never again the same mistake be made.
Topple battlements, needed no more the blockade.

Twirled around your finger,
A little string of broken wings,
The heart stopped its crying and resume its singing.
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Comments: 10

balinlesavage [2004-11-18 16:18:26 +0000 UTC]

The last four stanzas are excellent, I like the way they move, and the imagery is quite good.

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Meeper In reply to balinlesavage [2004-11-19 00:46:48 +0000 UTC]

You have no idea what an honor this is, to be complimented by someone like you.

...sorry, had to get THAT out of the way.

O.o It was in those last 4 stanzas that I actually stretched for. I didn't think that they'd be counted as the best...

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balinlesavage In reply to Meeper [2004-11-19 05:30:38 +0000 UTC]

pfft... I'm no better than anybody else...

Anyway, I think the 'weaving a decade' lines are beautiful, and there is a powerful, mature resolve at the end of the poem, a strong decision in the face of the past, and that's not a choice many people make. Maybe that's why I liked the last four stanzas best.

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Meeper In reply to balinlesavage [2004-11-20 02:00:08 +0000 UTC]

You're quite modest I see.

I think everyone that hasn't the right one has had the same experiance(s) as I. It's an almost universal pain.

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Xidian [2004-10-26 00:49:31 +0000 UTC]

Oooh. I really like this one, very sweet and pleasant! As mentioned, the imagery is awesome. One of your best, I'd say. ^-^

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Meeper In reply to Xidian [2004-10-26 01:58:35 +0000 UTC]

^-^ I had some serious inspiration behind it. Perhaps that's why.

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IrkenSnax [2004-10-25 05:23:49 +0000 UTC]

Nobody likes me

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Meeper In reply to IrkenSnax [2004-10-26 00:40:42 +0000 UTC]

^-^ Tyler likes you. Doesn't he count?

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chiefeagle02 [2004-10-25 02:37:12 +0000 UTC]

I like the imagery.

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Meeper In reply to chiefeagle02 [2004-10-25 02:42:53 +0000 UTC]

^^ Thank you...

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