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meregoddess — Can't Let You Go
Published: 2010-06-26 03:48:11 +0000 UTC; Views: 738; Favourites: 21; Downloads: 15
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Another Villanelle I wrote. I think I finally got the form!I'd like to thank quickreaver [link] for the use of the gentleman's photo for this deviation.
Thanks for reading, I appreciate you taking the time!
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"if you love somebody, set them free." sensible words, but so damn difficult to do...
i'm surprised that i didn't see your poetic works before. you're brilliant!
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Thank you, one of my favorites.
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I'm going to admit total ignorance here, and state that I have no idea what form it is you used, and if it works or not. I'm not educated fully in poetry form, but thank you for broadening the knowledge I do posses.
What I can say, is a rather generic and pathetic thing, which is just that... I really felt this poem. It was beautifully written, and it played a sore note on my heart strings.
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Oh thank you so much, I'm glad you enjoyed it,and that it touched you. It's one of my favorite poems to have written. You've very kind
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Villanelle is a really difficult form and I think you pulled it off really well here... its difficult to express yourself in such a strict form but I could really relate to this.. there was a time in my life when I felt exactly like that!
I think there is a typo in the third last line tho... it says canot not... its meant to be could not isnt it?
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I'll have to check that, I'll fix it if so. Arggggggh Thanks for the kind words and the encouragement. Much appreciated.
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This is very well done, you use the form the way it should be used. The only part that seemed to not flow well was the 4th stanza, but I absolutely adore the last one, it felt very natural to me. I hope to see you try various other forms as well. Keep up the good work.
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Oh I intend to! Once I found out my last attempt was short on rhyme, I was bound and determined to get it right this time. Thanks for the compliment, I'll check out the 4th stanza
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I am not versed in the form, but it does feel a bit ...muddy (can't think of a better word for the feeling) to me. I still like it for the message of despairing love, something I think we can all remember from some point in ours lives.
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Okay, thanks. I was afraid it might be a bit "muddy" and not steady in flow when reading. I like you still like the message, but wasn't so sure about the flow. Thanks for the comments
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I wish I was more familiar with that form, so I could be of more help.
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You were of great help. If you enjoyed the poem, regardless of the flow then that is what matters
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