Comments: 34
HanneDobermann [2010-03-25 23:05:12 +0000 UTC]
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okay, first of all, i love those books! e.deviantart.net/emoticons/l/l… " width="19" height="19" alt="" title="La la la la"/>
now on to the critique e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s… " width="15" height="15" alt="" title=" (Smile)"/> your overall layout is very creative. the water on the top with the fish is excellent!
with the 2 profile heads, you want to be sure that the ridge isnt so prominent. if you look here, its more of a simple slope-[link]
Leopard and Firestar's heads look great though! e.deviantart.net/emoticons/h/h… " width="15" height="13" alt="" title="Heart"/>
you want to be sure that their eyes dont look so canine-ish. they should be rounder, almost like an almond shape-[link]
the clouds need a bit of work. yeah clouds are hard though! e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s… " width="24" height="18" alt="" title="CURSE YOU!"/>
if you want to try a natural looking cloud like this-[link] , try shading different areas with different pressures to get an effect.
like this cloud-[link] same thing. i suggest googling clouds and referencing them e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s… " width="15" height="15" alt="" title=" (Smile)"/>
as with the lighting...i would not make it so "z" like. it should be random, and at different widths.-[link] see how there is one bolt with little "branches" coming off and how its at different widths and lengths? when i draw lightning i make the lines random, but still flowing off of the main bolt
lastly, a little more shading definition on firestar would add more impact. instead of red, try using purples, browns and blacks in the darker areas! e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s… " width="15" height="15" alt="" title=" (Smile)"/>
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stormyytears [2017-03-18 21:23:53 +0000 UTC]
Awww so cute
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Faminefoot [2010-03-24 00:48:03 +0000 UTC]
Very nice ^^ I likee
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silverlionwolf [2010-03-23 22:02:26 +0000 UTC]
It looks awesome!
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Murley [2010-03-23 21:02:17 +0000 UTC]
What an original and colorful artwork )
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lizcat14 [2010-03-23 20:28:07 +0000 UTC]
nice job
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