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MirrorandImage In reply to Ebbiegirl95 [2011-08-27 19:01:30 +0000 UTC]
The general consensus with the background is that it's flat and unimpressive and I agree. A few ideas and tutorials have been given to me and have given me some good ideas. I am surprised that you say the anatomy is off, especially since others say it's spot on. May I ask what's off about it? And the hands?
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LostThyme [2011-08-24 23:08:52 +0000 UTC]
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Hey! I don’t know much about Assassin's Creed, but I guess that’s not necessary to critique.
Overall, his proportions fit for an old guy, his head might be a tad big. Generally the eyes are halfway down the skull (citation needed), but his eyes are a bit lower which almost mimics the “little green alien” sort of proportions.
Also, I had a hard time telling that he was sitting on something at first glance. I think it might be a combination of the shading on his coat, the shading on his legs, and the way they’re bent.
Oh, and there’s a random squiggle inside his right elbow. That might be your signature, though. Not sure.
I think the background and the foreground would mesh more if the lighting source matched. From what I can see, he should be backlit, but the way you’ve shaded makes it look like the background is just like a wallpaper and he has a bright light in front of him.
I think the fire effect is pretty cool, but generally fire doesn’t separate into nice little strands like that. If you look at reference pictures for it, you can see that fire is more… fluid, sort of like the smoke you see coming off of a candle when you blow it out. Also, the colors would have more variation since they’re determined by color, and it would be giving off smoke that would put sort of a hazy glow around it, rather than straight up gray.
So I guess this can be boiled down to lighting sources. Lighting should be consistent throughout a piece, and light and colors reflect, even on smoke. Sorry for the rambling. e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b… " width="15" height="16" alt="" title="Blush"/>
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MirrorandImage In reply to LostThyme [2011-08-25 18:31:20 +0000 UTC]
Thank you for the feedback. Good eye on catching the proportions of his head, it's off by a tiny bit and I didn't notice it.
I see what you mean about the lighting effects; others have pointed it out too. I think you nailed it on the head when you say the background and Ezio don't fit together, and the lighting only enhances the point. Thanks for the feedback!
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tardis101 [2011-08-23 10:29:38 +0000 UTC]
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Hello, *tardis101 from #ProjectComment here!
You requested a targeted comment in which you would like advice on improving the background and overall impact of the piece, so is is a critique aimed at helping with that!
Firstly though, I would like to compliment you on the way you did the smoke in the background - the contrast of grey and black gives a more realistic effect to the picture!
Also, the proportions of the man in the foreground are very good - everything seems to be in place and the right length for a human man!
To improve the background, I would recommend adding some different colours to the fire to make it moe realistic! Adding dark reds, oranges, yellows and whites will help, but also maybe adding hints of blue sometimes will make a nice difference!
I would also try to add some detail to the floor, like perhaps light from the fire hitting it!
To improve the man in the foreground, I would try to add some more details to his clothing - folds, shading and highlights! Also, colouring the lineart will give him a softer and more realistic look!
As a final thought, I would recommend using the overlay tool to add some stunning lighting effects to this picture! The light from the fire would be hitting him from behind, so a nice glow around him would look amazing!
I hope this comment helped you with the advice you were looking for!
*tardis101
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tardis101 In reply to MirrorandImage [2011-08-24 10:49:13 +0000 UTC]
Im glad you found it useful!
You need to be careful with the overlay tool when you use it, as it gives off some really strong colours! I tend to go a bit OTT with it, but thats just cuz I love it!
An example of lighting using overlay is this [link] everything that is orange was done using different colours and layers of overlay!
If you want me to (this is entirely up to you) I can go on skype and show you how all the different colours and layers affect the lighting of the pic! But thats up to you!
Also, this is a VERY good lighting tutorial, the "back light" one would apply to your picture! [link]
I hope that helped haha Im not so good at explaining stuff!
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MirrorandImage In reply to tardis101 [2011-08-24 20:59:57 +0000 UTC]
Woot! I love that tutorial! (saves) There are some methods there I've never tried before. Thanks!
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SvalaW [2012-01-29 15:25:05 +0000 UTC]
Great work! I like the fierce expression and the effects in the background are really cool, they work well with the overall atmosphere of this pic.
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