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modestmelon — The day I cut my losses

Published: 2003-06-28 17:24:19 +0000 UTC; Views: 272; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 44
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Description Breathe

It’s all I could do, to humble the pain.
Take a breath, exhale…

Repeat and start again.

Reflection on the floor, which should have been inside.
Red lips of life, aching, pouring down my side.

Not me yet, but my soul which has died.

I bite my lip, hoping for relief.
A sweet taste of life, yet only brief.

Stealing what is mine, arrogant filthy thief.

Exhale

A point to far passed, a pit to deep.
No-one to cradle my head, as I fall asleep.

I lay face down, in a reflection which is me.
Flowing from the start to where the end will be.

A moonlit sky, A loved ones face.
Realized now, too hard to replace.

Looking back, too simple all the causes…
But this is simply what happens…
When one decides to cut their losses…
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Comments: 5

darksoulangel [2003-09-16 08:39:26 +0000 UTC]

i like this alot
i looked thru ur whole gallery
this is my favourite
your words breath life...
i get images in my head reading it...
only great artists have this talent, and you are included...
kudos
+fav

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nerdchick [2003-08-24 01:38:04 +0000 UTC]

Very very nice. It says a lot in very few words.

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omarbig [2003-08-07 23:26:28 +0000 UTC]

Great poemAnd oh yes perfect manip too
And yes the only problem in D.A for me is the english.Sorry for that.

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uselessmule [2003-07-04 17:08:24 +0000 UTC]

This picture is also better than a bag of cuttlefish. Very good work sir. I really really like the new things that you are making.

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bren [2003-06-28 20:46:48 +0000 UTC]

I'm really no expert or anything when it comes to poetry BUT I really like the way you worded this. The "Breathe" and "Exhale"...while going into the poem on those two subjects is really good.
This seems like it should be in a book. VERY well written!

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