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Theodoricos [2012-06-09 16:50:34 +0000 UTC]
I loved how you explored the scene in Mass Effect 1 in such a great detail. The story helps us see what Liara and Shepard could have been thinking during their encounter, and just how they coped with the first threat they face together. Shepard giving Liara a quick lesson about combat prior to the attack was also a very neat touch and I think this is precisely what Shepard would have done.
As a side note, I also loved the interactions with Garrus. You write him really well and so in-character, and I loved his banter with Tiberius since I can relate to my own Shepard, whose best friend is that very same turian. Definitely a lot of potential in this story, and now I'll be looking over the second chapter.
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moreeman06 In reply to Theodoricos [2012-06-09 18:14:18 +0000 UTC]
Thanks I'm glad you liked it, I think Garrus is alot of Shep's bro's he certainly is mine, and as i said in lilitheris fanfic thread when someone asked about shepards relationship with characters I think that Garrus comes to think of Shepard as a brother throughout the series and in most ways he views himself as closer with shepard than with most Turians. And I'm glad you thought i wrote him in character i just remembered Garrus as being the wise cracking sarcastic hero and i was trying to make sure he didn't come across as corny when i wrote the dialogue.
As for the Liara thing I'm happy you liked the way i wrote her and Shep and that little lesson in the begining I thought it made sense rather than just giving Liara a gun because Shepard would have no idea if she's had any previous experience with firearms.
Thanks alot though and I promise I'll read yours when i get home ff.net doesn't do well on my phone
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moreeman06 In reply to Akernis [2012-06-09 00:48:26 +0000 UTC]
haha how do you use that emote
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moreeman06 In reply to Akernis [2012-06-09 15:59:10 +0000 UTC]
its ok i figured the bold italicized out pretty quickly but i was confused on how everyone used all those little emoticons because the only ones i could get were the ones on the sidebar that go in the corner. so yeah i guess we all learn something new.
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PMC65 [2012-06-07 16:59:51 +0000 UTC]
Liked this! And no blue babies? SWEET!
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moreeman06 In reply to PMC65 [2012-06-08 04:47:04 +0000 UTC]
glad you liked it, and its a little to early for blue babies so you're safe for now....
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