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MrMortuus — Too Young [NSFW]
Published: 2012-08-07 22:39:25 +0000 UTC; Views: 224; Favourites: 5; Downloads: 0
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Description Too young.

I remember when I met you that first day at school
You were the one, the centre, popularity can be so cruel
Egos swelled
Unchecked and unparalleled

Then there was me
Sidelined, blindsided
Terrified and ever reminded
Of what a failure, I deemed myself to be
The rotten branch on the family tree.

Heart beaten black and blue
Despite that, I still got you
Rampant insecurity, nerves shocked
Girl you had my heart fucking overclocked.
What the fuck was I to you?
A front row seat to something new?
Life`s a movie, and mine is a tragedy
I was my own adversary.

As the years went on, I had you, but I wanted something more
Drugs wrapped up in the plastic of a cryptic metaphor
I became something more
Popular with the wrong crowd
My future screamed, so loud
Come on dad, look at me
Isn`t this just how you wanted me to be?

Beads of sweat rubbed between you and I
Abortion over the sound of a babies cry
But still our passion swelled
Unchecked and unparalleled

Life`s a game
So lets hit the methadone clinic
And win it
Grab hold of the wheel of misfortune and spin it


Too young you and I
Too young to see you die
Tear stained faces
Baseline`s the basis
Stuck screaming under a ruined tower
Life once more made me cower
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Comments: 5

PrescottKaamf [2012-09-12 04:29:02 +0000 UTC]

I love the way how you interpretate it in poetry.
So deep.
With lots of sentiment.
Sorry for my bad english, just trying to say, I really like your poetry.

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MrMortuus In reply to PrescottKaamf [2012-09-12 22:06:39 +0000 UTC]



Don`t sweat it, I understand perfectly what you are saying, and thank you a lot!

Your English isn't bad either, its a lot better than many I have met on this site whom of which don't even bother with capitalization.


So thank you a bunch for the comment!

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KayDeeEmm [2012-08-30 00:18:33 +0000 UTC]

Whoa, that is extreme. I really like your poetry here. The rhythm, passion, recurring theme and the good use of vocabulary when it comes to rhyming.
Deep and stunning! Great job! : D

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MrMortuus In reply to KayDeeEmm [2012-08-30 00:26:42 +0000 UTC]


Thank you! I had to let a lot of my past out with this one, so it has a big place in my heart compared to every other work I`ve done.

I`m quite happy that someone has actually viewed this. XD

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KayDeeEmm In reply to MrMortuus [2012-08-30 02:50:25 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome! 8D
I think a lot of poetry has to come from your heart or else it feels in a way "fraud and emotionless". Well not completely emotionless but you wouldn't feel an attachment to it.
And man, you have been through stuff and back! Good job on that! : ]

I was creepin along other peoples pages and I came across your account and I usually look at galleries out of everything

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