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Mustache-Twirler — Nitrona and Starla: The Gary-Stus Karma

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Description A direct followup to this;
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And a gift art for my friend, DrMatthew178

Music to listen to while reading this;
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The two of them had seen everything that took place outside their home universe upon the arrival of Admiral Narcissist Judgement.
Starla, the natural angelic embodiment of benevolence of her universe, was disgusted to bare witness to the ruthless brutality the Gary-Stu unleashed upon Joan of Arc, who Starla had tried to help become a paladin of freedom.
And Nitrona, the natural demonic embodiment of malevolence in her universe, who was enraged to bare witness to the vicious cruelty the Gary-Stu unleashed on Sir Peccatori, who Nitrona had a romantic affair with for some time.
The both of them brace themselves for the unnatural force that heads straight towards them, until ANJ stops at just a few meters away, as he raises his hand and specifially targets Starla.

Admiral Narcissist Judgement: “Starla! I select thee a Chosen One! One who will slay the Dark Lord as the Prophecy of Heroism shall be written in STONE!”

ANJ raises his hand and prepares to deform Starla into a Chosen One that he would manipulate to slay Nitrona with, but to no effect.

Starla; “You mean force us against our will to fulfill your glorified fan-fiction at everyone’s expense?”

ANJ’s eyes began to twitch in agitation upon hearing such criticism, but since criticism generally should not work when used by true benevolent against the Gary-Stu, ANJ does not take concern of it.

Admiral Narcissist Judgement; “So you’ve been informed... All the more reason to justify my heroism upon punishing the informants earlier. How much have they spoiled you exactly?”

Starla; “We were told everything about you. Especially your failure to understand right from wrong!”

At first, ANJ was in denial of such talk from such, but then he realized his omnipotence had drastically decreased. Not bothering to use his supervision to investigate around him as to what’s causing this, ANJ resumes his bravado.

Admiral Narcissist Judgement; “I know everything about what’s right and wrong. I have come to spearhead heroism through all villains. Even that pathetic excuse for one who thinks he has a lover!”

Upon hearing that insult towards Sir Peccatori, Nitrona snaps and charges with her claws and teeth bared, straight towards the Gary-Stu! ANJ, assuming that her power is still far beneath his, folds one arm behind his back and prepares to block Nitrona with his other arm like a godly dictator blocks a rebel, flipping the middle finger at her as his shield! But to his shock, Nitrona elbows that middle finger out of her way and lands a firect swipe of her claws at the Gary-Stu’s face! Though hardly even a microscopic scrath is visible on his face, the blow sends the Gary-Stu hurtling straight through a bunch of galaxy clusters and crash landing right onto the edge of the universe! ANJ recovers from the collision with a dumbfounded look on his face, as he sees Nitrona racing straight at him!

Nirtona; “YOU DARE BUTCHER MY BOYFRIEND ALIVE, WEAR HIS RIPPED OUT JAW AS A CROWN, AND CALL THAT HEROISM!?!?!?”

Nitrona strikes ANJ with a barrage of slashes, bites and punches at the Gary Stu’s so-called face of perfection! Still no scratches or bite marks, but unlike his encounter with Joan and Sir Peccatori, to ANJ’s shock, Nitrona is successfully inflicting damage on him through rupturing blood vessels due to the shock of each impact!

Admiral Narcissist Judgement; “WHAT THE #### IS GOING ON!? I AM A GARY-STU-”

The Gary-Stu is quickly interrupted by a barrage of punches to the liver by Nitrona, who has gone completely livid!

Nitrona; “YOUR WEAKNESS, CRITICISM! THAT’S WHAT, JACKASS! AND YOU SURE ARE A GARY-STU ALRIGHT! THE WORST THING TO EVER EXIST... NEXT TO A MARY-SUE!”

ANJ realizes just how blind he was, as he uses his supervision to scan the universe around him.
Turns out that much earlier, Peccatori secretly grafittied the entire universe and its residents, with criticism against the Gary Stu, using invisible markers. And unlike with the foreign defenders, ANJ forgot to nullify Pec from doing so here.

Yet just as Nitrona is about to land a critical blow at ANJ in the face, the Gary-Stu snatches her by the throat and hoists her above his head, as he pulls out of nowhere a large, ruby-encased, beating heart!

Admiral Narcissist Judgement; “You crave power, dont you?... It’s the reason that clown you call a “boyfriend” caught your attention to begin with!”

Generally, Nitrona would be thrilled to obtain more power, but what ANJ held in the palm of his hand only upset and shocked her even more.

Nitrona; “...Is that my boyfriend’s heart!?...”

Admiral Narcissist Judgement; “Yes, and what you will do next, is that you will backstab that stupid troll! You will snatch his heart for yourself! You will bite down hard into it’s flesh! You will drain it of all it’s power! And once you have sucked it dry, you will cackle miniacally like an raving idiot, not only in satisfaction of finally obtaing that power of his you crave so much, but also revel in laughter that the worthless hippopotamus you pretended to be a “lover” to, is disposed of!”

Nitrona; “...And why the Hell would a so-called “Superhero” like you demmand me to do such a thing to my lover!?”

Admiral Narcissist Judgement; “It will further enforce and Justify me as a benevolent, righteous, heroic paladin of divine justice, when I slay you with Starla as my Chosen One, for the Prophecy is Written in Stone!”

ANJ raises his hand, and from out of nowhere, a stone slab rises, and in its scriptures, was a text and image of the Gary-Stu, savagely forcing Peccatori’s heart, straight down Nitrona’s throat! Not surprisingly, this only further infuriated Nitrona. Yet, just as the Gary-Stu is about fulfill what has been written in stone so far, Starla descends upon him and erases that scripture, with a familiar aura ANJ knew was generally used by Joan of Arc! ANJ looks up and drops the heart and Nitrona in shock! Starla had now become the bearer over Jeanne D’arc’s power of the Hydrus, a mighty force once used only against the power of Infernal Damnation, now converted against badly written characters like the Gary-Stu!

Starla; “And yet YOU are the one who is deliberately forcing my sister to take that power!”

Triggered at Starla, the Gary-Stu violently shoves Peccatori’s Heart right into Nitrona’s face, before punching her out of his way! Nitrona, with Pec’s heart planted into her face, is launched all the way to the other side of the universe in an enormous crash! Upon impact, she manages to survive thanks to the her criticism at ANJ protecting her from critical harm! It wasn’t long before her most loyal follower, Calley, desperately rushes to her master’s aid as Nitrona pulls Pec’s heart from her damaged face.

Calley; “To Hell with that Disgusting Manifested Big Grey Villain trope, I know you can beat him Nitrona, let me just help regenerate you first since I have learned a few enchantments-“

There was no need to, Nitrona managed to recover as she pulls Pec’s heart from her face. As soon as she looked at Pec’s heart, she found an encryption carved on the ruby surface. Turns out, it is a personal letter from Peccatori for her.

Dear Nitrona,
If you are reading this letter from my torn out heart, then I have failed you as a fellow malevolent and a lover. I truly am but a shadow of what my ancestors once were. And later on, I became even more so, because I meet you. There is no room in your universe for two embodiments of evil, so I had to give up my desires to become a Dark Lord, due to my affection for you. And my ultimate ambition? Well, I knew all along that it was my power that brought you to me, and now, I give you my power, the power of the Hellmouths, as my ultimate gift for you. You have more than earned it!
-Love Sir Peccatori

So many emotions stirred within Nitrona as the power from Pec’s heart is automatically drained out, and is absorbed into Nitrona. Upon obtaining Peccatori’s power, Nitrona bared the symbol of the Hospitalier cross on her chest! She then raised her hand, and with a single thought, an entire army of Hellmouth mounts and countless armies of Peccatori’s demons come to her aid, the very same ones ANJ had slaughtered and ressurrected only to force them to watch the latter’s atrocities. It truly is the power that made her find Pec to be so alluring.

Yet Nitrona was not happy to have obtained this power. Because in her mind, it could only mean one thing... Peccatori had fully sacrificed himself! Nitrona began to loose herself as she handed Pec’s Ruby heart to Calley.

Nitrona; “Keep this safe!...”

Calley took the heart without question and retreated to safety as Nitrona wiped away her tears and began to transform. Her eyes began to glow in an inferno of hot colors, and her magenta and purple fiery hair errupted into a furious blaze, with a white center burning hotter than ever before! And from her mouth grew teeth similar to her boyfriend’s. With her transformation complete, Nitrona screamed in absolute rage, firing Infernal blades from out of her jaws, before summoning her most powerful Hellmouth steed and launches herself straight for her arch nemesis.

Back at the war zone, Starla struggles to hold her own as ANJ savagely thrashes her across the galaxies, entire quasars explode in their path!

Admiral Narcissist Judgement; “IF YOU WILL NOT BECOME MY CHOSEN ONE, THEN IT WILL BE WRITTEN IN STONE THAT YOU WILL BE A FILTHY DARK LORD PARASITE THAT I WILL SMITE DOWN FROM EXISTENCE, ALONG WITH YOUR PUTRID SISTER!”

As Starla struggles, she could detect the aura of power her sister now weilds.

Starla; “Careful what you wish for, Gary-Stu! I once believed I could love everyone, even my sister, despite our differences. Yet now that you just said that despite the fact that you see all of us as Dark Lord Parasites to begin with, I do not care about you!”

Suddenly, ANJ is struck by a blast of infernal blades launched at him from countless Hellmouths, before Nitrona soars right at the Gary Stu with absolute fury!

Nitrona; “YOU MESSED WITH MY MAN!!!”

Nitrona snatches the Prophecy slab and thrusts it right at ANJ in the chops! Finally, blood was drawn as the stone slab smashes ANJ’s face and his teeth are sent flying! Yet Nitrona was not done just yet as she continued to slash, bite and jab at the Gary Stu! ANJ also lashes out, savagely pummeling Nitrona with Hyperverse-shattering punches all over, yet her criticisms help shield her from fatality! This flurry of assaults roars across the universe, until Nitrona has her Hellmouths fire out Infernal Morning Stars, blasting ANJ out of her universe and into the infinite dimensions.

As the Gary-Stu regenerates, he turns around to see what’s going on. And as he does, the picture of the situation he is in very much resembles the situations Thanos got himself into, when he kept pissing off the Marvel Multiverse;

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Except this was on ROID RAGE, and spearheaded by Master Fiendish and his mother! Everyone in the infinite dimensions has a go at the Gary Stu! Everyone assaults him with infinite criticism on how much of a bullshit character he is! Everyone wails down Holy Hell on ANJ’s ass! Until finally, they back away to expose him in front of Nitrona and Starla. Regenerating from his countless injuries, the Gary Stu flips out, flailing his arms like legs, as if his back legs were chopped off, and he charges straight for the two sisters, screaming “I AM OMNIPOTENCE! I AM OMNISCIENCE! I AM OMNIPRESENCE! I AM BOUNDLESS! AND I WILL HAVE MY PROPHECY, OF A CHOSEN ONE, SLAYING A DARK LORD, WRITTEN IN STONE!”

Starla; “You know something, Gary-Stu? I forgive you for harming my sister and I that we had to depend on forces and allies beyond our own power to stop you. Because you have proven to us that we are flawed, therefore we are not reviled Mary-Sues!”

Grasping onto the stone Prophecy slab ANJ once summoned, Starla crushes it into debris. As she then raises her hand towards the Gary Stu and blasts him with the Holy powers of the Hydrus, she illuminates. And when Starla illuminates, ANJ discovers the reason he has failed to contaminate Starla into a Chosen One. For a written critique from invisible ink had been graffitied in Starla’s robes! And written on her robes, it says;

Admiral Narcissist Judgement is the worst excuse for a “Superhero” to ever exist!
-Sir Peccatori

As the Gary-Stu reads the critique, his power is neutralized, and he flips his shit!

Admiral Narcissist Judgement; “NO! I WILL NOT BE FOILED BY THE POWER OF CRITICISM!”

Nitrona; “OH, JUST TAKE THE CRITICISM AND GET THE HELL OUT OF OUR REALM ALREADY, MAJOR BUTTHURT ASSHOLE!”

And with a huff and a puff, Nitrona blew ANJ’s over-bloated Narcissist ego down, as well as literally and physically blow him down with her newfound Infernal blade breath, together with Starla’s Power of the Hydrus! The Gary-Stu lets out a screech of livid frustration, as the underbite of Pec he wore as a crown flew off of his head, and he is launched out of the infinite dimensions and into the outerverse, until he was too far away to even tell if he still exits at all! Admiral Narcissist Judgement, the “invincible” Gary-Stu, has been vanquished!

End

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Comments: 16

yogelis [2023-03-16 13:15:43 +0000 UTC]

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Mustache-Twirler In reply to yogelis [2023-03-16 14:13:20 +0000 UTC]

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rogelis [2018-12-05 00:11:37 +0000 UTC]

 this is totally the most incredible phenomenal bizarre crazy and great masterpiece that I've seen!

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Mustache-Twirler In reply to rogelis [2018-12-05 00:16:19 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much! Although I do admit I think I used the spray can effect a bit too much. But yes, I wanted Matthew’s characters teach that horrid Gary-Stu not to mess with Criticism let alone Nitrona’s lover.

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AudeS [2018-11-28 21:58:37 +0000 UTC]

Since I did give you a personal statement before, I think it is time to reactivate my old bones. As your story has become a splendid take on how different types of heroes and villains exist in media, using the metaphysical aspects of storytelling as the metaphysical principles of this reality, the story of an ultimate force of lawful self-righteousness (the law being his own) fighting for the sake of satisfying their own ego is certainly a very interesting inversion of the heroic Gary Stue character becoming so obsessed in the heroic ideal that he does in fact become a villain that justifies himself being a hero on purely biased principles. As a result, the way Starla and Nitrona act here is certainly a great way for facing off against him, as nothing defeats the embodiement of unreasonable ambition and ruthless heroism more than being called out for the own leaps of logic and bad motivations behind one's goals.

It is actually interesting as he was perfectly able to defeat being so powerful that they are able to destroy universes easily, if they so desired. Yet, power alone does not make a good character and the might of a critique is often a death sentence to a badly written character or story. In fact, this being his weakness is perfectly sensible and brilliant as it showcases that not even someone like him is above critique.

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Mustache-Twirler In reply to AudeS [2018-12-11 22:49:30 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much! 
Well, since Superman keeps being written into a bastardisation of what he is supposed to stand for, how about I make that the big conflict with ANJ. And Nitrona and Starla were both great candidates to be the ones who would combine their forces of both benevolent and malevolent to overcome such a broken tier character. And I agree with you about criticism.

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Silvolf [2018-11-25 12:36:17 +0000 UTC]

These types always hate criticism and the truth!!!

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Mustache-Twirler In reply to Silvolf [2018-11-25 13:50:40 +0000 UTC]

You got that right, thanks!

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Cambion-Hunter [2018-11-25 06:23:45 +0000 UTC]

He be like, "LOGIC and CRITICAL FEEDBACK. My two weaknesses!"

It wins out.

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Mustache-Twirler In reply to Cambion-Hunter [2018-11-25 13:50:20 +0000 UTC]

As well as Trolling, which makes three.

Thanks!

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Cambion-Hunter In reply to Mustache-Twirler [2018-11-25 17:52:44 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome, my friend. ^^

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SwordSparks [2018-11-25 04:03:31 +0000 UTC]

Blown out of here, like a cockroach!

See ya, Ass-miral!

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Mustache-Twirler In reply to SwordSparks [2018-11-25 13:49:39 +0000 UTC]

Master Fiendish; “And stay the hell out, Ass-miral! I like that name, a lot easier to say. Thanks!”

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SwordSparks In reply to Mustache-Twirler [2018-11-25 17:29:08 +0000 UTC]

Hey, no problem. 

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DrMatthew178 [2018-11-25 01:46:55 +0000 UTC]

Wow..AMAZING!

this was awesome!

thank you!

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Mustache-Twirler In reply to DrMatthew178 [2018-11-25 13:44:03 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much!
I’m glad you enjoy it, as it took me a while to complete the post and a bit longer for the story, though I’m uncertain as to where to follow up from here since Peccatori’s gone and Nitrona now has his powers.
I thought it would be interesting writing about Nitrona overcoming each of Pec’s three enemies, despite each being worse than the last.

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