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Published: 2009-08-06 14:45:27 +0000 UTC; Views: 9392; Favourites: 200; Downloads: 11
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I should've been working on other things instead of this, but... Eh, I wanted to.Cassie Hack created by
Art by Justin Wayne
***EDIT***
Lots of improvemant done on this piece. Many thanks to for the marvelous critique!
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The character is very well drawn. She looks like a solid mass on paper, which is good for the style you drew her in.
The whole drawing itself lacks atmosphere. She seems separate from her surroundings. The smallest tie-in would help immensely with that. Something like a darker shadow at her feet to emphasize that she is in fact on the ground. Some reflection of her in the bench, or in the glass of a window or framed photo or painting behind her. Just something to make her part of her world. The line in the background are also leaning slightly. You might be able to get away with just rotating the entire drawing clockwise a bit and cropping off the edges.
That looks like it was a bloody fight. Use that, and put blood on the bench, the walls, splatters on the ground around the chainsaw and arm from when they fell and hit the floor, and a drip trail from her movement of the bat. Think about what happened before she ended up where she is right now. It'll be easy to go overboard with it, so be careful and use varying amounts of blood in places and not like, the same splatter used everywhere. I think this would also help tie her in to her background.
As far as coloring, it looks great. I love the highlighting and shading on her pants. It can be so hard to create the illusion of foreshortening and you did it wonderfully. Her leg and hip placement look natural and her torso is bent over nicely. The sharp shading in her pants is done well, and the soft shading of her shirt, skin, and nylon sleeves.
The shading of her boots could use some work. Everything about this girl so far has been vibrant and bold. I get the feeling that her boots are supposed to be duller than her pants and yet shinier than her clothing, but they look incomplete. The style is inconsistent with the rest of your shading. Use the same ideas you had for shading her pants. Every highlight doesn't have to be the same width. Use the folds and creases in her boots as a guide. The raised edges should shine to bring out the details in her boots the way you made the wrinkles in her pants do it.
The textures you used for the wall and floor are okay for those purposes, but they really stand out as what they are. Use textures, but don't rely on on them. Paint under and over them, draw on them, break them up, pile them. Create a new look with them. You started to do that by adding general shadows but they look boring and a bit out of place right now.
I love the girls pose and your drawing style is excellent! The splatter trail going down the side of her face onto her chest is done in such a way that it's sexy and cute, like beauty marks and freckles. Making a hot girl look good in blood? That's the stuff comics are made of!
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Thank you very much for that! A lot of what you said were things that bugged me as well. Methinks I'll put some more work into it over the weekend
A fair critique!
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You're welcome, and thank you for accepting it so well! <3 I love your work.
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Nope. Unfortunately I do not have that yet on my résumé.
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Well, you should. You totally do it justice.
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Cassie Hack... You've drawn her fantastically
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This is amazing. I had to make an account so I could favorite that shit. Nioce.
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This is undeniably bad ass. All I have to say is good yab.
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Yes yes yes! Awesome edit! I love that you closed in the space more by lowering the floor line. I didn't even think of that! It really pushes her forward. And the warm colors you used for the floor and wall make a huge difference, too. I love the bench and baseboard, and the gnarly alteration to the bat. Good use of lines. They keep your eye moving across the page. The blood looks great. And last but not least, the boots are superb! They really go with the rest of her now.
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Indeed where do i sign up to work here or better yet how can i institute these policies at my current job site.
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I like this, the bloodstains on her shirt and chest are a nice touch.
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It's amazing someone hasn't snapped you up for a Graphic Novel!
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Surely that's sarcasm haha.
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tip for working successfully with background elements: draw them in first then place the character in to the scene. it helps keep the proportions and angles right.
otherwise, i have noticed that your characters are becoming more lifelike. is this is a conscious decision or is it just natural style progression?
maybe you will get your wish of workin on that comic after all brother man!
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Indeed. I'm pushing myself to be a little more realistic with the characters. Shying away from the cutesy cartoony stuff. Not that cartoony is bad. I'm just wanting to progress in other areas.
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i actually kinda like your cutesy stuff better but thats just me
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To each his own. I think I'm just stretching different muscles. I've been doing the cutesy stuffs for a while.
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Dude! This is AWESOME!!! The body language is sweet.
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You're definitely welcome.
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I can't possibly 
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Glad I could be of service
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wow! i love the expression on her face!
What, exactly, is her job?
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She is a slasher of slashers
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so she's a killer of killers? isn't that a God complex?
ow my head hurts now...too much internet logic heh
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I really like it, especially the bored expression and "kiss it" on the baseball bat. That's a nice touch.
One thing irritates me, though. The bench seems a bit inclined. It looks slightly like she's slipping to the left to me.
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Let me know if you think it's better now. I've done some extensive editing on it.
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Oh yes, the bench looks much better now. I also like the improvement on the rest of the background (=
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Thanks
I have trouble with background elements, especially when characters are supposed to be interacting with them. I'm trying though
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I wanna have her job!!! What enterprise does she work for???
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You should most definitely pick up the comic she's from called Hack/Slash!
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Uhm...*Looks it up at the wikipedia* Omagod! it really looks like a good comic! *rushes into dreamers.com* Thanks for the info!
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