Comments: 93
moonlight-fox [2011-03-01 03:11:53 +0000 UTC]
Hello! Good Day!
You've been Featured Here: [link]
Keep up the good work!
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knucks838 [2011-02-23 03:00:42 +0000 UTC]
I have a friend with a similar style. It is a rare style, and it gladdens me too see more people use it eloquently=]
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angeljunkie [2011-02-18 06:29:21 +0000 UTC]
This is absolutely brilliant. Congrats on the DD. It's definitely well-deserved.
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OritPetra [2011-02-14 02:14:47 +0000 UTC]
This can only be described as mind-blowing. Bloody brilliant, man, bloody brilliant.
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Dragozai [2011-02-10 15:02:57 +0000 UTC]
that is cool ^^ loved the text 8D
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larathebunny [2011-02-09 08:29:16 +0000 UTC]
The best part about this is the dinosaurs. <3
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CloverWoodss [2011-02-08 06:47:49 +0000 UTC]
I love this
But I .. I just can't read it as a whole because of the coloring(that isn't bad I know it's on purpose) It's because of this thing I have where when things are colored I see it TOTALLY separate from the rest
I can't get past the second line without feeling frustrated and wanting to ONLY read one of the colored ones (which I did at first)
I love how the colored ones are read XD
I wish I could read it as a whole but.. I.. just cant... ><;;
At school I have to color code my notes or when I go back I cannot read it or concentrate on it because I just see a huge blog of words XD
ARGH I can't get over how I cannot read it as a whole OTL frustrating
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Amour-Pour-Tous In reply to CloverWoodss [2011-02-08 08:12:03 +0000 UTC]
["You might wonder about life the opposite of death is life
think that expectancy statistics guidelines will help you a lot
I'm here because my dog's food ran out and I'm hungry
for your death came sooner as expected I will live on
pleasure rather than the opposites will keep us together
but you're alternative which never will be the new ever
dead wrong is the source to failure and death upon us all
I am here now evilness and suffering follows me to heaven
because I want pain in my body plenty seasoned with salt
to be the last body just like the dinosaur is overrated
to say hail ancient dinosaurs feeding on flesh is wise
dinosaurs were overcooked served and eaten by insects"
I hope I made some stranger's night just there.]
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CloverWoodss In reply to Amour-Pour-Tous [2011-02-08 14:17:18 +0000 UTC]
pfft-...
It sounds hilarious.... XD
Thank you!!!! ;; u;;
I can now live without wondering wth it all said together~
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acidpaintart [2011-02-08 06:02:20 +0000 UTC]
this is incredible.
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eazms [2011-02-08 04:31:13 +0000 UTC]
simply cool~
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Demonic-kirby229 [2011-02-08 03:15:10 +0000 UTC]
I must say, that was one of the better reads I've had in a long time, and with a title so grim, it was rather lighthearted to read!
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FadenBlade [2011-02-08 02:45:22 +0000 UTC]
Dinosaurs: Eat Flesh
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Pink-Ego [2011-02-08 02:35:30 +0000 UTC]
I've never seen anything like this. It's amazing. Great job! Must have been so hard to write. It's sort of lyrical - if there was music, I'd listen.
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alexluna [2011-02-08 01:49:49 +0000 UTC]
Hail dinosaurs indeed!
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noriboriman [2011-02-08 01:46:20 +0000 UTC]
the colored sections was great, you can read this text in different ways... although it feels random and going back on itself, it delivers a message that seems to be more emotional and human...
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h20ray [2011-02-08 00:41:26 +0000 UTC]
WOW.. COMBINED WORD..
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taube3 [2011-02-08 00:31:40 +0000 UTC]
i like all four poems
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TheCandleobra [2011-02-08 00:30:46 +0000 UTC]
This is great. I can always tell when something is good
even if I don't like it, by the range of mentalities it brings
out.
The one mentality that most amuses me is the one that
asks, after you have spent hours or even days trying to
make a complex realization articulate, "Are you trying to
say . . . ?" Like all you had to do was "say it" and if you did,
why the heck did you put it that way? I don't think you
know what your talking about" (translates "I don't get it)".
And you know they never will.
Ernie
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blue-eyed-assasin [2011-02-08 00:08:11 +0000 UTC]
This is brilliant. I love the multiple paragraphs concept.
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DeadloveCalling [2011-02-08 00:06:30 +0000 UTC]
fantastic and mind-boggling piece!
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Miss-Optimistic [2011-02-07 23:17:26 +0000 UTC]
you did a very amazing job on this!
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fashionett [2011-02-07 22:18:54 +0000 UTC]
It's about zombies!
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PerpetualTwilight21 [2011-02-07 22:03:20 +0000 UTC]
To be honest, it doesn't make much sense no matter how I read it. It rambles quite a bit incoherently and jumps without warning to ideas that are only loosely related, which is jarring and confusing. The pink vertical column makes sense, but nothing else does.
You get points for creativity, I'll give you that, but I'm still mystified as to what your overall message is here, if you even have one. Is this tribute to the dinosaurs? Or are you trying to say that death is natural, could come at any time, and is needed to maintain the balance of the natural world and provide food for life? Maybe the point is that there isn't a point, I don't know.
By the way, there is actually quite a bit of compelling evidence out there that the dinosaurs weren't killed by a comet/meteor impact, but that doesn't detract from your work here at all. I only mention it because I did extensive research on the subject and it always bugs me when people are so quick to blame meteors/comets.
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PerpetualTwilight21 In reply to Myrloenn [2011-02-08 22:12:05 +0000 UTC]
Ah, I see. In that case this isn't a style of writing or poetry that I like ( I hate it when things don't make sense ), but each to their own. I'm a writer myself, and no one has ever called my writing or poetry boring, even though I "confine" myself to stuff that makes sense. You can be beautiful, elegant, and poetic without sacrificing coherency. There is such a thing as being too creative. But these are my personal feelings on the matter, and I realize not everyone shares them.
The reader defines the message? I've decided that there is no message — it's just a bunch of incoherent rambling sprinkled with the themes of death, eating, and your dog. Mind you it's nicely arranged and pretty.
Thanks for giving my something interesting to look at. ^^
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PerpetualTwilight21 In reply to Myrloenn [2011-02-09 23:09:50 +0000 UTC]
It was constructive. I did tell you what I didn't like about it, didn't I? I wasn't as though I piped up with something like "This is stupid" and had that be my entire comment no further details necessary.
I didn't expect you to change it, nor was I asking you to. I was merely stating my opinion and sharing my thoughts as to how I felt it could have been improved ( by being a little more coherent ). This fits every definition of "constructive criticism" that I know of. Whether or not you chose to listen to me was entirely up to you, and I understood that before I typed that first word. I don't really care whether you decide to take my advice — I can think of a lot more important and constructive things to do with my time than waste it trying to argue someone into seeing things my way when they clearly never will. I personally view pieces like this more as literary abstracts and not true poetry, but again, this is only my view on the matter and I am not trying to change anyone's mind.
To echo you, it's that simple, so let's leave it with that.
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