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ArceusAdmirer [2017-06-13 04:26:25 +0000 UTC]
Cool story, the ending was illogical though. How did they automatically know to call the police? And if they knew the kid was going to be TFed, why not call a SWAT team instead?
Also, suuuure, the parents are toooootally not gonna try and support their son or anything. Like, I dunno, get worried?
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Neon-Ian In reply to ArceusAdmirer [2017-06-13 04:28:36 +0000 UTC]
Like I said, I didn't think straight. All I cared about was the TF back then. I didn't really care about the "what," the "who," the "where," the "when," or the "why." Also congratulations. You're the first critical reader to feast your eyes on my illogical junior English material stories that don't make sense
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ArceusAdmirer In reply to Neon-Ian [2017-06-13 16:31:53 +0000 UTC]
Understood. Should I continue to remain critical of your stories? I can't tell if you're sincere or not.
Also... what do you feel is your best story yet?
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Neon-Ian In reply to ArceusAdmirer [2017-06-14 23:40:37 +0000 UTC]
It'll help with me making better structured stories. So yeah, get super critical. Go crazy. Even though I do speak with sarcastic like tones, I'm serious on this.
Also, I'm not sure which is my favorite. I haven't looked at these crappy stories in a year probably. I guess for now it's the most recent one I've done with Chesnaught. Thought I'd get creative and kinda make it historically fictional.
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Neon-Ian In reply to ArceusAdmirer [2017-06-15 05:17:00 +0000 UTC]
Oh boy... I'll be in for it now.
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herpaderpa12345 [2016-08-10 16:17:11 +0000 UTC]
Woah wait you play black ops 3? Do you like zombies mode?
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herpaderpa12345 [2016-08-10 16:11:09 +0000 UTC]
Another favorite for you neon
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ssupersonic12 [2016-08-02 04:37:54 +0000 UTC]
Good story!
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Neon-Ian In reply to ssupersonic12 [2016-08-02 04:38:59 +0000 UTC]
Damn. Read it already? Well, I'm glad to hear that
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Neon-Ian In reply to ssupersonic12 [2016-08-02 05:27:21 +0000 UTC]
Huh. Also, thanks for adding my stuff to your stuff
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ssupersonic12 In reply to Neon-Ian [2016-08-02 06:01:38 +0000 UTC]
No problem. Keep up the good work.
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