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Windera [2004-10-03 16:03:08 +0000 UTC]

Okay... honest feed back... you asked for it...

On the thumbnail preview, this looked like a really good work (which was why I clicked in)
The color seems to be rich and together with the design, mesmerizing.

A closer look revealed a messy impression rather than the expected rich formulation.

Abstract with geometric figures are hard to reach a balance between messy and boring, but I guess the gist is 'depth'. With the sense of depth, you can easily grab attention and give a focus point (if you want).

Believe me. Your should add more depth contrast to the sun-disc complex object, and make the waterwave-light effect synchronized to the depth of your design. That would give a sense of wholeness.

-- from someone who had a good sense in art but grew up in a family who despised all artists (because most of them are poor and eccentric in their eyes), and do EVERYTHING to prevent the child from going into the direction of art.

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nefri [2004-09-14 14:28:00 +0000 UTC]

The combo of colours is what made me want to come look its like that really with all your stuff the way you use colour is always appealing to me

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Indiaskye [2004-09-13 17:39:00 +0000 UTC]

My one major flaw I find with the image is that it's centered. No image should be centered as the brain sees it as off kilter. Take from the Nautilus as it's what every painting/drawing represents as honest balance.

Also the colors are all soft. There needs to be depth and contrast somewhere even in a soft and delicate image.

I hope this helps. It has much potential so keep working at it.





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sundel [2004-09-12 11:57:34 +0000 UTC]

*ahemz* Love this, especially the colors. I love this pink/orange/yellow/red/purple combination...

About how it can be improved... Something with the sun symbol is throwing the balance off. I dunno, I think it is because it's bevelled and the rest looks rather 2d-ish. I'd try what the sun looks like in 2d, as well as in 3d with stroked outlines. If you keep the bevel I'd try making it sharper, and not as high.

*thinks*

Also I think, right now the eye gets drawn a bit too much to the sun. I think adding more elements would be worth a try. What I'm thinking about is adding two circles below the sun, one bigger and one smaller (or maybe two crescents turned 90 degrees so that they 'lie', or a longish rectangle) to create some sort of an axis in the middle. I hope it's clear what I mean, I'm not very good at making suggestions like that in English.

I agree with those who already mentioned it, the texturing over the floor is way too busy. I love that checkered floor btw. Hm, another texture maybe, something cloudy like in the upper part of the image, or maybe a stone texture... I'm not sure... Something that has a bit more regular feel to it.

Hope this was of help?

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kchilt [2004-09-10 01:04:04 +0000 UTC]

I think you think too low of this. I can't see how anyone would say they dont like this or it sucks, thats a little blantant I myself enjoy it very much because of the design and texture. It looks very different from normal pieces and has a good solid design behind it even with all the chaotic colors and shapes. I'm not saying thats a bad thing, I really like that about this, especially the checkered floor. In my opinion this is great and its a nice step out of the ordinary.

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phorrest [2004-09-09 15:15:31 +0000 UTC]

i really like this.. the colors are great.. and the figure kind of reminds me of a sun, which is one of my favorite symbols, i even have a tattoo of one & this sort of reminds me of it

all in all, nice work, i like it

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piros [2004-09-09 01:26:44 +0000 UTC]

This is really cool, I love the colors and the sun medallion. I might help if you move the focal point (the sun) to the center of the picture. But great job!

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yudanete [2004-09-09 00:57:32 +0000 UTC]

I love the smoky-ness of it. ^_^

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tsheva [2004-09-09 00:44:49 +0000 UTC]

The sun needs to be more bold, more sharper as well as the floor. The floor I gather is black and white? I would not hide that nor the side rails (?). I would make the psychadelic colors, which are beautiful fade into the background somehow for this is a surreal piece. Overall the mix of colors will burst all over. This is a very symbolic piece as well with the sun, the pathway, the floor especially. I can't wait to see what you do with this.

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kingkool6 [2004-09-08 23:18:46 +0000 UTC]

I really like the colors and the sun as the main focus. It is blended very well, my only complaint is that it looks a bit soft. I would like to see the sun be sharpened and kind of stick out against the background. Keep at it. It's coming out good.

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Raevnn [2004-09-08 21:14:00 +0000 UTC]

The colors rule.

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lady-iguana [2004-09-08 20:15:44 +0000 UTC]

I like the colors and symols you used in this work they fit perfectly together. I only dislike the 3d elements in it. It gives me a '90 's feeling. Like those posters you saw with smily faces on it.

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Flooz [2004-09-08 20:10:21 +0000 UTC]

I honestly can't see anything that needs improvement. This is just a wonderful piece that you've done. The colors and every bit of detail is really beautiful. Honestly you've done a great job.

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Pokki-chan [2004-09-08 20:04:58 +0000 UTC]

yeah i like the diff paterns and the colours

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excitement-catcher [2004-09-08 17:15:14 +0000 UTC]

very interesting for symbolic layer, I mean solar and swastika motives

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puremyth [2004-09-08 16:29:56 +0000 UTC]

This is beautiful, I like this new direction.

In the constructive criticism department: The pale edge highlights on the sun need to be a littel more bold. If they're sharp and bright, it looks like glass, if they are toned down and soft, it looks like plastic, and that's what's happening here. Another simple trick for making things glassy: use (screen) white highlights from top left AND bottom right (in PhotoShop, replace the black/multiply with white/screen), it gives a strong sense of refractive transparency.

Also, I agree with one of the earlier comments that the floor is too busy, I think the floor texture should be more dominant.

But this is nit-picking, because this is really cool already.

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avenescent [2004-09-08 16:21:45 +0000 UTC]

i think it's fantastic and would make a great cover for a magazine. [link] it has a dynamic energy and could support a multitude of ideas and interpretations. great job, thank you for sharing.
A.

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Yeung [2004-09-08 15:55:38 +0000 UTC]

This piece makes me feel very calm on the inside, the softness of the colours are very soothing and the images are very geometric, giving good perspective to the image. The one-point perspective pointing to the sun is a very quiet, yet powerful image.

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uncolored [2004-09-08 15:46:05 +0000 UTC]

the sun reminds me a bit the cd cover of an Italian band, I like very much the color range but maybe there too many things blended on the floor like that violet kinda smoke that bothers my attention. nice concept anyway

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torxx21 [2004-09-08 15:40:22 +0000 UTC]

I really like this, but did you intend the sun to be slightly 'soft'? Once I noticed that it ws slightly fuzzy, I couldn't tear myself away from it(as a problem). I think its becuase you have reduced the opacity slightly, which has given the appearance of reduced sharpness in the centre of the sun(around the yellow rim and white highlights).

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amethyste [2004-09-08 15:01:05 +0000 UTC]

You did a more "modern" thing,
and you know I love it,
I do think that it's a pity that there's no shadow in it,
The circle with the figure in can easily be used for a cd-cover design,
it looks neat, expecially the use of the colours...

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ladyo [2004-09-08 14:57:10 +0000 UTC]

Well...the colors really caught my eye in the thumbnail. The smoky effect is really nice. There is one thing though that just doesn't seem right. It feels like the sun is too far to the front of the piece......to me it seems that it should be at the end of the hall/stairs? I think it might make it feel better overall....maybe you could do that by maybe making is smaller or making it darker to give the illusion of shadow. But now that I look at it further you may have wanted it to be in the front.

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themorrigan [2004-09-08 14:54:16 +0000 UTC]

i like it, but the only problem i have with it is the bottom, where there are tiles on the floor (i think?) i don't know, it just bothers me because it takes away from the circle...does that help? (lol, i tried)

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kaprkorn [2004-09-08 14:51:54 +0000 UTC]

this is really pretty...thats about all i can say. sorry

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