EsTur [2004-11-02 06:58:03 +0000 UTC]

that is beautiful....You've captured a moment so well....hmmmm, makes me reflective and inspired. I've gotta try a short poignant poem, awsome idea!
God Bless

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lynchy [2004-10-07 11:25:33 +0000 UTC]

Pebbles skimming gentle waves
With awesome subtly.

Cooooool... yeah, this feels like it could be the start of something. I think you should keep it and come back to it at some point.

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Trancenmetal [2004-10-04 04:13:58 +0000 UTC]

It alsmot feels like the subject of the poem is actually dead, and your in a way hallucinating, or dreaming to keep the person alive. It's great to see poets capture such beauty in a short piece.

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cokeandcandy [2004-08-22 13:49:03 +0000 UTC]

It's very vivid... though I dont know if the last line fits in with the poem... because the line before that was really detailed. ARgh this is getting abstract but I hope you know what i'm getting at.

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DarkNalcon [2004-08-19 22:23:48 +0000 UTC]

to me it speaks of a memory right before a bad one

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NotEntirelyMe [2004-08-19 19:22:03 +0000 UTC]

thank you for the appreciation.
i think the an was supposed to be an and. can't decide whether to leave or change.
thanks.

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berniewall [2004-08-19 19:18:56 +0000 UTC]

I love this. It is very short, but I don't think it should be any longer. This is just so beautiful. It makes me want to draw a picture, but i'm not a good drawer so we don't want that to happen. Your choice of words could not be more graceful. "But my soul an memory near believe" The fact that you used the word 'near' I think madethe poem seem so much better. If it were my poem I probably would have put 'almost' without even thinking. It sounds so much better with near, though. I'm glad it is not my poem cause I would have ruined it.(LOL)
Anyways words can not express how much I like this poem. I think it must have hit something in my mind that I wasn't sure was there.

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