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perplitude — An Urban Dawn
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Published: 2007-05-14 23:20:11 +0000 UTC; Views: 299; Favourites: 2; Downloads: 7
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Here is a page of comics I did at the school of comics. It is ever more difficult to consider something really "finished". But oh well, I draw, I err, I learn.It is an inking exercise, to practice the use of the black and the white.
The dialog goes
"- Tonight we`re not going to pay for you as well!
- And tomorrow I`ll call... not for the money. I just really wanna hear...
- What excuse you come up with...
- This time!
- Aaaah I finally...
- get it! It`s an excuse that you want?
- BBUURP!
- Oh, just let go of him and come in where it`s warm.
- Anyway...
- Just what I needed the first thing in the morning, this idiot."
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Comments: 21
Nice, but somehow scary 
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Scary? I would`ve thought... maybe angsty... scary never thought... Interesting...
Thank you...
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Very dark indeed, the fish eye in the last frame is excellent!
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wow i love the lighting on the guys face and the way the car goes into the last box 
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wow great inking! love teh tones 
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Thank you!
I`m so glad you liked it. I worked hard on it, with teachers (I`m a student at a comics course) giving me many harsh critiques (that`s why I got used to being so critical myself lately).
Many people have told me about texts and balloons, you must be right probably. Thanks for pointing it out. I`ll work on it then.
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thank god you're not harsh 
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And we all need to improve
And anyway it`s more fun to keep exploring always!
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It's not bad, but I think your bubbles need some working. It would make the comic look way better, I think.
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Thanks. I`ve already been told that. Probably something to it then. I`ll be working on the issue.
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i'm not a big fan of comics and not really aware of the italian language, nevertheless i must say that your one is quite appealing to the eye, the last frame even reminds me of sin city a bit.
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adornoir, thanks!
Sin City really is great, btw
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This is really very good! Your placement of each element is very natural and you seem to have a really good grasp on drawing different perspectives. Overall, this has a lot of potential and would look completely professional with some minor fine tuning. You may want to consider using a ruler for the lines of things like buildings or the crosswalk lines in the first frame to give your comics that 'finished' look. Otherwise, great work
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WOw, thank you for the compliments as much as for the useful and thoughtful comment. Very interesting. I`ll certainly consider your suggestions.
The taste to draw strange perspectives is a blessing and a problem, I make my life very difficult sometimes but the results are worth it. That`s what`s so nice about comics. You get to draw things that you otherwise might not think of, because the story suggests it. And from very different and interesting points of view.
Thank you!
As far as the "finished" look goes, I think it`s a matter of practice and also of calm and patience I hope to acquire with practice. Because at the moment I`m having a phase where I`m so afraid of making a mistake while drawing that I get rather nervous - and that doesn`t help.
However yes, a ruler could help for some aspects, thank you.
Glad you like my work
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Oh looks very great! Reminds me of sin city. You have the same kind of style. I like it!
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Wow, SinCity, I love it... of course!
Great compliment!
Yeah, the contrasts, the black and white, the darkish atmosphere, the ink.
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