Comments: 95
carbhael [2009-05-08 05:45:08 +0000 UTC]
Skillfully revealed.
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Linnae [2009-05-08 05:32:27 +0000 UTC]
That is so sweet; very well written!
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msklystron [2009-05-08 05:10:33 +0000 UTC]
The way the main character gives himself over to the young girl's ghost is original and quite touching. The story is told expertly and simply and calmly. I know the feelings and thoughts in this story will linger in my mind for some time.
Congrats on a well-earned DD.
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MekaMouse [2009-05-08 04:46:19 +0000 UTC]
that's a sad and hauntingly beautiful story. does he "feel" different ghosts or just that one? it seems only one "Sophia" to me but I can't be sure.
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Marnaynna [2009-05-08 03:27:00 +0000 UTC]
what a fantastically written short story.
"not your typical ghost story."
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Marnaynna In reply to RalfMaximus [2009-05-09 02:38:15 +0000 UTC]
You're perfectly welcome. Your story -- and, within it, prose -- is great, as I said before.
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Silverspark14 [2009-05-08 02:14:45 +0000 UTC]
Creative, well-written, fascinating, and original.
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Spirrus [2009-05-08 00:41:46 +0000 UTC]
The awesomeness made my testicles explode. I applaude your brilliance.
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RalfMaximus In reply to Spirrus [2009-05-09 01:27:57 +0000 UTC]
Eep. That's an unusual reaction. I hope you have spares...?
(Thanks!)
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northangel27 [2009-05-08 00:30:40 +0000 UTC]
Absolutely fantastic. Congratulations on the DD. It is very well deserved. There is a raw edge and an honesty to your writing which I adore.
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RalfMaximus In reply to LunaticStar [2009-05-09 01:42:11 +0000 UTC]
Awesome. So glad you liked it.
And thanks for noticing what I try to do. I love implications, hints, glimpses. And you totally get it too! Yay. ♥
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coffinberry [2009-05-07 23:11:54 +0000 UTC]
Is Sophiya his daughter, maybe?
I enjoyed reading this.
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RalfMaximus In reply to coffinberry [2009-05-09 03:05:41 +0000 UTC]
Thank you!
I don't think she's his daughter. I intended Sophia to be an older spirit, tied to the land, perhaps the house. Lots of clues about Sophia's era scattered around, but never explicitly stated... I mean she COULD be his daughter; that would work too. Just not what I envisioned while writing.
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thisolddeviantart [2009-05-07 23:09:58 +0000 UTC]
...amazing.
I wished it went on longer, that was... captivating.
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Kenyahp666 [2009-05-07 22:25:29 +0000 UTC]
Brilliant! Its absolutely stunning, really. It makes me want to know so much more about Sophia and Sanchez.
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RalfMaximus In reply to Sadistic-but-Sweet [2009-05-09 04:41:27 +0000 UTC]
Amaze and inspire. Such words make me stall for response. Just... thank you.
♥
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KNOTTBOLD [2009-05-07 21:06:17 +0000 UTC]
i can only reiterate what the previous commentors have stated - this is good. very good indeed. give yourself a pat on the back xx
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RalfMaximus In reply to nycterent [2009-05-09 04:42:08 +0000 UTC]
Back atcha, mystery Antarctican.
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tetemeko [2009-05-07 19:54:20 +0000 UTC]
:] Never read this one!
Congratulations. <3
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distortified [2009-05-07 18:43:37 +0000 UTC]
Excellent work, sir. I was about to try and write a deep meaningful critique, but I really can't find the energy, nor anything to nitpick at enough to warrant it.
What a great little yarn--short and simple, but deep and somehow personal.
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kallia-goldenwings [2009-05-07 17:54:21 +0000 UTC]
oh my god chills that was just so good.
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dark-amethyst In reply to RalfMaximus [2009-05-12 16:40:57 +0000 UTC]
You are most certainly welcome! I intend to look through your stuff sometime in the probably-distant future when I have time! XP
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