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StevenSerisawa [2018-09-22 01:20:16 +0000 UTC]
This was quite a fun read, good job.
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Phoenix-Fightmaster [2012-08-25 18:38:33 +0000 UTC]
Before I read the comments confirming it as Marez, I couldn't help but interpret the Red Thing as a swarm of gestalt ants. If he hadn't been based on the 'dogs of war' phrase, I have a hard time imagining Marez becoming anything other than a swarm of ants.
I wasn't sure what to expect from Oakenrack. Something Mononoke-ish, I suppose. That turned out to not be really accurate or inaccurate.
I like the whole merging of two entities concept. It reminds me of some of the things I used to write... and might again.
I especially loved seeing the story of the trial told from another perspective. Duskizien still saves the day, but there's so many dimensions to the sequence.
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Phoenix-Fightmaster In reply to RenDragonClaw [2012-08-26 01:49:23 +0000 UTC]
If anyone asks, I'm my id having gained sentience and set out on its own.
But yeah. I was never really sure what to expect from Oakenrack, but the product doesn't disappoint.
I think the era of trial is a time in the story that would gain the most from being rendered in a comic format. Maybe with some colorful narration in lieu of actual dialogue. Something visual and stylish, to really capture the primal spirit of things.
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RenDragonClaw In reply to Phoenix-Fightmaster [2012-08-26 01:53:54 +0000 UTC]
That's a pretty neat idea. I could probably manage to do something like that once I've nailed down all the particulars. As it is I've been thinking of continuing with the bio images being roughly based on ancient cultural depictions in different styles. Like the next one looking like a greek vase or fresco.
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Kothoga12 [2012-08-17 06:43:48 +0000 UTC]
I never realized how much of a douche Marez was. Great story!
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RenDragonClaw In reply to Kothoga12 [2012-08-17 07:31:26 +0000 UTC]
Well, he's war and naturally war has very violent beginnings. Too much peace is terrible in and of itself really if dragged on too long. It leads to evolutionary and personal stagnation. By working together in defending one spot, the stag and golem created a sort of paradise that kept everything in it from advancing. It went against the grain of what the Great Trials were all about and Marez or what he started out as, basically a very violent break from decadence that in the end, made both the stag and golem stronger than ever by fusing into one. So like he does in modern times, Marez is the primal test and he himself is always being tested in turn. This get's even further built on with Raifu's story which will come about eventually.
What will come next is Hydrune and how the levithan whale survived his test: Dryton.
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Kothoga12 In reply to RenDragonClaw [2012-08-17 18:42:24 +0000 UTC]
Well then I guess he was being a douche in the best way possible. I guess I'm not used to seeing paradise's since my story is constant war all the time. And can't wait to read about hydrune and dryton, they have to be some of my favorite characters.
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The-Great-MM [2012-08-05 21:51:52 +0000 UTC]
VEEEERY cool and nice. Kinda' hope we get to see an actual picture of him soon though.
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RenDragonClaw In reply to The-Great-MM [2012-08-05 22:23:05 +0000 UTC]
Very soon. It's drawn, just needs to be colored and the stats worked out.
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RenDragonClaw In reply to Vagrant-Verse [2012-08-05 16:12:48 +0000 UTC]
I've had similar thoughts after doing this. Like with Raifu I've considered doing an chinese style brush painting. It would be neat case of engineered 'art evolution' as Raifu's story concludes Marez's origins for the most part. I felt this was necessary as to explain 1. The ancient and heraldric rivalry between wolf and stag and 2. where Marez actually comes from. Because Marez has been rather ambigous pre Rome unlike the other three which had general major event that cemented their status. For Dryton it was the first major extinction event followed by his battle with the Meteor Entity. For Shimaku it was the culling of the Titans. For Beelzebub it was the facilitation of the Great Trails. While Marez didn't really come into his own until mankind started making something of itself, he ultimately came into being as the 'red thing' and went from there.
Oakenrack does have a lot of SOTC and Princess Mononoke as inspirations. His stats pic does have that effect so I'm glad his story does as well.
As for Beelz, well, he is Conquest afterall. He may be a complete troll half the time but with the diverse range of abilities and weaknesses I give my kaiju, most of them are very lethal when using their potential to their fullest. So Beelz is fully capable of standing alongside his fellow Apocalypse Bringers in terms of destructive capabilities. Each one goes about it a bit differently but that's what makes it enjoyable.
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JacobSpencerKaiju79 [2012-08-03 22:07:35 +0000 UTC]
Pretty cool backstory, like the drawing, good job as always, Ren.
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SirKaijuOfVaudeville [2012-08-03 20:32:21 +0000 UTC]
A nice piece of work all around. The Cave Painting is an immensely nice touch and tells the story simply in three parts of Alliance, Defeat and Cooperation. Which is all very neat.
As for the red beast, the mention of war, warriors, battles and such gives me the distinct impression of Marez, being he is the youngest of the Apocalypse Bringers and the fact that I don't think he existed before this point. The need for water may well be his blood manipulation coming into play.
A very impressive back-story piece the story, fleshes out KCELL really well and further cements the Guardians into the story.
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RenDragonClaw In reply to SirKaijuOfVaudeville [2012-08-04 00:03:41 +0000 UTC]
You'd be on the money there. Marez has always been the most evolutionary of the group so the red thing is basically a 'proto-Marez'. The end of it's story will come in Raifu's bio. You'll notice that the red thing initially hides in water but doesn't take to it after obtaining blood from a kaiju class being. Largely because water dilutes blood and the red thing only had a semi solid form at the time.
Oakenrack's tale certainly reveals a bit more, verbose as it is. I could have spaced out the scenes in the cave painting out a bit more but they still connect well.
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AkityMH [2012-08-03 19:31:39 +0000 UTC]
Geez what a read. Glad I read it though.
Oakenrack's younger life before the fusion marks a spark of nostalgia for me. IT reminds me of Shadow of The Colossus... A valley in which things dwell that none know... and forbidden to most. Ruled by a creature tall as the sky and earth as angry as a devil if crossed. And when the fusion happens, a spark of hope... mm... I can relate greatly.
But I wonder who this red thing was? Its need for water... hmm... can't be Marez. We would know that beast... could it be the original dragon? A lowly wyrm, who is as terrible as tales say? So many monsters once existed, hard to be sure.
The picture threw me for a loop. Its simple... yet has a lot to say like a book. Hm... Sort of a preview of what is to come. I can wait. This did well to tie me and I am sure others over for a while.
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ProfessorCene [2012-08-03 15:25:36 +0000 UTC]
The cave painting is a nice touch to this ancient story.
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RenDragonClaw In reply to GIGAN05 [2012-08-03 13:11:38 +0000 UTC]
Thank you, first time deliberately trying to dumb down my detail lol.
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GIGAN05 In reply to RenDragonClaw [2012-08-03 13:14:06 +0000 UTC]
Well its still good reguardless ^^. No problem.
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