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Description Darkness. It's everywhere. It's in the sky, so deeply gray it's almost black enough to erase the world from view. It fills everything beyond the cliff at my side so I can't see beyond the narrow plane I walk. It's in the earth and craggy walls, consuming them, staining them, wasting them away. Draining their color until all that's left are faded hints of the soil and stone's former hues beneath a sickly, gray pall. These walls used to be a deep, bluish slate, this earth a rich brown. Now their depth and richness have faded, leaving them empty as shells.

It's in the lonely, dead tree that sits precariously at the cliff side. The tormented remnants of the soul in its bark stop me until all I can do is stare. No leaves tip the bereft twigs, no sap lies in the broken limbs. No reprieve is offered for the twigs and branches that stand erect as if thrust to the sky in their thirst for sunlight. Perhaps it's the instinct of the Treecko I've become, the bond a Grass-type shares with plants, but I can almost hear the story that clings stubbornly within the empty hollows of the bark, a last futile stand in defiance of the darkness that tortured it and robbed it of its life. The story of a tree that died choked and strangled by the loss of the sun that fed it energy and life, dead the day the sun fled this world.

There is no sun, not in this world, this perverted future of a world that used to be so beautiful, so lively and cheerful. No sun, no moon, neither stars nor clouds in the sky. No day - no rising, no setting. Not even night, when night would be preferably to this time-frozen stasis. No wind, no rain - but silence. Silence not of a peaceful night when the world is sleeping, but of a planet that is lost, lonely, dead. No warmth, no chill - but cold. Cold not of winter, nor of an autumn chill or even a spring shower, but the bitter, hollow cold of a void, of emptiness, nothingness. Of absence. Even time is gone, dead with the sun and moon and stars that kept mark and record with it. Or perhaps it's the sun and moon and stars that died when time came to a collapse.

Darkness. Cold. Emptiness. Hollowness. Leeching this world, leeching this sky. Leeching the broken soil, the crumbling stone walls and mountains. Leeching sun-deprived trees that died ages ago.

Leeching me.

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How long will it be until I become like this tree - withered, hollow, cold? Nothing? Perhaps that's what I already am. Perhaps I'm already on the way there. I can feel the darkness pressing against me, squeezing through the pores of my skin, seeping its way into my veins, through every inch of my body. It's taking me, slowly and surely. I already know the effects. I can't remember the last time I smiled, the last time I laughed, the last time I wasn't tempted to accidentally slip on a rock and fall over the cliff so the fall could take me before the darkness or the Sableye could. Before Dusknoir could.

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Dusknoir. With one name, sorrow gives way to rage. That murderous, back-stabbing...

A roar sounds. I flinch and turn around on the spot. Echoes trickle through the air, and as they fade, the returning silence is unnerving. I scan the area with heightened senses, waiting for an alarm from the sixth-sense instincts I've come to associate with being a Pokémon. But the area is as empty as before. Whatever it was, it was off in the distance. Probably a wild Pokémon from one of the dungeons, asserting its territory. Arceus knows how many territorial monsters we've run into since we escaped the stockade.

A moaning whisper sighs at my side, the words too quiet for me to catch. I turn to my partner, my best friend, to see his arms huddled against his chest, posture limp with helplessness, face drawn with lines of sorrow and sleeplessness. His red eyes, once sparkling like rubies with cheer and laughter, are dull, almost unseeing. Withered leaves ready to fall from a tree. Moisture coats his eyes, but even the unshed tears don't shine. Shadows cover his face, filling every hollow, every depressed line. Already the darkness has all but consumed him, and I know I can't look much better off.

I wish I could chase his sorrow away from him, let him dump his tears on my shoulder, hold him close and rub his back and comfort him until my Roran, the best friend I've known and loved like a little brother in the months I've known him, comes back to me, full of the sparkle I've come to know him by. But I can't; I'm in no position to. Shadows can't chase away shadows. Darkness can't light up the dark. Like him, I'm too far gone, and we both know it.

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I'm supposed to be the leader, the one he can look up to as a role model and a guiding light. The one who always has a plan. The one who will never admit defeat, who will never allow him to be defeated, to accept any less than what he is capable of, to accept less than what I'm capable of. But I'm already being defeated. Slowly, but surely. The fight is still there, but it's drowning, sinking deeper and deeper into murky waters until I can barely see it. The darkness is eating me from inside. I feel it - a chill in my veins, dull throbs and tremors through my skin every once in a while, and a hollowness I've never felt before. Even when I force back memories of our near-death at Dusknoir and the Sableye's hand, or images of what will happen if we're caught again, my mind is left with nothing but emptiness and dread. I'm so tired, so done, so lost. So worthless. I look at Roran and know he is too.

Even worse than me, I realize, as that first tear finally falls from his eyes.

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No. He can't be. I can't let him be done like this. The fight in me struggles against the murk. Maybe I've given up fighting for myself, but I won't let Roran give in. Maybe holding onto him will bring me back, and my return will encourage his rescue, as well.

Alone, we're not enough to save ourselves. But together, we can do it. We need our friendship now more than ever.

I struggle against the weight of my tired arm to place a tentative hand on his shoulder. All I can manage is a whisper. "We should... keep moving."

...

Insert heavy internal sigh. Just when I need to be strong for him, my words are so empty. He must have noticed it, too. He nods slowly, but his eyes are even duller than before, if it's even possible. He knows, and in spite of how hard I'm still trying to fight it, I know it, too. We can run all we want, but time - such a meaningless word to use in the first place when it doesn't even exist anymore - is running out for us. Even if Dusknoir and the Sableye don't catch us first, this world soon will.

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Arceus! How did our world end up like this? What in Dialga's name did we do to deserve a future like this? We fought to save the world from paralysis. We got the Time Gears back. I know Uxie, Mesprit, and Azelf were going to put them back where they belong. There's no way they wouldn't have, not after how hard they fought to keep them safe. So what are we missing? What went wrong? Somehow, something or someone must have escaped the equation.

No. I know what's wrong. Dusknoir lied to us, that's what. Not only did he betray us, he played us from the start. I saw it when he ordered the Sableye to kill us. His eye, his face, his entire demeanor, inside and out - every inch of him was covered in darkness. But it wasn't the kind I feel consuming me, a moody self-pity that swings between bouts of depression and frustration. It wasn't the kind I see slowly destroying my best friend, sheer despair and helplessness. Dusknoir's darkness was crushing, threatening, dripping with evil. And he's fully embraced it, to the point where I can't believe I didn't see it in the past until it was too late. Even though I always was suspicious of him, somehow he fooled me. Somehow, I let him fool me. Let him fool all of us.

But then, why did he help us get the Time Gears back, if that was the case? We know taking them caused time to stop in the places from which they were stolen. So why did he stop Grovyle from getting the last one? And why did Grovyle steal them to begin with? I always knew he wasn't as bad as Dusknoir made him out to be. At first, I thought maybe somehow I felt sorry for him because I was a Treecko and he was my evolved form. That's what everyone else thought, at least. But even then I could sense the difference, though I wasn't aware of it at the time. He had a darkness within him, but it was fading. And it was never like Dusknoir's. Never even close.

It was the darkness in me, the darkness in Roran. And only now can I fully recognize it.

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But I still can't understand it. I know he wasn't evil, that he didn't steal the Time Gears to throw time into flux. So why did he do it? He seemed to believe he had good intentions - though I suppose all criminals do - and he apologized more than once for his crimes, in spite of his coldness and his questionable actions. But the theft of the Gears started the collapse of time in our world, right? And I'll never forget how badly he injured us when we fought him at Azelf's Lake. He did all of us in with one move - not just Roran and me, but Crystal and Bells, and even Azelf. He would have killed Roran, too, had Dusknoir not shown up at the last moment.

And that only makes everything even more confusing. Why did he do it? Why did Grovyle steal the Time Gears, if he was as sorry about it as he claimed to be? Why did he apologize to us more than once, but show no qualms about harming and even killing us when we stood in his way? Why did Dusknoir save us, only to drag us into the future with him to kill us here? What am I missing?

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Everything. That's what I'm missing. Everything before the evening Roran found me passed out on the beach. Thirteen whole years of my life. My identity beyond a name and the fact that I was once human. My former place in life. My purpose, if I had one.

For all I know, the missing link, the reason time collapsed despite everyone's best efforts to stop it, mine included...

...

For all I know... it could have been me...

...

"Leah?" Roran whispers.

His voice draws me back. His face is no less shadowed; in fact, the darkness of his despair seems to have grown even thicker in these few minutes... or whatever they're called in a world where time doesn't exist. But his eyes are wide with concern and even a hint of fear, and I know these emotions are directed toward me.

I'd beat my head against the stone slope beside us if he wasn't watching right now. Not only does he have to worry about if we'll ever make it home again, if we'll see our friends and teammates again... if we'll ever lose Dusknoir and the Sableye... if we'll ever resolve all the other burdens he's - we've both been carrying on our shoulders... Now, on top of everything else, he has to worry about me... because as much as I've been told I'm easy to read, he must have seen the emotions of my internal conflict on my face.

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I was trying to help him, and instead I've only made it worse. The darkness really is closing in on us. Both of us. And it scares me, even worse than the thought of being recaptured. It's almost as if this whole world itself - this cold, dead, empty world - is slowly trying to kill us with its poison. In all our despair and self-pity, we've almost forgotten the two things we always clung to in spite of the odds that were constantly stacked against us. The two things that got us through all the fights in the past with outlaws and even legendaries as dangerous as Groudon (even if it was an illusion) and as crafty as Mesprit.

Hope... and each other.

I look him in the eyes, and as phony and useless as it seems, I force the corners of my mouth up in a worthless attempt at a smile, begging him to see it, to remember that those two beautiful things I dug up from their prison in the dark are still there. To prove to me that it's still there...

...

And then he returns it. The smile. It's just as small, just as fake, just as helpless and worthless. But it makes all the difference in the world. Before I know it, my phony lip-twitching has grown into something bigger, something genuine, and a warmth I've forgotten I'd lost rushes through me.

And at last, at long last, his own smile reaches his eyes, and some spark returns to the ruby irises. He's back at last. My Roran. He's back - and I am, too. I can feel it in my smile, and I can see it reflected in his eyes. Next thing I know, we're both laughing, and we pull each other into a tight embrace. And here we stay, laughing and hugging each other with an almost choking grip, drinking in the warmth of our friendship until at last the compressing, all-encompassing darkness starts to recede. It's still there. It's always there. I can still feel it skulking and slithering through my body, ready to take me over again in my next moment of weakness. It'll never leave me, never leave us, not as long as we're stuck here in this dead, perverse future of our world.

But the fight in me has finally broken the surface of the murk that threatened to drown it, and though it can't climb out, it's swimming its hardest to keep its head above the water. And right now, it's showing no signs of tiring.

I finally pull back from him, a few tears leeking from laughing so hard. But even as I drop a hand to wipe them away, the grin on my face never fades. He's no better off, beaming and losing a few tears as mirthful as mine.

"Come on," I tell him - in a voice above a whisper. "Let's get going."

He nods, still smiling as he wipes his own cheeks. Even as I let him go, my hand slips down into his paw. Squeezing it to bolster both our spirits, I take the first step, and he moves with me. We look at each other again, and the reaffirmation of our bond is as clear in his eyes as it feels within me.

The rock wall beside us never grows any less gray. The horizon beyond the cliff side never becomes any clearer. The earth we tread is as dry and cracked as we've seen it before. The few trees we pass are just as dead, just as twisted with the sunless agony they underwent before they died. The sky is no less dark, the air no less still, the sun and moon and stars no more likely to return to life in this place than Wigglytuff would ever be to turn down a Perfect Apple. The silence is no more comforting, and the threat of being captured again is just as thick in the air as it ever was.

But in spite of all the darkness this world throws at us, the warmth still glows in our palms, still flows from our linked hands through my weary body. As we walk, my eyes trace every crack in the ground, every line in the face of the craggy slopes, and for the first time, I realize why I can see every line, crack, and fault in such great detail. For the first time, I look up to the dark sky, so deeply gray it's almost black... and realize why it's so important that it isn't completely black. This world is far beyond dying - it's dead, and not just in the sense of frozen time. But somehow, this world itself is lit up against the darkness, every detail more clearly visible and every color more discernable than our world in the past ever was at night, even under a full moon and a cloudless sky. It never needed to be back then, since day was always just around the corner. But with no sun here, this world found other means of forcing back the dark.

Somehow, life continues to inhabit this place. We've encountered many Pokémon in the dungeons we've crawled through here, and the rooms were just as willing to supply fruit and berries as the ones back home. Dead though this world may be, it still stands in defiance of the darkness. The Pokémon here are struggling for their existence, diminished to their primal roots in a survival-of-the-fittest setting. But they are fighting, and they aren't showing any signs of giving up. Somewhere ahead of us, I know Grovyle is fighting too, and though his intentions still aren't clear, the thought of his refusal to give up is bolstering. The darkness affects them all, these Pokémon who were born here and lived here their whole lives - but they've learned to cope with it. They've found their own light, or whatever variation of light they need to keep them going. And they're holding fast to it.

As I give Roran's hand another squeeze and he returns it, I know that no matter what we face on the road ahead, no matter how hard the darkness tries to strangle us, we'll make it back. Our hope is somewhere just a dungeon or two ahead of us. And our guiding light is in each other.
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Comments: 47

Srarlight [2010-08-08 16:20:25 +0000 UTC]

Spectacular!! it has so mutch depth its amazing! the feeling intraduced is very emotional and very well writen it just flows through you! What a amazing exsperince you added to a already amazing story! Love it!

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RhaedaLeeMire In reply to Srarlight [2010-08-09 01:06:08 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much!

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WOOP-DE-DE-DOO [2010-08-07 02:59:25 +0000 UTC]

Oh. My. Gah.
SISTER, YOU HAVE TO KNOW HOW AMAZING THIS IS.

I'm not exagerating even a bit when I say that this is honestly the most beautiful piece I have read for the past few weeks, and I've read over thirty books since then that are written by well-known and often-published authors-the kinds of authors that make you look up from a page with tears in your eyes and whisper, "Wow."
Which I did about seventeen times while reading this.

RHAEDA, YOU ARE THE BEST. c,:

This is true art. <33;

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RhaedaLeeMire In reply to WOOP-DE-DE-DOO [2010-08-07 08:40:06 +0000 UTC]

My god, Woop! You have no idea how your comment just made me feel. :,//3 I'm still very much in the learning process, and I've read some inspirational work better than mine, but comments like this hearten me and encourage me to continue like nothing else can do.

As always, I'm so grateful for your support.

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WOOP-DE-DE-DOO In reply to RhaedaLeeMire [2010-08-11 02:38:05 +0000 UTC]

Teehee, just know that it's completely true. I personally enjoy your works much better than most published ones. XD

Anyway, I'm glad I could open your eyes to the truth about your awesome-ness. :'D

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RhaedaLeeMire In reply to WOOP-DE-DE-DOO [2010-08-11 03:20:07 +0000 UTC]

Well, that makes me very happy, then.

X'D

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Kylebean [2010-08-06 11:33:54 +0000 UTC]

This really is amazing! I love that part of the game, and i can just hear the absolute hopelessness that the music plays off there. You've really given so much insight into what the characters are more than likely thinking, because lets be honest, they don't say nearly as much as we all know they are thinking at that part.

I don't think i've seen any other fanfics revolving around this vital point in the game, and it's one of my favourites, Really, this is absolute genius

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RhaedaLeeMire In reply to Kylebean [2010-08-06 23:41:22 +0000 UTC]

Thanks so much! Indeed, a place that dark and lifeless would have to be emotionally draining for the Hero(ine) and Partner, especially since they've never been somewhere like that before. And I agree - the kidnapping and trip to the future world was definitely a great twist and one of the best parts of the game. The mood change was so apparent from the start and just gripping - as many times as I've replayed the games, I always make sure to do the entire future world sequence in one sitting.

There might be other fics detailing this point of the game - if not here, then perhaps at FanFiction.net. I couldn't tell you for sure, but it's a possibility. Thanks again - I think my own emotional turmoil was a big reason for why this came out so well. ^^

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Kylebean In reply to RhaedaLeeMire [2010-08-07 01:05:55 +0000 UTC]

Haha i know what you mean about doing that part of the game in one sitting i'm the same way :') And yeah angst is the mother of literary genius haha

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RhaedaLeeMire In reply to Kylebean [2010-08-07 09:06:01 +0000 UTC]

Lol, indeed. XD And the second comment made me laugh, but it's so true. X'D

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Super-Skitty [2010-08-03 17:46:04 +0000 UTC]

Sniff... god. I just died from the epicness. You're killing my emotions, Rhaeda!

Pft, I... bleh, I can't even begin to describe how this touched me. I just... wow. The relationship between Leah and the tree is a neat idea, and the way you described the, well, light in the darkness very nearly brought a tear to my eye. To think that the future is actually emotionally draining is a scary thought, but it makes for an excellent effect.

AND I JUST FELL IN LOVE WITH LEAHXRORAN ALL OVER AGAIN.

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RhaedaLeeMire In reply to Super-Skitty [2010-08-03 19:53:14 +0000 UTC]

Aww, thank you so much! Your comment just really set my day off to a good start. (And it's almost four in the afternoon right now. Shows you how much I've been sleeping in recently. )

The way I picture it, Pokémon who were born in the future world and lived there all their lives gained a sort of immunity to its effects. For Grovyle, who went back in time for a bit but came back, the darkness would have hit him hard at first, but he would have gotten used to it again rather quickly because he remembers what it was like. For Leah, it's a different case. She lost her memories and can only remember the past world, so she doesn't remember what it was like. But still, she did grow up there, even if she doesn't realize it, so she'd be the slightest bit stronger against it than Roran, who has never been there at all and feels it full force. Dusknoir is completely immune, though, because he fully embraced the darkness.

LEARAN FOREVER! AND TOKENXDAISY, TOO!

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Super-Skitty In reply to RhaedaLeeMire [2010-08-04 17:29:52 +0000 UTC]

Haha! *s you back* Well, I can't say I blame you. At least you can then go back to school refreshed. *hit*

Ah, I see. That makes a lot of sense. Gosh, you've been thinking about this pretty hard, haven't you?
Yay for Nintendo not making sense!

Oh, yes. Which reminds me - I have more Pokemon art to draw.

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RhaedaLeeMire In reply to Super-Skitty [2010-08-04 19:00:57 +0000 UTC]

Lol, hopefully. XD Because when I go back, I get the feeling I'll be running on empty again before the quarter's over.

Hahaha, indeed. I'm trying to make as many connections and tie as many loose ends as possible. Every now and then I'll notice some minor discrepancy in the games. For example, the sun? It rises in the east but sets in the north, if you think about it.

Awesome! I shall certainly give it a look-through when it's posted. I also need to read your chapters, but I'm saving them for when I'll have the time to really dig into them and give you good feedback.

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Karfu [2010-08-02 23:19:46 +0000 UTC]

This is amazing writing. It was gripping and engaging, enough for me to feel angsty about the tree, angry about being fooled by Dusknoir, and for me to smile when Leah and Roran smiled.

A truly inspirational piece, that's what this is.

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RhaedaLeeMire In reply to Karfu [2010-08-03 19:42:13 +0000 UTC]

Aw, thanks so much! There's nothing better than knowing the reader felt exactly how your characters felt and how you wanted them to feel.

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Karfu In reply to RhaedaLeeMire [2010-08-05 00:54:50 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome. You did an amazing job invoking emotion into this piece.

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RhaedaLeeMire In reply to Karfu [2010-08-06 23:56:04 +0000 UTC]

^^

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squizel [2010-08-02 17:02:52 +0000 UTC]

Wow... It's amazing Rhaeda! As everybody has said before me, the emotions are clear, and really defines the story. It's really good, and your an Amazing writer, keep on writing!

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RhaedaLeeMire In reply to squizel [2010-08-02 20:43:07 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much!

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UmbreonShadowWolf004 [2010-08-01 21:10:11 +0000 UTC]

This one was great as well! Your writing flows perfectly in this. The emotion really stands out too. This makes me want to write something lol.

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RhaedaLeeMire In reply to UmbreonShadowWolf004 [2010-08-01 21:34:46 +0000 UTC]

Thanks very much!

Hey, if I inspire someone to want to write, I'd say I'm doing my job. After all, it was someone else's work, in part, that inspired me to write this.

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UmbreonShadowWolf004 In reply to RhaedaLeeMire [2010-08-01 21:36:35 +0000 UTC]

Sure.

Yeah I'm easily inspired by great writing. XD Problem is, my writing's not too good so I usually don't make it public.

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RhaedaLeeMire In reply to UmbreonShadowWolf004 [2010-08-01 21:50:58 +0000 UTC]

I can understand that - there's a ton of old writing in my binders that I don't want to show people because it's so bad. But at the same time, I do want to share it to show people how far I've come. It's crazy.

All I can say is keep reading good work and keep practicing. You'll surprise yourself with how far you can go if you just keep at it.

I think you'd love the story I'm talking about - or stories, I should say. They're LoZ fics written by Rose Zemlya at FanFiction.Net - The Return and Reconciliation, which is the sequel.

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UmbreonShadowWolf004 In reply to RhaedaLeeMire [2010-08-01 22:03:13 +0000 UTC]

I would upload some of it. Well some of the better bits of it. But I would like to be more recognised for my art, not my literature. But I'll try that. I love to read actually so if I keep at it maybe it'll help me improve. ^^ But sure I'll take a look at those. Do you have links for them?

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RhaedaLeeMire In reply to UmbreonShadowWolf004 [2010-08-01 22:36:19 +0000 UTC]

That makes sense. You should shoot first and foremost for what you want to do most, and if art is your goal, I'm all for it. But it still won't hurt to practice writing, because it'll help you whenever you have to write papers for school and possibly reports for a future job (just throwing out a hypothetical possiblity there.) Writing is still my main goal, but I enjoy art just as much, so I'm happy to divide my time between the two whichever way my muse decides to take me.

Sure thing! Here you are: [link] Be prepared to spend several days reading - it took me almost a week to read them both, although I'm kind of a slow reader anyway.

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UmbreonShadowWolf004 In reply to RhaedaLeeMire [2010-08-01 22:42:20 +0000 UTC]

Yep. Art has always been my goal. I hope to be a comic artist or to design video game characters when I get older. But I can practice writing still. Actually I think I'll upload one of my old Sonic Fanfics and you could judge my writing for me if you like? Well you are busy alot so if not that's fine also. ^^

I'll start reading those really soon. It may actually take me longer though because I don't have a home computer. (Have I told you that before??? I think so...)

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RhaedaLeeMire In reply to UmbreonShadowWolf004 [2010-08-01 23:21:13 +0000 UTC]

That would be awesome if you could do one of those things in the future. Good luck!

Sure, I'll take a look someday. But it would probably be best if you waited until I start going through the rest of your gallery, that way you know I have your undivided attention. I'm trying to work on going through one person's work at a time. And I usually do artwork before writing because it takes longer to read it and I'm better equipped for giving solid reviews to written work.

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UmbreonShadowWolf004 In reply to RhaedaLeeMire [2010-08-01 23:35:26 +0000 UTC]

I really hope I can.

Ok that's fine. ^^ I would have to dig it out and type it anyway and I'm running low on computer time right now.

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Porridges [2010-08-01 00:36:37 +0000 UTC]

...Wow. I'm at loss for words. I swear, your writing is absolutely amazing! All the emotions, your style, and the way it just all flows together...you're honestly one of the top writers I've seen on this site. XD Love it!

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RhaedaLeeMire In reply to Porridges [2010-08-01 02:54:56 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much! I'm really proud of how this piece came out - it's like all of the advice and lessons I learned from my fiction workshop class last quarter finally started clicking.

There are better writers than me out there, though. For the past week, I've been blown away by this absolutely amazing Legend of Zelda fanfiction series I've been reading on FanFiction.Net. You should check it out - you'll love it. It's Rose Zemlya's The Return and Reconciliations (the sequel,) which are based off of Ocarina of Time and A Link to the Past, respectively.

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Amberheart123 [2010-07-31 15:03:40 +0000 UTC]

Wow. That was absolutely amazing. I read it once, said "Holy crow" and than read it again. You are really great at writing!

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RhaedaLeeMire In reply to Amberheart123 [2010-07-31 23:21:19 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much! Maybe I should get angsty more often, if it makes me produce work like this.

...Just kidding. XD

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Amberheart123 In reply to RhaedaLeeMire [2010-08-01 00:38:34 +0000 UTC]

Well, some of my best work has come off of emotions. I think that my mood greatly affects what I draw. If i'm hyper, than my drawings will likely show it. I don't know if that's for everyone, or just me.

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RhaedaLeeMire In reply to Amberheart123 [2010-08-01 03:08:21 +0000 UTC]

I think that's the way things work for a lot of artists and writers, especially poets. We all draw from experience, whether past or current.

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Piplup-fangirl66 [2010-07-31 07:05:30 +0000 UTC]

Umm... can I faint now? This is overkilling my emotions.

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RhaedaLeeMire In reply to Piplup-fangirl66 [2010-07-31 23:19:22 +0000 UTC]

I hope that's for a good reason, lol. XD

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flutterskies [2010-07-31 01:44:05 +0000 UTC]

I LOVE ELLIPSES!! : D
except dA turns them into this wierd combination of symbols.
ANYWAYS I'm posting this before I read so I'm really excited! I'm in love with your work!

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flutterskies In reply to flutterskies [2010-07-31 02:06:29 +0000 UTC]

Oh my gosh. I just read it.
You're writing is beautiful. Its addicting, it flows perfectly, and it completely understands the emotions and the scenery of the characters. Plus, it makes the readers feel the same concern that Leah does :')
I really wish I could give you negative feedback but I truly, truly can't.

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RhaedaLeeMire In reply to flutterskies [2010-07-31 23:18:18 +0000 UTC]

Whoops - I didn't notice this until now since you replied to yourself. XD But that's all right.

Thank you so much! As I said above, I was really emotionally invested in this piece, so I'm glad it showed.

What?! You wanted to give me negative criticism? Nah, you know I'm just kidding. XD I truly appreciate you looking for something you can make as a suggestion, though - it shows you care as a reader.

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flutterskies In reply to RhaedaLeeMire [2010-08-01 00:45:07 +0000 UTC]

I could defiantely tell! : D
And oops! Didn't mean to respond to myself. XD

Well, I try to give negative criticism on pieces to help the writer/artist grow, otherwise my comment is something stupid that is useless to the writer/artist except to make them more arrogent? XDD
Or confidence. That's good too. XDD

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RhaedaLeeMire In reply to flutterskies [2010-08-01 02:59:56 +0000 UTC]

Lol, I understand what you mean. But don't worry - I've already undergone and learned from my share of overconfidence, and I'm not inclined to turn arrogant anytime soon. I keep myself humble by reading books and fanfiction that are better than anything I can hope to achieve at my current writing level - and the trade-off is that I grow by reading them, as well.

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RhaedaLeeMire In reply to flutterskies [2010-07-31 01:51:28 +0000 UTC]

Lol, yep!
Yeah, the formatting can get pretty weird here sometimes. Like when p's turn into emoticons. xD
All righty, then. I'm looking forward to what you have to say.

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GreenSonic21 [2010-07-30 23:48:57 +0000 UTC]

Wow... You'll have to forgive me for having nothing to say. I'm literally at a loss for words.

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RhaedaLeeMire In reply to GreenSonic21 [2010-07-30 23:59:58 +0000 UTC]

Is that a good thing?

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GreenSonic21 In reply to RhaedaLeeMire [2010-07-31 00:03:06 +0000 UTC]

Indeed!

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RhaedaLeeMire In reply to GreenSonic21 [2010-07-31 00:12:27 +0000 UTC]

Then thanks!

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