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pokemonlover12 [2010-04-07 22:19:28 +0000 UTC]
It was a really amazing chapter.
Even though you may not be pleased with it now I am sure it will blossom into a amazing story!
Hey you better be sure to tell me if you are going to publish it! And when it comes out!
Keep up the great work!
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Fischy-Kari-chan [2010-04-07 13:29:43 +0000 UTC]
first part:
She... is afraid of water?
Didn't you say the great guardian spirit of the lake itself will tell her to go out into the world?
And doesn't she have 'water-ish' hair?
Then.. I guess.. she also can't swim? And I'm quite sure that something similar to my following word will happen: sometime she will have to go to the sea or an even bigger lake than the one in her village; she'll have to go into the water for some reason and nearly drown. Am I right? I guess somewhere in the story she'll have to be brave and to beat her fear.
Talking with animals I like that. Will she also have a horse?
second part:
I guess I found a reason why she is afraid of water. She was just a little kid but she does still remember that she was thrown into a river, she still know how it felt to nearly drown and now she's afraid of it ever happen again. Right?
I guess the people in the kindom have also other reasons why the abandon some of them, don't they? Or is it really just because the appearance?
Uh, I already know now, it will be darn hard for me to memorize all this unique names
The huge spider, that totally reminds me of the 2nd Harry Potter But that's okay, after all huge spiders are scary monsters which appear in nearly every fantasy world.
Uh, I just remembered something, the first boss in LoZ Ocanrina of Time is a huge spider-queen and it's killed with a slingshot. Slingshot - bow. See?
Sorry, I'm sure you want to hear everything but no comparison to LoZ. Especially not over and over again from me Sorry.
I'm curious what the villigers are going to say about the boy, but I'm sure that is the first step for Zelda to leave the forest.
How many chapters will the book have anyway? A real book with several hundreds of pages? Or just a longer short story, around twice or three times CiaP?
Guess that was all, yeah, as you could see I put both parts in one comment
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RhaedaLeeMire In reply to Fischy-Kari-chan [2010-04-09 18:23:51 +0000 UTC]
Uh, oh, looks like you gave me a double-post. ^^
Give me a few minutes, and I'll respond to the other copy.
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Fischy-Kari-chan [2010-04-07 13:29:25 +0000 UTC]
first part:
She... is afraid of water?
Didn't you say the great guardian spirit of the lake itself will tell her to go out into the world?
And doesn't she have 'water-ish' hair?
Then.. I guess.. she also can't swim? And I'm quite sure that something similar to my following word will happen: sometime she will have to go to the sea or an even bigger lake than the one in her village; she'll have to go into the water for some reason and nearly drown. Am I right? I guess somewhere in the story she'll have to be brave and to beat her fear.
Talking with animals I like that. Will she also have a horse?
second part:
I guess I found a reason why she is afraid of water. She was just a little kid but she does still remember that she was thrown into a river, she still know how it felt to nearly drown and now she's afraid of it ever happen again. Right?
I guess the people in the kindom have also other reasons why the abandon some of them, don't they? Or is it really just because the appearance?
Uh, I already know now, it will be darn hard for me to memorize all this unique names
The huge spider, that totally reminds me of the 2nd Harry Potter But that's okay, after all huge spiders are scary monsters which appear in nearly every fantasy world.
Uh, I just remembered something, the first boss in LoZ Ocanrina of Time is a huge spider-queen and it's killed with a slingshot. Slingshot - bow. See?
Sorry, I'm sure you want to hear everything but no comparison to LoZ. Especially not over and over again from me Sorry.
I'm curious what the villigers are going to say about the boy, but I'm sure that is the first step for Zelda to leave the forest.
How many chapters will the book have anyway? A real book with several hundreds of pages? Or just a longer short story, around twice or three times CiaP?
Guess that was all, yeah, as you could see I put both parts in one comment
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RhaedaLeeMire In reply to Fischy-Kari-chan [2010-04-09 18:45:42 +0000 UTC]
I always love your comments. Your theories are awesome, and sometimes your predictions can be pretty accurate.
Yep - water is her fear, and there's a reason for it. But yes, you're correct about her hair. I won't say anything else, though. *sly grin*
Me, too - animals are awesome. Call me a kid, but I like to think that they are able to communicate much like humans in some way - we've only lost our ability to understand them. Hence the little theory I hinted at in this chapter.
Yes, there is another reason. It's the reason why the Outsiders are so afraid of abnormal appearances in the first place, and while the villagers have some sense of it, Zelda may learn the full story in the future.
Lol, I wouldn't expect you to do that with a first chapter. And actually, some of the characters mentioned in the first chapter are new, such as Tesser and Entelia. I'm not sure what role Tesser will play yet, but I'll figure it out.
Aragog! You know, someone in my class also drew that connection. It seems now I can't escape comparisons to Harry Potter, either.
Lol, yes, I know what you're talking about. Gohma - I love how easy that battle is if you know the shortcut. XD
Well, I guess only the future will tell - if the villagers even see him in the first place. I left the end of the chapter open-ended for a reason.
It'll be a full-length novel, several hundred pages long. My first draft is only about halfway done, but it's 200 pages long. Now that I'm rewriting it, though, who knows how that will affect the total?
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RhaedaLeeMire In reply to Fischy-Kari-chan [2010-08-04 07:24:04 +0000 UTC]
And you wrote me this one back in... April?! *s*
First, Zeldalaine "imitates" LoZ and now HP... yeah, I know you were kidding, but still. I'm seriously starting to worry that the novel is, in fact, unoriginal. Of course, it's not like giant spiders aren't that hard to find in fantasy.
Yes, there is a shortcut to beating Gohma. When she climbs up to the ceiling and sits in place to drop her eggs, hit her eye with the slingshot when you get an opening. She'll drop from the ceiling and stay stunned longer than she usually does. This way, you can kill her in one round.
By the way, did you know you can beat Ganon with the broken Biggoron Sword? My friend I used to ride with on the bus would never believe me when I told him, but since I didn't complete the trade chain at the time, it was the only way I could beat him.
"What, the boy will come to consciousness and run away before Zelda[laine] can bring him into the village?" --> You got it... almost. There's one minor detail wrong here, but that's still a mostly accurate guess.
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GreenSonic21 [2010-04-04 04:06:13 +0000 UTC]
Looking great so far! Hope we can see more somewhere else if not here in the future.
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hypergirlnirani [2010-04-03 22:24:04 +0000 UTC]
this is really, really good~! I can't wait for the next part... Which, for me, means I'm enjoying a story a whole lot!
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flutterskies [2010-04-03 19:48:41 +0000 UTC]
You're so talented at writing battle scenes! 8D
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