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Snapsunset [2015-01-01 14:38:27 +0000 UTC]
While I found it a little comical that you used optics, that wouldn't be a correct word for this case.
The story might have to be written, but you shouldn't switch POVs during the chapter. I suggesting alternating them.
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Roxaslover31 In reply to Snapsunset [2015-01-01 21:10:30 +0000 UTC]
It was just something I was trying out, I saw it and wanted to try it.
And again, optics are a version that I use for eyes, I've gotten out of using it, but plainly , I don't want to be saying eyes over and over again because it gets repetitive and a little boring.
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RachWantsHerCupcake [2014-02-04 06:51:01 +0000 UTC]
T-toshiro why did you get a copyright on me??
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bunnyboo0308 [2013-07-26 01:03:16 +0000 UTC]
Oh my gosh oh my gosh!!!
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haru-ryuno [2013-07-25 05:43:15 +0000 UTC]
This is so good
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