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Published: 2005-06-27 16:54:26 +0000 UTC; Views: 69; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 0
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The black light gives you a darker glow as you utter again the words I wish that I had never spoke against you in my moment of weakness(or of truth)
So hide from the phantoms of our minds
Once conjoined but now destroyed
The whisper in my sleep that reminds me you’re not here
My driest tears of the thought that you are there with my contender
Oh won’t you please haunt me once again
Oh please
Just don’t contest the sincerity of my words
So misshaped and passed for granted
I must assure you that they were not a matter of my course
No matter how misdirected I may be
Denied the attention you request
So false your honesty and concern
For me, as I become the tool I detest
History repeats, but it’s a lesson I’ll not learn
So burn…
Dark skin, I’ve been singed but now you’re crisp
My impatience for your death
And I incinerate your lips
The sweet perfume of gasoline that ran across your breasts
I breathe in deeply just to taste your sweetly burning flesh
Oh please
I feel totally complete
As my hands brush across your hollow cheek
The final clinging sign of your life now erased
With my gently flowing breath the ashes dissipate
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Comments: 10
thank you! it's rather sick and twisted, but if you like Senses Fail i guess you can probably enjoy this
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lol. I think the only song by senses fail I have ever heard was on the CD u guys burned....lol
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ok mmmmm...first of all, im faving this.
second, i do like the beginning a lot-very honest and expressive...but i loved the sharp turn in takes a little over halfway through...its even sexy in a very dark kind of way.
ie The sweet perfume of gasoline that ran across your breasts
I breathe in deeply just to taste your sweetly burning flesh
i like that.
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woah! thank you sooo much for the fav! i really appreciate it
thank you for the honest critique... like i said, i was very insecure writing like this because i haven't really done it before.
i'll definitely look through your deviations
thanks again
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idk how i hadn't seen this one before...i just let my deviations get out of hand but i should always look at yours....you are amazing....i love the symbolism in this...you can feel what your saying and it brings out....idk you're just an amazing writer....i apologize for such a shitty comment....but it's nearly 5 am....and i'm kinda pissed off....but i just found this and had to comment....you have such fucking talent.....(and Fucking talent.....
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All of us make poems like these once in a while. They can't be explained, they just turn that way... lol, I've even made stuff like this. I just refuse to post
The words you used were placed well, and the flow was done well. Quite different then your other poems, not because of the 'brutality' but simply of the chosen rythm and words. Good job, Chris.
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Ooooh! I love this one! The carnage!
I really like how it just twists like that. It's wonderfulness.
I like the part with the gasoline on the breasts...it reminds me of the Spoilsbury Toastboy cartoon(www.fat-pie.com).
But, seriously, it's awesomeness. The brutality brought a smile to my face.
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awwwww! thanks for the input. it's nice to know that at least one person will be happy instead of disgusted by it
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See the thing is, it is disgusting. That's why I loooove it. ^__^
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