Comments: 9
carycomic [2017-07-04 03:50:03 +0000 UTC]
Great intro! Although, I'm puzzled by the request for an art critique. The opening chapter I read didn't have any accompanying art work or photo-manipulations.
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JovianJ [2014-03-17 23:16:47 +0000 UTC]
I'll begin with the brava I would normally reserve for the end of my comments. You set the stage of the story well, anyone who had been in a transitory life would get what the character felt, and perfectly understand her desire to escape into fantasy to dull the reality of what life had become. This toiled the soil of the imagination perfectly so it was ready for the planting of the seeds of what we knew would bloom into the ending. It was a delightful journey that given this is a part one, is just starting. Again, brava!
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sallyfourth In reply to JovianJ [2017-04-23 17:10:43 +0000 UTC]
Thank you. It's always great to read your comments.
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johnmadixsmith [2014-03-08 04:48:22 +0000 UTC]
Fun story! Looking forward to part 2!!
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robotcowboy [2014-03-07 11:40:42 +0000 UTC]
Was in the antagonist in this originally a gentleman?
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sallyfourth In reply to robotcowboy [2014-03-07 19:49:40 +0000 UTC]
Actually, yes. The very first version that I wrote and posted was M/f. It seems that the F/f version that you see here is the one preferred by a significant majority of my readers.
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janice-xyz [2014-03-07 02:52:06 +0000 UTC]
I remember this story! I've always loved it.
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