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Description One day I'll let her go -
my balloon child,
made of air and stuff so thin

I don't know how it holds her in.
Nor what I'm to do then,

but watch her go, with her string
still attached like a doubt

she's not cast off yet. Not today,
but soon. For now,
she's still my child balloon.



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Comments: 67

Murphy0101 [2013-07-03 15:03:24 +0000 UTC]

Brilliant; makes me remember my little girls. Thank you

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msklystron [2013-05-25 18:59:47 +0000 UTC]

My youngest is 13... and will be 14 soon. I can't tell you how much I love love love this poem. If she were here now instead of at a birthday party for a fellow 13-year-old, I'd drag her over to my laptop to read this so she'd know how I felt.

Congratulations on your DD!

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brokengod--veins [2013-05-04 22:50:18 +0000 UTC]

I'm in-love with this!

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thirdim3nsion [2013-04-09 01:36:05 +0000 UTC]

simple, pure, and fantastic.

a metaphoric masterpiece.

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salshep In reply to thirdim3nsion [2013-04-14 21:36:11 +0000 UTC]

Well. Dunno about masterpiece. But I am really pleased that you like it.

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Scr1b3 [2013-04-08 04:37:48 +0000 UTC]

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salshep In reply to Scr1b3 [2013-04-14 21:35:34 +0000 UTC]

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nomnomisbored [2013-04-08 04:10:37 +0000 UTC]

exquisite

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salshep In reply to nomnomisbored [2013-04-14 21:35:25 +0000 UTC]

Thanks, glad you liked it.

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AnimePluto [2013-04-08 00:45:51 +0000 UTC]

Amazing

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salshep In reply to AnimePluto [2013-04-14 21:35:09 +0000 UTC]

Thanks!

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AnimePluto In reply to salshep [2013-04-14 21:36:00 +0000 UTC]

np

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Redder-Than-You [2013-04-08 00:21:17 +0000 UTC]

Wonderful Poem.

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salshep In reply to Redder-Than-You [2013-04-14 21:34:57 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

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Redder-Than-You In reply to salshep [2013-04-15 21:54:13 +0000 UTC]

No problem~!

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Misora-Roll [2013-04-08 00:12:37 +0000 UTC]

Wow!

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salshep In reply to Misora-Roll [2013-04-14 21:34:48 +0000 UTC]

Thanks!

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rosepetal179 [2013-04-07 23:35:45 +0000 UTC]

i love this poem and it reminds me of how a person becomes a teen as they turn thirteen!

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salshep In reply to rosepetal179 [2013-04-14 21:34:28 +0000 UTC]

And what a transition it is! Thanks for reading.

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rosepetal179 In reply to salshep [2013-04-14 23:33:23 +0000 UTC]

u are very welcome! it also reminded me of a rugrats all grown up episode where angelica has to give up everything "pre-13"

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rkk414 [2013-04-07 23:18:44 +0000 UTC]

This is so cute <3

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salshep In reply to rkk414 [2013-04-14 21:33:55 +0000 UTC]

Ahaha, thanks!

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Hiland-Rose [2013-04-07 22:56:54 +0000 UTC]

I understand completely.... I am on this journey myself Congratulations on the DD. Thank you for sharing this!

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salshep In reply to Hiland-Rose [2013-04-14 21:33:42 +0000 UTC]

Thank you for reading.

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TheGalleryOfEve [2013-04-07 20:01:15 +0000 UTC]

Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!!

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salshep In reply to TheGalleryOfEve [2013-04-14 21:33:10 +0000 UTC]

Thanks for reading!

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TheGalleryOfEve In reply to salshep [2013-04-15 17:28:53 +0000 UTC]

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vanmall [2013-04-07 19:53:10 +0000 UTC]

Congrats on the Daily Deviation!

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salshep In reply to vanmall [2013-04-14 21:32:56 +0000 UTC]

Thanks!

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vanmall In reply to salshep [2013-04-15 06:30:57 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome.

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UltimateSketchQueen [2013-04-07 19:35:04 +0000 UTC]

Beautiful, I really like your metaphor here <3

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salshep In reply to UltimateSketchQueen [2013-04-14 21:32:47 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much!

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The-Raven-Soul [2013-04-07 19:33:50 +0000 UTC]

Awww! As a girl who's still thirteen herself, I have to say this is absolutely sweet and endearing! It makes me wonder if my mum thinks of me like that!

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salshep In reply to The-Raven-Soul [2013-04-14 21:32:32 +0000 UTC]

I bet she has moments where she does feel this way - it's so strange realising your 'baby' is just a couple of years away from adulthood..

And thank you for reading, I'm glad you liked it.

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elecxra [2013-04-07 19:10:25 +0000 UTC]

Congratulations on the absolutely fantastic Daily Deviation! ♥

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salshep In reply to elecxra [2013-04-14 21:30:52 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

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LostGryphin [2013-04-07 17:07:27 +0000 UTC]

Love the metaphor - congrats on the DD

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salshep In reply to LostGryphin [2013-04-14 21:29:58 +0000 UTC]

Thanks very much!

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Karinta [2013-04-07 13:59:50 +0000 UTC]

It's a very cool poem and a wonderful metaphor.

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salshep In reply to Karinta [2013-04-14 21:29:45 +0000 UTC]

Thanks, I'm glad you like it!

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Karinta In reply to salshep [2013-04-15 01:41:26 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome!

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Gryffgirl [2013-04-07 13:41:51 +0000 UTC]

Beautiful poem which truly speaks of love. As a mother (of two twelve-year-old girls!), I know exactly what you are thinking. Your words and images are beautiful. Congratuations on your DD!

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salshep In reply to Gryffgirl [2013-04-14 21:29:30 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much! It's so nice you can identify with my poem. A wonderful age, isn't it?

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arttart321 [2013-04-07 11:32:06 +0000 UTC]

awww!! I LOVE IT!!

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salshep In reply to arttart321 [2013-04-14 21:27:33 +0000 UTC]

Hee! I'm glad you do!

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Lintu47 [2013-04-07 08:59:57 +0000 UTC]

    Congrats on the well deserved DD!
    Have a nice day!

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salshep In reply to Lintu47 [2013-04-14 21:27:21 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much!

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Lintu47 In reply to salshep [2013-04-15 06:11:06 +0000 UTC]

    My pleasure

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Tuishimi [2013-04-07 08:07:28 +0000 UTC]

You deserve the DD. Very concise yet fun to read aloud and the image is focused and interesting.

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salshep In reply to Tuishimi [2013-04-14 21:27:04 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! I'm pleased you liked it read aloud, the majority of my poems are meant to be heard as well as read.

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